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A mountain peak in the snow

Liu Xiaozhong, Hunan Yongzhou No.1 Middle School.

Today is the thirteenth day. Even sitting in the nearest place to the fire, in the low cabin, I can't feel the warmth at all.

I sat on one side, my fingers trembling with cold, writing notes, while others sat in a ball and chatted with each other. Almost everyone frowned and huddled. They think it might be warmer because it's too cold here.

We are a group of climbers. They have climbed all the peaks in the world. Our greatest wish is to climb the summit of Mount Everest and stand at the highest place in the world. So we started planning and came here six months ago. However, this process does not seem as beautiful as we thought. The cold environment and the snowstorm for more than ten days make it difficult for us to move.

Just thirteen days ago, we celebrated our arrival halfway up the mountain. An avalanche brutally devoured one of our companions. This incident shocked everyone. We thought that climbing Mount Everest would be more difficult and arduous than climbing other peaks, but we never thought that we would lose our companions. The heavy blow and harsh environment forced us to stop here. We are all hesitating whether to move on and continue our dreams.

"We should not stop or retreat. David's unfortunate departure should be a lesson for us to lose our vigilance and misjudge the situation. We are going to climb up and climb up with David's wishes. " The speaker is a blonde western girl. Her firm eyes seem to encourage everyone. Finally, we decided to move on and climb!

The more you climb and get closer to the top of the mountain, the worse the environment becomes. Food began to become scarce, and a companion said that he was dying, and he felt that he was going to die here. We support each other and move forward step by step with the faith of our dead companions.

When we climbed to the 25,000-foot-high "Fire Face", the south summit of Mount Everest was challenged by snow. We fix ourselves with ice picks, claws and pre-repaired road ropes and adjust our breathing in thin air. At this altitude, the oxygen content is only 2/5 of the sea level, so we have to stop and look around. Everything is white except snow, leaving only air. But the bad weather forced us to evacuate. Qin Gang's hands were frostbitten, and Daming's hands and legs were frostbitten to varying degrees. Anne, a western girl who started talking, fainted several times because of physical discomfort, but her eyes were still bright after waking up. She said that she would be more frustrated and brave, even if she starved to death, she could not give up.

A month passed and we finally climbed to the top of the mountain. The mountain peaks in this snowstorm are beautiful and mysterious, and we can hardly breathe, so we can only look at the beautiful scenery along the way by "canned oxygen".

At this time, I realized; Where the heart is, the scenery is there.

There are two highlights in commenting on this article: First, the material of "Climbing Mount Everest" is skillfully used, and my personal feelings are integrated, and the joys and sorrows, bittersweet feelings and life and death tests in the climbing process are compared, highlighting the death threat, food shortage and frostbite costs associated with the beautiful feelings like snow-capped mountains, profoundly reflecting the theme of the material-success requires firm faith and tenacious will, and embodying the author's sense of urgency and humanistic care. Secondly, the mountaineering experiences of this group of mountaineering enthusiasts are skillfully interspersed in the writing, and the three narrative methods of chronological narrative, flashback and interpolation are integrated into one, and they are read in one breath without any pretense. The truth of the details and the choice of props reflect the author's ingenuity and meticulous conception. At the end, the famous saying "the most beautiful township cadres" was used, which hit the nail on the head and skillfully pointed out the topic.

Test analysis:

Test analysis: This year's material composition is not only a statement of facts, but also a valuable judgment, which denies the behavior that "most people refuse to go and can't stay for two years" and affirms the noble sentiment of the secretary of the township party Committee that "with firm belief and tenacious will, he worked hard there for eight years and led everyone to build the hinterland into beautiful countryside", while the last sentence of the material is "Where is the heart, where is the beautiful scenery" and "Grasp the key".

Different candidates have different views on the topic "Where is the heart, where is the scenery", some write persistence, some write faith, and some think it is the epitome of grassroots, hard work and Chinese dream. Judging from the materials themselves, there is almost no difficulty in examining the questions: a secretary of the township party Committee has worked in a very poor place for eight years and turned this village into the "most beautiful village" because he has a firm belief behind him: anyone who does great things inherits a belief and insists on a bright future, that is, only by calming down and working hard can things be done well. From this perspective, the positive energy and positive values that materials should advocate are worthy of recognition. At present, all walks of life are establishing and vigorously practicing socialist core values. The materials integrate "the persistence of human mind and the beautiful changes in mountain villages" into the college entrance examination questions, giving people a feeling of "very social and very present". Grasping two key words "firm belief" and "tenacious will" and a key sentence "where the heart is, the scenery is there" will not stray from the topic.

Idea 1: Pay attention to safety when you come. No matter what environment you are in, good or bad, as long as you are good at discovering, you will find the beauty. If you go wrong, you will have the scenery when you go wrong.

Idea 2: the heart is there, and the scenery is there. "Where the heart is, the scenery is there" has two meanings: one is mentality, and the other is ambition. An idle man, his mentality, feels that the surrounding environment is the same everywhere; Promising people will try to change their surroundings wherever they go.

Idea 3: Heart or water. Without thinking about people's joys and sorrows, staying alone in the long river of work is like man-machine integration, which is also the most beautiful scenery.

Idea 4: You can do one thing well with your heart. A rural grassroots cadre, through eight years' efforts, led the villagers to build a backwater into beautiful countryside. Without love and persistence, it is difficult for him to go to the end with enthusiasm. Similarly, he can't do well without concentration.

Idea 5: Plum blossoms come from bitter cold. Adhere to ideals, stick to the countryside, take the lead in construction, and make selfless contributions. Every dream needs persistence and persistence, and there will never be a pie in the sky. Especially in the face of difficulties, there is no shortcut, only to overcome difficulties. The edge of the sword comes from sharpening, and the fragrance of plum blossoms comes from bitter cold. It's better to throw off your arms and work hard to prosper the country. As long as you are willing to find a way and work hard, the poorest mountain corner can also become the most beautiful country. A village has changed so much, so has a person, a family, a region and a country.