1. Primary school students' composition batch

[Primary school students' composition batch] Primary school students' composition composition teaching has always been the top priority in Chinese teaching, and primary school students' composition batch. But there is no doubt that composition is also the most troublesome for teachers and students. For students, it is difficult to write essays; for teachers, it is difficult to criticize essays. In the process of teaching composition in primary schools, many teachers have the same feeling. They spend long working hours and squeeze out lesson preparation time to seriously correct students' compositions, but their hard work is like "a river of spring water flowing eastward." , with little effect.

Last semester, every time I collected 84 essays and 84 weekly diaries and put them in front of me, I often felt that they were like two big mountains, so we kept digging mountains every day. Foolish Old Man moved the mountains, and even moved God, and asked two gods to move the two mountains away. But these two mountains in front of us have been moved and moved back again. When will we see a flat road? The most regrettable thing is that teachers sit in the office, silently "digging away", and painstakingly circle the dots. They often don't even read the long list of comments they wrote, and receive the composition text they just sent. , stuffed it casually into the schoolbag. No wonder Mr. Ye Shengtao also said with emotion: "All teachers have revised countless composition texts, and they all have a unified understanding that revising compositions is a futile task." I also often ask myself: Is it so difficult to love you when I am correcting my homework? In order to change this situation, starting from the eleventh week of last semester, I mobilized my God-students to move these two mountains together. I was also nervous at the beginning, not knowing if it was possible. But practice has proven: the effect is quite good. The students were highly motivated during the correction process and corrected more seriously and carefully than the teacher. After the correction, the students paid much more attention to the comments written by their classmates than they paid attention to the comments written by me before. It turns out: Can students learn to correct? The answer is yes. Can even underachievers learn it? Yes. Therefore, I feel that homework review should be a bridge for emotional communication between teachers and students, and it should be open and diverse. Teacher-evaluation and teacher-revision, self-evaluation and self-revision, mutual evaluation and mutual correction... should all be adopted randomly. Below I will give a more detailed explanation of composition correction in five aspects, in order to inspire others.

1. Exploration of primary school composition correction methods

(1) Teachers’ corrections, promoted in batches (details omitted)

(2) Face-to-face criticism between teachers and students, tit-for-tat :

The teacher corrects the composition in the office in order to improve the students' writing level, but the teacher's well-intentioned correction may not be truly understood by every student. The comment on this composition clearly stated that the transition was unnatural, and the transition in his next composition would still be unnatural. However, in front of students, the method of analyzing and correcting their compositions in front of students is time-consuming and labor-intensive, but the effect is obvious and it is also very necessary. There are two ways to implement the face-to-face batch method: 1. One-to-one, that is, one teacher to one student. Using this approach, teachers can comprehensively diagnose and treat problems that appear in a student's composition, ranging from chapter structure to punctuation of words and sentences. Teachers and students can have direct dialogue during the correction. During the dialogue process, the teacher can understand the students' original motivations for choosing words, sentences, and layout, so the corrections can be more targeted and appropriate. The results show that the face-to-face criticism method can make students feel the teacher's care in a friendly and harmonious atmosphere, and they are more willing to accept the teacher's corrections and can more easily understand the teacher's judgment. 2. One-to-several, that is, one teacher versus several students. Using this approach, teachers should classify the problems in all students' writing in advance, and then focus on correcting them in batches (four or five students in each batch are appropriate). This kind of correction method can focus students' attention, keep the teacher's corrections in mind, and avoid making similar mistakes again in the future. Of course, the focus of correction is not fixed for every student. One shortcoming is overcome. , other shortcomings still exist, or new shortcomings appear. Therefore, after a certain stage, it is necessary to rearrange the combinations and conduct a new round of classification and review to help students continuously improve their writing skills. 2. Does anyone know how I write eyebrow review?

Everyone gradually realizes the importance of eyebrow review when correcting essays.

There are some truths in the student's composition that are not complete, or they are incomplete. If you add eyebrow criticism, you can tell him why he is wrong, so that the story is complete; if you say that the organization is irregular, you can point it out. That's not right and should be said this way. Sometimes the changes are made, and another batch of grave fillings seems to put the finishing touches on the work.

So how and what should be approved? What I pay attention to are mainly these aspects: 1. Changing the text of the book of Zhangfa. For Shao Chou, the general white pig loss needs to be revised. In order to let the students know why it needs to be changed, that is, why it is wax indigo, it also needs to be criticized. For example, these two sentences: "Indeed, I also encountered this situation during the two-month summer vacation. (Some people) said something half-jokingly: 'Alas! Teacher college graduates still farm.

< p> '" "You... under such a good situation (jumping), your desire to leap forward is bold and unrestrained in the socialist countryside." I changed it (Note: I quoted a sentence from the student's composition, ** *The parentheses in the middle are added by me, the square brackets are deleted words, and the black dots are bows! Please pay attention) Jingfen Bieyebrow: "The sentence elements are incomplete and the main subject is missing."

"The sentences are incomplete, and the words are missing." Another example: "We...will shoulder the important task of educating the next generation to become all-round development."

This sentence adds more The word "人的" means "lack of a central temple." The above example is a common mistake in student writing: incomplete ingredients. Another common mistake is improper matching. 3. How to correct an essay

Comments at the beginning of essay correction

1. The beginning of the article is simple and appropriate, and it is very artistic to set off the character's mood through the description of the environment.

2. The beginning is concise and to the point

3. The beginning of the article is novel and has the effect of preempting others. So that readers can have an impression of the characters as soon as they meet them.

4. The beginning of the article is engaging and attracts readers. …The combination of points and aspects makes the article vivid, concrete, and detailed.

5. The language of the article is vivid and rich, and it is highly readable.

6. The beginning is extraordinary and attracts readers

7. The beginning is touching and has real feelings.

8. The explanation at the beginning of the article is very clear, which plays the role of leading the whole article.

9. The article selection is novel and arouses readers’ desire to read on.

Comments on the essay correction process

1. With full passion, it describes... …

2. The key points are highlighted, the details are appropriate, and the content is specific.

3. The metaphor is appropriate and the words are vivid.

4. The language of the article is easy to understand, close to the reality of life, and makes people feel warm when reading it.

5. ... told us in a relaxed and pleasant tone, which is endlessly memorable.

6. The narrative is natural and vivid, the structure is compact, the connection is natural and coherent, and the center is prominent.

7. When describing scenery, the language is concise and accurate, and the associations are vivid and emotional, and the scenes are naturally integrated.

8. By enriching the character’s language and actions, you can bring out the character’s ideological quality.

9. The article is both narrative and lyrical.

10. Make full use of a combination of dynamic and static writing, supplemented by metaphors, personification and other techniques

Closing comments for essay correction

1. The ending points out the center appropriately. The language is simple but profound and thought-provoking.

2. Switch with feeling and end with feeling. This will make the article coherent and coherent, and at the same time make the article's theme loop around and have a strong appeal.

3. The praise for the characters at the end is sincere and touching.

4. The implicit ending of the article not only highlights the topic, but also is thought-provoking.

5. Focus on expressing emotions at the end, which not only reflects the beginning but also summarizes the entire text. Coherent from beginning to end, in one go.

6. The vivid depiction of details can effectively reveal the inner world of the characters. This is the success of this article.

7. The article ends with..., it is concise and concise, but its meaning is endless.

8. The sentence that reveals the central point at the end of the article is really a clear-cut and summary sentence, short and powerful.

9. The ending is full of expectations and enthusiasm. The words have been finished, but the meaning is still unfinished. < /p>

Eyebrow batch is also called side batch.

In the old days, compositions were written vertically, and the teacher would write the comments in the blank space above the composition, which is equivalent to the position of the eyebrows on the face, so it is called eyebrow criticism. The advantage of eyebrow criticism is that the position of the comments corresponds to the students' composition sentences, which is clear at a glance and convenient for students. Learn and revise. The disadvantage is that the white space left is limited.

Nowadays, the composition is written horizontally, and the teacher writes the comments in the blank space on the right side of the composition, so it is called side criticism. Criticism refers to the comments written between the upper and lower lines of the composition. If the manuscript is rearranged in type, it is written between the upper and lower sentences.

Its advantages and disadvantages are the same as Meipi but more so than Meipi, that is, the position of the comment is closer to the sentence being commented, and the blank space left is smaller. Comments written between paragraphs. The advantage of paragraph comment is that it pays attention to the structure of the article. It seems to have a sense of integrity and is very clear. The disadvantage is that it is generally suitable for type rearrangement of manuscripts. Otherwise, it is left to the teacher to write comments. The space is really too small, and there is not much difference in form from Jiabai.

In the usual review and revision of compositions, paragraph criticisms appear rarely, and even if they do appear, they are mostly in a few words or even a simple sentence. The final batch is called the general batch or the general review. It is a comment written at the end of the student's homework and provides an overall evaluation of the composition.

Its advantage is that it has strong integrity and leaves sufficient space for teachers to use. Because it is an overall summary and evaluation of students' work, teachers tend to be more attentive and write more heavily. Sometimes the general evaluation itself is an appreciation article, which has a strong inspiration and encouragement effect on students.

Final batch is the most commonly used method for teachers to evaluate and revise essays. 5. Help write the eyebrow review and general review of this article

Gratitude

"Grateful heart, thank you for having you, accompanying me throughout my life, allowing me to be brave enough to be myself..." When it comes to gratitude, the song "Thanksgiving Heart" can't help but come to mind. Really, I think, if I were asked to be grateful, I might never be able to be grateful enough in my life...

Gratitude - the love given to me by my parents.

Meibiao 1. It is easy to misunderstand here. Should I be grateful for the "love" my parents gave me, or should I be grateful for my "parents"? Combined with the later article mentioning gratitude to my parents, it is best to change it to "Thanks to my parents, for the love they give me." The same below.

It is my parents who brought me into this world and gave me endless love and care. They allowed me to find a harbor of home when I was confused, because on the vast sea, only my parents would light the way for us. Shining on the guiding light of progress, following this bright light, we can find safety, destination, courage, and eternal "home".

Meipi 2. Using metaphorical rhetorical techniques, the love of parents is compared to a guiding light on the vast sea, turning the invisible into tangible, vividly describing the love of parents, and deeply expressing the author's love for his parents. Gratitude

Gratitude - the care my friends give me. Friends are the second destination of my soul. A close friend can always comfort me when I am sad or wronged, and can share with me when she is happy. He usually understands the depression in my heart, helps me untie my knot, and allows each other to rely on each other, so that we can always face life with a smile on our lips, no matter the wind or rain, we face it with strength.

Eyebrow 3. Care is an abstract thing, but the author uses detailed descriptions to focus on the details of my friends' care for me. Although it is ordinary, it does not give people the feeling of exaggeration.

Gratitude - the knowledge the teacher gave me. Teacher, a sacred and noble profession. "The spring silkworms will not be exhausted until they die, and the wax torches will not dry until they turn to ashes." The teachers have devoted their youth, energy, and knowledge to us. Who is writing neatly on the blackboard? Who is at the desk explaining difficult problems to students? And who is reading books and preparing lessons after get off work? It’s a teacher, just a teacher!

Meibiao 4. "It's a teacher, it's just a teacher!" The word "just" here is inappropriate and can easily misunderstand readers. It should be changed to "It's a teacher, it's just a teacher!"

< p>Only teachers will serve their students wholeheartedly.

Gratitude - the setbacks given to me by my opponents. Everyone will have success and failure. Failure is a setback for you. A person without setbacks has no experience. A person's life cannot be smooth sailing, and a person who only knows success is vulnerable. So I want to thank my opponent for giving me setbacks and giving me life experience and philosophy.

"Grateful heart, thank you for having you, even if the flowers bloom and fall, I will still cherish them.

"The lingering sound of a "Grateful Heart" lingers in my heart. Gratitude is an eternal topic. I praise it today just because I praise my own heart...

General comment: The author naturally introduces it through a song at the beginning. " On the theme of "Thanksgiving", after the straight-to-the-point opening, I first write about gratitude, and then use a parallel method to write about gratitude to parents, teachers, friends and opponents. The structure is simple, but it clearly illustrates the many things to be grateful for. Then, the lyrics are used again at the end, which cleverly points out the topic and echoes the beginning. Finally, it leads to the theme of lyrical sublimation. The whole text is smooth and layered, expressing the author's strong emotions. It is a quite good article. Good composition. 6. Essays for the fifth grade of primary school with side batches and general batches

I don’t know since when, the young heart has always longed for independence. How many times have I tried to escape from the shelter of my parents’ wings and be alone. Create a path full of thorns and practice your wings in the storm

Maybe God discovered my greed and allowed me to enter this full-time high school, so that I could finally get rid of my mother.

The tall teaching building, the spacious cafeteria, the crowded supermarket, and the unfamiliar faces all made me novel and excited. However, when everything became familiar, I felt an unbearable feeling. Loneliness and emptiness occupied my heart. The heavy study made me feel depressed and dull, and my weak body made me feel groggy all day long. I felt painful and wanted to go home, but my former ambition and pride made me endure it. .

Autumn seems to have come very early, and as soon as autumn comes, I feel a bit of chill. The cold wind is blowing endlessly, making the windows chirp.

I was sitting on my seat reading a magazine and saw an article about maternal love.

I used to study late at night, and my mother would bring it to me. My favorite mung bean soup, she looked at me kindly and drank the soup in one mouthful. Then she made the bed for me and advised me to go to bed early. Sometimes, when I got angry outside, I lost my temper in front of my mother, but my mother He never cared about it, but comforted me, which made me feel better.

Only then did I realize the beauty of nagging, and the annoying words in the past are so warm in retrospect.

"Ring---" The *** after class interrupted my thoughts. I quickly went to the phone booth and dialed my home phone number. My mother's kind voice came from the other end of the phone. < /p>

"Hey, who are you looking for? "

"Mom, it's me. "I said in a low voice.

"**, how are you at school? Whether your health is good or not, a person should take care of his body. The weather is getting cold now, so be sure to put on more clothes. Are you used to eating? . . "

"Okay, everything is fine. . "I shed tears as I spoke.

I once thought that I was a person who would not be emotional or shed tears. However, in front of my mother, I shed tears without any concealment.

On the weekend, I was in a particularly cheerful mood as I sat in the car. I realized that no matter how far I flew, I would always be in my mother’s sight.

Mother is the thread that is tied to the heart. The longer and further it is pulled, the more painful it becomes. 7. How to write essay comments

I am also a Chinese teacher, and correcting essays is the most troublesome thing. . I found an article for you, let’s study together

How to write good essay comments:

1. A serious and appreciative correction attitude:

Emerson once said: “The secret of successful education is respect for students. "Teachers should first correct their mentality, treat students with an equal attitude, look at students' works with appreciation, and respect the fruits of students' labor.

Student composition, one or two classes, one article , it is not easy. In their opinion, they have worked hard to write and have reached a good level. They are looking forward to the teacher's affirmation or correction in order to draw strength and inspiration from it. When correcting, positive comments should be the main focus. The important thing is to allow students to see their achievements and progress through comments and strengthen their confidence in writing good compositions. If there are too many negative comments, it will not only be unnecessary, but it will also easily cause students to lose their self-confidence and inhibit themselves. The use of creativity may even lead to misunderstanding or even disgust with the teacher's corrections.

Even if it is a composition written by a poor student, as long as the teacher reads it carefully with love for them, he can always find some advantages in it and not all of them are without merit. For example, the writing is true, all in my own language, and there is no plagiarism; I do not write exactly according to the pattern taught by the teacher, but I have my own creation; there are one or two examples that are very special and are not noticed by others and are not commonly used; there is one appropriate point. Quotes aphorisms, sayings or famous quotes; the language is simple, without any traces of modification or elaboration; it is all line drawing, straight to the point, without elaboration or exaggeration... Find these advantages, praise them when evaluating the essay, and give them adequate praise when appropriate. encourage. Teachers may wish to observe carefully. Students who are praised will be more motivated to learn.

The subject of the composition is human beings, and the composition cannot be without self. In the composition review and revision, we must also vigorously advocate loving "I", respecting "I", and publicizing "I", using this as a breakthrough to change the concepts in the composition review and revision. Passive situation. It is necessary to stimulate students' desire to write, guide students to appreciate life with their souls, and express life with their personality. Therefore, teachers must establish the awareness of students' subjectivity and position themselves correctly in the composition review. Teachers are not outsiders or condescending judges of students' compositions. Rather, he is a participant in students’ compositions, a life experiencer like students, and a communicator of students’ ideas.

2. Comments should be encouraging:

I once saw such a story: An old gentleman from a private school found three unusual compositions when he was reviewing student compositions. Add comments to each of them. After writing the title of the first article, he only wrote the word "husband" and then disappeared. He commented: "It has great potential for composition!" The second article only had a title without even the word "husband". He commented: : "It's wonderful to lead without saying anything!" The third article was a complete waste. He didn't even write a title. He still added a comment to it: "It's a joy to be innocent." This is of course a joke, with some irony, but after laughing , thinking about it in reverse, I think it also has some enlightening significance, that is, paying attention to mastering the knowledge of encouragement when writing essay criticism. Teachers' eyes should not be focused on finding students' shortcomings, but should also find their strengths and encourage them. In a sense, good composition is not necessarily taught by teachers, but it may be encouraged by teachers. People often say that the art of education is ultimately an art of encouragement, and the same is true for writing essay reviews. A Chinese teacher must implement the principle of encouragement in comments, dare to encourage, and be good at encouraging. When teachers mark essays, they are not judges who judge cases. They don’t have to be so rigid. They can insist on encouraging strengths but not condoning shortcomings. When Mao Dun was in primary school, his teacher wrote this comment at the end of his article "The Great Ancestor of the Song Dynasty drank wine to release his troops": "With good writing power, good insight, a keen eye for reading history, and a knowledgeable argument, a boy can make a difference. He worked hard and studied hard. At the end of the article "On Emperor Qin Shihuang and Han Gaozu Sui Wen", the teacher's comments are even more wonderful: "The eyes are like a torch, the pen is as sharp as a sword, and there are thousands of words, like mercury leaking into the ground, pervasive..." Reading such words , we can imagine how the young Mao Dun was inspired and inspired by it. :

It is not easy for students to write a composition in one or two classes. In their opinion, they have worked hard to write and have a correcting attitude that has been carefully appreciated:

Emerson once said: "The secret of successful education lies in respecting students." Teachers should first correct their mentality. , treat students with an equal attitude, look at students' works with appreciation, and respect the results of students' labor.

Reach your own best level. When you send it to the teacher for correction, you are looking forward to the teacher’s affirmation or correction so that you can draw strength and inspiration from it. For teachers, positive comments should be the main focus when correcting. The most important thing is to allow students to see their achievements and progress through comments and strengthen their confidence in writing good compositions. If there is too much negation, not only is it unnecessary, but it is also easy for students to lose their self-confidence, inhibit their creativity, and even misunderstand or even resent the teacher's corrections. Even if it is a composition written by a poor student, as long as the teacher reads it carefully with love for them, he can always find some advantages in it and not all of them are without merit.

For example, the writing is true, all in my own language, and there is no plagiarism; I do not write exactly according to the pattern taught by the teacher, but I have my own creation; there are one or two examples that are very special and are not noticed by others and are not commonly used; there is one appropriate point. Quotes aphorisms, sayings or famous quotes; the language is simple, without any traces of modification or elaboration; it is all line drawing, straight to the point, without elaboration or exaggeration... Find these advantages and praise them when evaluating the essay. 8. How to write a good essay Correction records

Composition correction records

1. Writing content

The main content of this exercise is to look at pictures and write essays. The pictures show the results of children’s writing. A scene of a small football match requires students to carefully observe the scene depicted in the picture, observe the movements and expressions of the characters, and also use their imagination to speculate on the intensity of the small football match, and then use vivid words to express what they see and think about. expressed in language.

2. Success

The success of this exercise is that the students observed carefully and were able to add their own imagination to what they saw and thought. Can be blended together.

3. Shortcomings

The shortcomings of this composition are: (1) The observation is careful, but the description is not comprehensive. It can focus on the goalkeeper, but for other audiences The description is not specific enough. (2) Some students’ imaginations are so rich that they are separated from the pictures themselves and do not meet the requirements of picture composition.

4. Advantages and Disadvantages

1. Observe carefully, describe comprehensively, and be able to write in a certain order, with vivid language:

2. The description is not comprehensive enough or the imagination is too rich, and the language is not vivid enough:

Essay correction record

This essay requires you to write about a natural landscape that you have visited or learned about. You can Write about famous tourist attractions or the scenery around you.

There is no big problem in terms of material selection. 28% (7 people) of the students got excellent, 53% (17 people) got good, and 19% (6 people) got average or poor.

The main problems are:

1. Writing is not serious.

2. There are many typos, and some even write pinyin.

3. Inaccurate use of punctuation marks. There are only a few punctuation marks in a long paragraph and the sentences will not be segmented correctly.

4. The division of paragraphs is inaccurate. Some students only have one paragraph in their entire composition.

5. The theme is not prominent. Although some questions are about a certain place, there are almost no

sentences describing the scenery in the entire article. Although some wrote about the scenery, they occupied too little space, and some content was irrelevant to the theme

, such as what to prepare before going, how to go, what to eat, etc.

Such content takes up a lot of space and deviates from the topic.

6. There are too few wonderful sentences or paragraphs. Only a few students noticed the refining and modification of sentences, and used metaphors, personification and other techniques, but most of the compositions were mediocre.