1. The article reported that I was slightly dissatisfied with my deskmate's appearance and temperament earlier, so I disagreed with my deskmate everywhere. Finally, I really learned the beauty of my deskmate's mind through one thing.
The citation of nicknames in the article not only highlights the characteristics of the characters, but also shows the emotional color of the article. 2. The appearance of the article is meticulous and vivid, and the characters' language is natural, which conforms to the characters' personality characteristics and depicts the characters vividly.
3. The content is detailed and full, the layout is complete, the language is fluent, the level is clear, and the true feelings of the young author are exposed between pen and ink. Second, it looks like a cross talk and a short drama.
the theme is novel, which makes people feel refreshed. What copying homework, what pretending to learn for the teacher, all show the signs that some middle school students don't like learning and get up early to copy homework.
But the bad factors described by the author are worth thinking about. The article is rich in imagination and novel in conception.
The language of the article is highly pithy, and the use of fairy tale tricks is very innovative. 2. How do celebrities in my hometown comment on the sixth grade Chinese composition < P > There is always a person around me who I admire ten times in my mind.
Her name is Qi Xuesheng. She is the same age as me. She was once my neighbor and a little celebrity in our community. Praying for snow has a red egg face, obsidian eyes, dizzy cheeks and a youthful and lively atmosphere all over.
by her name, you can tell that she must be an expert singer. I really guessed right. She has participated in many singing competitions and other competitions. If she enters her room, she will see countless awards.
the singing voice of praying for snow is particularly beautiful. I remember that in the finals of a singing competition, everyone was eliminated one by one, and the rest were all "future singers", and the voice of praying for snow was among them.
Everyone played their best when singing, which made us all very worried about whether the snow-praying voice would be eliminated. When it was the turn of the competition, she was as cool as a cucumber and gave full play to her talents.
Then, the judges and the audience were intoxicated by her singing and won the championship with everyone's applause! However, a mere primary school student has such a cold and intoxicating voice. I think it is natural for her to practice hard at home to get where she is today! My composition has always been very good, and I have participated in many composition competitions! But while praying for snow is singing well, learning does not fall behind-especially composition. I remember once, I participated in a composition contest for primary and middle school students with Qi Xuesheng.
Everyone is sweating wildly and writing a composition. They inadvertently look up, only to see that Qi Xuesheng has finished writing the composition and is revising it over and over again. Now I am even more nervous. My palms are sweating, and my mind is constantly weighing words. At the same time, I wonder why she can write so fast. And so relaxed? After the game, it was undoubtedly the sound of praying for snow that won the championship. I asked the snow-praying voice enviously, "Is it easy for you to write so fast?"? ""Yes, "she said." It's not difficult. I practiced at home. "
I suddenly understood that the reason why she writes fast and well is the result of reading and practicing more at ordinary times. It really pays off. 3. Comments on the composition
Five generations went to war, and the four seas divided the beans and cut them, and they were gentle. Li's monarch and ministers in the south of the Yangtze River are still gentle, so there are words like "a small building blows through the jade and chills the cold" and "wrinkles a pool of spring water". Although the language is very strange, the so-called "the voice of national subjugation mourns to think" is also true. When you catch this dynasty, you will be well prepared for the ceremony and music. It has been cultivated for more than a hundred years, and only then did Liu Tuntian become a hero, changing the old voice into a new one, and publishing a collection of movements, which was so great that it was claimed to the world; Although it is melodious, the words are dusty. There are Zhang Ziye and Song Zijing brothers, Shen Tang, Yuan Jiang, and Chao Ji, who have followed suit. Although there are witticisms from time to time, they are broken. To Yan Yuanxian, Ouyang Yongshu, Su Zizhan, scholars, heaven and man, as small lyrics, as straight as swimming in the sea, but they all read poems that are not velvet. And often not harmonious, why? Gai Shi's poems are divided into flat sides, while the lyrics are divided into five tones, five tones, six laws, and turbidity. For example, the so-called "Slow Voice", "Flowers in the Rain" and "Xi Qian Ying" in modern times not only leveled the rhyme, but also entered the rhyme; "Jade Louchun" is a book with a flat rhyme, with a note to go and a note to enter. If you bet on the sound, you will be in harmony; If you enter the sound, you can't sing Wang Jiefu, Ceng Zi Gu, the article is like the Western Han Dynasty. If you write a small lyric, people will be utterly lost and unreadable. However, there are only a few people who know the words. After Yan Shuyuan, He Fanghui, Qin Shaoyou and Huang Luzhi came out, they could only know it. There is no description of bitterness. He is bitter and less severe. Qin dynasty is dedicated to the emotion, but less to the reality. For example, a beautiful woman from a poor family, although extremely beautiful and rich, is ultimately lacking in wealth. Yellow is still true and has many defects, such as defects in jade, and the price has been reduced since then.
Li Qingzhao's On Ci
Wang Guowei's On Ci
Zhang Zhongxing has a book on composition
Poetry
Wen Xin Diao Long
China's classic literary theory can be downloaded from the Internet. 4. How to write composition evaluation's words
It is rich in association, delicate in language and full of emotion, so it is ok. Whether the center is prominent, whether it is off-topic, whether the language is vivid, etc., point out the shortcomings of the exercises and make suggestions to encourage students, and the requirements should not be too high. Treat their exercises with children's eyes! Handwriting
A, the notebook is delicate and tidy, just like the street in a seaside town, but it is not dirty at all ... It's really comfortable to read the straight handwriting ... Your handwriting is as beautiful as printed ... I'm ashamed that my handwriting is not as good as yours ...
b, casually, how can it not be like a cat's handwriting ... It's not in the middle of the grid. I don't believe that your handwriting is bad, and it will always be so scribbled ... Write carefully and patiently, and you will write better than me ...
Content
A, such rich content is almost the same as that written by the writer ... Your exercise is flesh and blood, and it is really a great enjoyment to read ... Your composition is specific, and I am very enjoyable to read. To write so many words ...
b, the dry content is like boiled water, and it has no taste at all. It's better to add more beautiful words ... Not as many words as Liu Weiwei (or give other poor students names) ... Don't you feel a little embarrassed ... Your composition is like a 9-year-old woman's mouth, dry and empty, and her speech is leaking straight ...
Sentence
A. Very fluent ... the metaphor is very apt, which shows that you have always been careful in observation ... How did you come up with such a clever anthropomorphic sentence ... How appropriate the rhetorical question is to be used here ... This exclamatory sentence expresses your true feelings at that time ... The ancient poems are quoted just right, and I will use the poems I have learned in my composition in the future ... The clever use of the two-part allegorical saying makes my stomach ache with laughter ...
Just like walking on a bumpy road in the country, it is easy to fall down if you are not careful ... The sentence seems to be cut off by someone, and it is incomplete ... After you have written it, you will find the impassability ... Don't be afraid of trouble, good articles are all changed ... You can't always expect others to correct it for you, but learn to correct each sentence yourself ... The layers
A and the sections are clearly divided ... The sections are appropriate. The paragraphs are clear ...
b, the hierarchy is chaotic, and one section contains so much content that I feel breathless when reading it ... There are too few sections, so you can't bear to divide more ... The middle section can be divided into several sections ... The first and second sections should not be divided, so it should be merged ... This section can't be linked with the above sections ...
Details
A. Yes ... the incident is described in detail ... The scenic spots are described in the order of the tour, with emphasis on ...
B and section X are too wordy ... I can't see what the key point of this composition is ... What is not the key point should be simply written ...
Title
A, the topic is fresh, like bamboo shoots in spring, tender and crisp. Where did you come up with such a wonderful topic ... The topic is marked with punctuation marks (ellipsis, question mark, exclamation point, dash), which is different from others ... I like your interesting topic very much ... < P > B, the topic is old-fashioned, and people are not interested in reading your composition ... Everyone will remember such a topic, which is too general ... The content seems to be out of line with the topic ... It's more appropriate to change the topic ... I think it's better to call it "...
Punctuation
A. Punctuation is well-behaved, which shows that you are a person who does things honestly ... Punctuation is very accurate ...
B. No matter how wonderful the content is, the punctuation is sloppy, and everyone is unwilling to read your composition ... Choke me to death ... Punctuation is not delicious ... Punctuation is played too much, which makes me jump like a lame man walking ... I hope you can play every punctuation carefully ... You should put a full stop when the meaning of a sentence is finished ... Ellipsis occupies two squares, and you can't play in one square ...
-Encouraging words
This one is written more than the last one, so keep on cheering. You will hopefully become a member of the composition team ... Read more books, observe carefully and think hard, and your work will soon be published in newspapers and periodicals ... Ding Yishan and Lou Wei are not child prodigies. They can do it, and I believe you can do it, and they will perform better than them ... All of them are taught by Teacher Qin. Are you still afraid that your writing level will not rise ?.. I insist on treating it as a document every night, and that's how I master many good words ... Nothing is difficult in the world. Practice a pair of "thief eyes" ... Congratulations on the last time your composition was read aloud in class. Try to write better next time, ok? ..... Don't always worry that you are more stupid than others, as long as you follow Mr. Qin's request, your dream will come true sooner or later ... You can't always write anything, because you have paid too little sweat ... Lend the diary and composition of the composition group to read more, which is sure to be of great help to you ... Inspiration never likes to visit lazy people ... Diligence and diligence, when your name appears in the newspaper, You will feel that it is worthwhile to suffer a little ... 5. How to write the feelings and comments after reading the composition
Writing evaluation is an important part of Chinese teaching, and giving students composition evaluation is the crowning touch of this part. It is also the teacher's response to the students' enthusiasm for writing. From the students' writing psychology, what students are most eager to know after each composition is the teacher's feedback on the composition. In order to find a sense of self and academic achievement from the comments on the composition, so every sentence in the comments on the teacher's composition has a direct impact on the psychology of students' composition and is concerned about their interest and confidence in composition. So how to write composition evaluation well? Below I will talk about my understanding on how to write composition evaluation well, for the reference of peers to correct mistakes. First, it is necessary to give affirmation and praise to the advantages of students' composition by retaining criticism on the form and skills of the composition. Similarly, it is also necessary to correct and criticize the shortcomings of students' composition-avoiding its shortcomings can promote its strengths. Besides, composition is different from usual speaking and chatting, and I want to say. A, B, C, D, average pen, writing without focus; Indiscriminate use of dialect slang, coining words, saying things that are not standardized, and so on must be pointed out in the comments, but they should not be killed with a stick, but should be given hope and encouragement. "I believe you can make things clear one by one in the next composition." "If you can make a long story short, the effect will be multiplied." "Your article is beautiful, if the words are beautiful, too. Students will not be bothered by reading it, but will be very comfortable. They accept their opinions from the heart, and will write with greater enthusiasm and energy next time, and will try their best to avoid similar shortcomings. Second, using interesting language. Cheng Yi, an educator in China, said, "If you don't teach people interest, you will not be happy to learn." The same is true of comments, which are boring and rigid, and students will not be happy to read them, which will not play a guiding role. It can not only create a pleasant learning environment-even if it is criticism, students are willing to accept it and become the adhesive between teachers and students-but also achieve the effect of "not making people think deeply after laughing". A student can't use punctuation correctly in his composition, and once he teased it to the end, I commented after his composition: "The full stop stared at his round eyes, the eyebrows of quotation marks were raised, and the exclamation point began to cry; My little master, how did you neglect our proper place in the text? " Third, the comments should pay attention to literary talent, and publicize personality. composition evaluation is actually a teacher's work. The beautiful and personalized comments, the well-written comments and the comments of hit the floor can give students a refreshing feeling, a literary edification and a pleasant aesthetic enjoyment with its unique charm, which will make students remember it for a long time and never forget it. For example, the article on writing scenery, Write "to observe", "please observe carefully" and "observe carefully" again and again, and students will turn a blind eye if they find it boring and unattractive. Write like this: Beauty is everywhere. For our eyes, it is not a lack of beauty, but a lack of discovery. Such subtle expression, although with the same meaning, can not only let students appreciate the teacher's literary talent, It is also easy for students to remember. Try to improve the form and form of comments. For example, using ancient poems, famous sayings, exquisite fables, philosophical stories, wonderful metaphors, punctuation patterns, etc. to evaluate, and strive to be lively, novel, fascinating and impressive. Individualized and eclectic comments are not only demonstrations for students. It is a tangible education and an intangible spur. Fourth, the psychologist Maslow believes that human needs can be divided into low-level and high-level, among which respect needs and self-realization needs are the highest needs of human beings. For the problems in students' exercises, teachers should stand on the perspective of understanding and respecting students, change the image of composition evaluation as a preacher in the past, and have equal and patient spiritual exchanges with students in a tone of consultation and inquiry. Let students feel the teacher's care for him in an atmosphere full of humanity, so that they can have a natural understanding of their own values, stimulate their interest in writing, arouse their thinking about problems and make progress. For example, can this word be changed? This sentence is too long, can you separate it with punctuation? Are you right? Look carefully again and see if you can find anything, can you ... Once, a teacher found that a student in the class copied someone else's article.