Second, in the first paragraph of ps, everyone has his own style of writing, but there is a widespread problem that shouting slogans has nothing to do with the topic. Everyone should make the first paragraph unique and eye-catching (make your opening remarks and the first paragraph eye-catching and unique). Some students started with an extraordinary experience in their own lives, but this experience must be related to their own majors, otherwise don't write. Some students write about celebrities in their hometown or college, but they are too beside the point. A classmate wrote about his application for economics. As a result, he said that he liked reading Shakespeare and asking questions in high school, and then he suddenly switched to studying economics. Everyone should think about whether this kind of thinking is very confusing. Others write directly that they want to apply for a major in a college, and then finish the second paragraph. This beginning is complete nonsense. It is nothing new that some students repeatedly copy the so-called model essays on the Internet. Look at the following sentence. Forrest Gump's mother said, life is like a box of chocolates, you never know what you're gonna get. She's right. On my 13 birthday, I got a greeting card in addition to a big chocolate cake. . .
The first paragraph of Ps should put forward the highlights of the article concisely in concise language, and the beginning should not be confused, let alone written as lyric prose. We should cut to the chase. Some students applied for a doctorate. In the first paragraph, they talked about junior high school. The language is very special and the translation traces are very heavy. For example, this sentence, how, my brave nature prevailed, let me stand up again and face failure.
Besides, don't write in the third person. Some students wrote: "Hey, useful!" The little boy is full of satisfaction. . . That little boy, actually me, has fallen in love with the fascinating. . Personal statement is personal, don't stand in the perspective of a third party, otherwise it is a letter of recommendation.
Third, talk about the middle part. Many people start this sentence immediately after writing the first paragraph. . ,。 . I was admitted to XXX after the national college entrance examination in a province of China on August 22nd, 2000 1980. After admission, my major became a name ... here, I not only received strict training ... but also ... you must remember that ps should not repeat other study documents, such as letters of recommendation, and what will appear on your resume. Don't say how many grades you got into any university or major, and then start listing a bunch of awards. Let's take a look at Cornell University's ps writing requirements (/PS/USPS/Cornell.htm). Personal statements are usually most effective when they focus on the following points: (Ps is particularly convincing) These aspects are: a problem or experience that you strongly feel, or a problem or experience that helps shape who you are; Major achievements or contributions you have made to your field or community. You must get rid of narcissistic, vague and abstract things, and don't list what you have won (avoid self-congratulatory statements, vague and abstract lists of ideas and achievements, jargon and professional words).
In addition, everyone likes to introduce their own school, but your introduction should be concrete and vivid, and don't always like to use words like famous schools and famous schools. Some students wrote, I entered a university, which has achieved great success in the fields of telecommunications and It in China. What is big compensation? Do you have any specific concepts? You don't have to stop at introducing schools, you should quickly turn to one point through this introduction: you have received a high-quality education.
The biggest problem is that ps should not be written as a running account, and each paragraph should have a core sentence. For example, some students wrote this. In the first year, I was just a cautious learner and followed the teacher's steps steadily. In the second year, I spent most of my time leading the student union, so I tried to be more efficient. This is not. Ps is at all, only memoirs. Please note: you should put the most important information at the beginning and end of a paragraph (put the most important sentences at the beginning and end of a paragraph. When people are skinpasses, they read the first sentence and then the last sentence. Make a good first and last impression with substantive statements. Don't start or end on meaningless things. )
Fourth, don't write questions and answers unless specifically requested. Many students write like this. First, my old dreams played a key role in my decision-making, and then a long introduction. Second, I have a solid academic background, and then the following paragraph. Until the sixth time my family background. Some students write like this. Why math? WHY ME？ This is definitely not ps, and Qian Qian must avoid such an answer. As mentioned in the ps Writing Requirements of Washington University (/PS/USPS/wash.htm), avoid over-used phrases and non-specific information (avoid using over-used phrases or non-specific information).
Fifth, don't write vague words that contribute to the country and socialism. Besides traveling to Taiwan Province, I realized the importance of experiencing the real world. In the past three years, I seized every opportunity to travel far away and observe the vibrant society and economy in China. Don't use the same sentence patterns. For example, some students always like to use the words impressive, even repeatedly in a paragraph, or just keep saying smart. There are similar sentences, computer animation is my favorite and first choice, and then every two sentences I write my first and most interested in graphics and design. Language problems and top-heavy. For example, most students majoring in computer science think this task is too simple; However, I don't agree. In fact, the language problem is still a small problem. You can spend 100 yuan to hire a serious and responsible foreigner, find a corner of the school to modify it and exchange what you want to say. In fact, the key issues are content setting and structural layout.