The only composition with full marks in the 2008 Shanghai College Entrance Examination.

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At the end of the city, there are no bustling streets and shining neon lights; At the end of the city, there are only weather-beaten dilapidated shanty towns; At the end of the city, there is a person like them.

What should I call them? Children of migrant workers? Farmers' children? Or the second generation of migrant workers? No, I don't want to call them by these cold names. I want to call them by their simple birth names, hold their hands and approach their lives. ...

They grew up in the green mountains and green waters of their hometown, and their pure souls started jointing in the fields. In the wind of Shan Ye, they are running and dreaming. The wind blew into the city from the fields. For their livelihood and future, they followed their parents to the city and took root at the end of the city. So I got used to the eyes of green mountains and green waters, and came into contact with tall buildings and traffic for the first time. They don't know how to cross the six-lane road, and their little hands can't tell the number of floors. Prosperous modern civilization has never brought them any happiness, but this time, it has left a deep imprint on their hearts.

They took up their schoolbags and carefully integrated into city life. But in the strange eyes of "city people", I understood the difference between hukou and temporary residence permit for the first time. Are the treasures in parents' hearts! But prematurely assumed the burden that does not belong to this era.

When they come home from school, they cook a simple dinner, and their parents are still working at the construction site or the food market; Wake up in the middle of the night, the starry sky in the city is not as bright as my tearful hometown; Make a wish quietly, hoping that their primary school for children of migrant workers will not close down tomorrow because they can't pay the electricity bill. ...

However, I saw their growth in their growing bodies. I remember a reporter asked a child in a school for migrant children if he would go back to his hometown after graduation. The little girl said without hesitation: Of course, he must go back! At that moment, I almost cried for their growth.

I remember their childish declaration on the Spring Festival Evening that year: "Our school is small, but our grades are not bad", "We are no better than the children in the city" and "What are we!" They gradually matured, bid farewell to yesterday's shyness and began to welcome a new day.

Although, they are still worried about small tuition fees; Although, the school still can't afford to pay the utilities; Although, there are still many imperfect systems ... although there are many "although", only one "but" is enough. Many eyes have turned to them, and they are thriving.

The sun rises from the horizon, illuminating the end of the city and their lives.

They will eventually become us.

Correct the teacher's comments:

Full-mark composition has five advantages. First, the composition truly depicts the living conditions of migrant workers' children, from the unnatural and unsuitable experience from rural to urban to the gradual maturity of their mentality, which makes people feel a real body; Secondly, the composition is written smoothly, which shows that the candidates have accumulated a certain amount of reading, but they have not shown off, properly expressed their emotions and horizons, and the words and themes are well coordinated; Third, on the whole, the composition expresses the author's sympathy, concern and expectation for his peers, and also reflects the requirements of the composition topic. Fourth, the description of this article is very delicate, "the little finger can't count the layers"; Finally, the article focuses on the changes of migrant workers' children. "They will eventually become us." Candidates did not complain blindly, but wrote changes and hopes.

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Zhejiang college entrance examination perfect score composition "Feel the countryside"

At first, I thought the countryside was a fairyland of fairy tales. It has faded away the glitz of the city and washed away the complexity of the world. It may be Al on Van Gogh's canvas, the blue sky as clear as a mirror, and the gorgeous sea of flowers as oil painting. Golden sunflowers, nourished by sunshine, have grown seeds of hope. It may be an idyll in Tao Qian's poems, which tells the story of a fairy couple in the fog. The oblique sunshine is light and leisurely.

It's just a village in poetry. When we really walk into the village and feel the village with our heart, we will find that our village is experiencing pain. There is also sunshine, which is not warm but viciously roasting the earth. Looking from a distance, the swaying figure on the earth is tired of its heart in the morning and evening, in spring and autumn. He grew up in this land, and his sweat nourished this land; He learned to be strong in this land, and his steps strengthened this land; He was born in the loess and returned to the loess, which has been endless for generations. When the storm came, his heart trembled like a swaying crop in the field, and tears crossed the cheeks of the ravine, drowning his heart and his breath layer by layer like water drowning the field. When the drought came, the crops shook like his thin body. He can't see hope and gain, and his confused eyes are dry and empty.

They are sometimes happy, but this happiness seems so humble. Their greatest happiness is a bumper harvest. Full particles are like gems, and the corners of the eyes smile like crescent moons. What they want most is good weather, and they just want to live an ordinary life.

Faced with such a picture, will such a country let us down? In fact, the countryside is more real because of this cruel beauty. Feel the countryside, don't always be a leisurely tourist. While appreciating its tranquility and purity, we should pay more attention to its pain and give it more understanding and sympathy.

Feel the countryside, feel the pulse of farming civilization, feel the most vigorous cry of China, feel the massiness of that land, and feel the blood and sweat of that land; Feel the most simple persistence and firmness of farmers in China, and feel the pain and helplessness experienced by farmers in China.

When we looked at them with disdain, did it ever occur to us that they brought us hope for life with sweat and blood?

We farmers have become eternal in the history of China with the most humble gesture. Let us feel the countryside with our heart!

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Jiangxi Full Score College Entrance Examination Composition: A Letter to Humanity

Ladies and gentlemen,

Good evening. First, let me introduce myself. I'm Mark Mouse, a member of the cave mouse family. On the orders of the patriarch, I would like to express my heartfelt thanks to the friends who fought for snakes, owls, chasing weasels and abusing cats. Thanks to your unremitting efforts, we have expanded our living space, ensured safety, got rid of the life of hunger and fear, and lived a well-off life without food and clothing. Now our family is getting bigger and bigger, the vast countryside has been occupied by us, and brothers and sisters are everywhere. In order for the vole family to reproduce for thousands of generations, we need to explore a wider world. I'm glad to tell you here that we should move from "countryside surrounding cities" to a modern metropolis, enjoy civilized life and create a harmonious and happy mouse society. As you can see, we are gradually moving from darkness to a bright new life. The earth belongs to us, so you humans stand aside!

Don't doubt, the fact is right in front of you. First, the reproductive capacity of our rodents is amazing. If there is no family planning, they will surpass you in number sooner or later. Secondly, each of our mice is a super deadly bacterial weapon. We carry hundreds of pathogens. Have you ever heard of the plague? That is our class. Third, we rodents have keen insight and high IQ, and human rat traps and fake rat poison can't scare us at all. Fourthly, we rodents are a unity of Qi Xin, and unity is strength. This strength is steel and can be invincible.

As a vole with rich nightlife, I have to face the development of society generously. I used to think that only mice and our old rivals like this dark life. Now you humans live this life, and the content is much richer than ours.

For thousands of years, we have been fighting human beings. Through observation and textual research, we know all kinds of bad habits of human beings like the palm of our hand. Only by knowing ourselves and ourselves can we be invincible. Our home, the earth, has been tortured and scarred by you humans. We rats are outraged, and the war between rats and humans is about to begin. We vowed to drive mankind out of the earth.

As a flesh-and-blood animal, I have the same worldly desires as you, and we also have our own legend of Liang Zhu. I was dating a pet Persian cat, and one day I heard someone singing "I love you, just like a mouse loves rice ............" in the trash can. I feel that you are too great. You all know the secrets of our family for thousands of years! I was so fascinated that I forgot my date with Persian cat. She lost her temper and tried to dump me. Fortunately, I remembered in time that the patriarch said that "there is no cat that doesn't eat fishy" and had to give her the precious fish head that I finally got. She smiled through tears.

The stars are really bright tonight! Oh, no, it's time for a date. I won't invite you to my house because the cave is too small. If you are interested in inviting me, please prepare delicious food and I will go as scheduled. Let's stop here. Persian cats are late. They may dump me when they get angry. It's really not easy for an unknown junior like me to find a girlfriend without a famous car! Talk to you later. Bye.

In addition, the reply can be put in the trash can.

A mouse mark in close contact with human beings.

Year of the Rat, Year of the Rat, Month of the Rat and Day of the Rat

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Fujian college entrance examination perfect score composition 1: "Pin Jiangnan"

Taste is everyone's unique memory. Obsessed with the sweetness of fruit juice is the pursuit of youthful taste; Indulging in the bitterness of coffee is an awakening to adversity; Clinging to the tranquility of spring water, it is difficult to let go of Jiangnan. But I am trapped in the misty rain in the south of the Yangtze River.

Take a sip of light mineral water, and the taste of Jiangnan will ripple on the tip of your tongue. ? Misty rain awakens the thoughts of passers-by at this moment, and the dense water vapor permeates the elegance and gentleness of women in Jiangnan. The bright moonlight poured down, and A Bing's "Two Springs Reflecting the Moon" cut through the quiet water. The three handles of the erhu echoed the quiet atmosphere in the middle of the night in the south of the Yangtze River. Spirituality is like the lines between the palms, forming one action after another on the lake. At this moment, all the noise is so loud that the cries of businessmen can't be related to it. The tranquility of the water town is sublimated under the rendering of moonlight. This is the taste of Jiangnan, a faint, refreshing and stable force.

The beautiful feeling of being as close as lips and teeth, a mouthful of mineral water will not destroy the sweetness of Jiangnan. Speaking of Jiangnan, the soil beside Sanshengshi is fragrant and fresh, but the enthusiasm of Jiangnan people is even more unforgettable. It is as simple and sweet as spring water, which washes away the dust in the world and is so pure that there is no trace of pollution. Boating in the water town, the women who hold up bamboo poles skillfully cross the oblique wind and sunset, and with the sound one after another, their ears also appreciate the charm of Jiangnan. Enthusiastic water people hold cups of pure spring water and arrange delicious meals on the table. I haven't seen this defenseless conversation for a long time. Just relax。 The simplicity and sincerity of Jiangnan will break the mask of the city and show a sincere smile. This is the flavor of Jiangnan in Gan Chun's works, stretching nervous nerves.

With the attachment to the spring water, drinking the water in the cup in one gulp, that kind of free and easy breath, is the historical taste of Jiangnan pride. The golden drum is ringing and the war is blowing. "Forty-three years, I still remember that in hope, I will be on the fire on Yangzhou Road." I used to be magnificent, I used to be an iron horse. On the long scroll of Jiangnan history, the fearless breath is still faint. The grass trees in the sunset are ordinary and strange, and there are also clank iron bones that Jiangnan will never give up. This is the taste of Jiangnan, as straightforward and refreshing as spring water.

I walked through the south of the Yangtze River and looked like a lotus in the season. While enjoying the spring water and the south of the Yangtze River, the brilliance of human feelings also draws a blue picture on the blueprint of the soul.

As the flavor of the water town continues, the dirty dust in that city seems unable to invade the mind washed away by the misty rain in the south of the Yangtze River.

In the temple of the soul, I pray devoutly, just to be a person who keeps the taste of Jiangnan in the mud of troubled times.

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Without poetry, there would be no Jiangnan; Without poetic language, it is not enough to express poetic Jiangnan; Without poetic comments, it is not enough to describe the charm of Jiangnan.

The soul of this poem is picturesque. A huqin, a moonlight and a knowing smile can weave the beautiful latitude and longitude of the south of the Yangtze River, and weave a silky gentle texture. The figure of the pole, slanting wind and sunset glow, leisurely, can also draw a meaningful freehand brushwork landscape axis, where life is leisurely. And the golden drum, the long bonfire road, was also embraced poetically and gently, ironed into a pot of wine, comforting the soul on a snowy night in the south of the Yangtze River. Jiangnan, painting, water is more mellow than wine, meaning is deeper than painting. The blooming lotus is as beautiful as the four seasons, falling in the stream of life, pointing out the poetic leisure and pursuit of life in the south of the Yangtze River.

Literary talent is better than flowers, and talent is like water. Only in this way can you keep pace with Jiangnan and seek the same spirit. How can a writer check his heart from time to time and sign an agreement with a beautiful life to gain immortality and spirituality?

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Fujian college entrance examination perfect score composition "Three Realms of Life"

Three people walked into the store and bought juice, coffee and mineral water, because they like sweetness, sweet taste in bitterness and faint feeling.

Let's imagine that if the three customers are not the same age, they are only teenagers, middle-aged people and elderly people. Then it's time for teenagers to like sweetness, middle-aged people to taste sweetness and bitterness, and old people to enjoy light alcohol. Isn't it wonderful to apply these three flavors to life?

When we walk in the world, we all go through three stages: adolescence, middle age and old age. The transition from adolescence to middle age and the weathering from middle age to old age are no less than the growth and aging of the body, but also the growth of the mind and the gradual change of mood.

When I was a teenager, I liked sweetness. Teenagers always like to admire the world with beautiful dreams. At this time, we are still simply immature and burning ourselves in the process. We "teenagers don't know the taste of sorrow" and can proudly "point out the mountains and inspire the writing". We are young, full of energy and full of hope for the future, although "the dust is flying in Wan Huhou"! Teenagers are a realm of loving beauty, so many of them appear in adolescence. Gauss, the "prince of mathematics", was famous in the world when he was young; Young Ding Junhui challenges the world champion; Lang Lang, who is still young, elegantly conveys sweet music to people ... When he was a teenager, he bravely stepped into life carefree. When people reach middle age, I have tasted bitterness, because I like the bitter and sweet feeling. Life at this point is like a cup of fragrant tea, digging sweet in bitterness. This is another realm. When people reach middle age, their careers and lives are mostly at their peak, and many people's helplessness is fully grasped, making their views on the world more mature and stable. "People who can catch up without warning the past." Middle age is a period of connecting the past with the future. Middle age is a period of responsibility. Only coffee, bitter with sweet, shows the taste and charm of middle age.

In old age, I have probably tasted all the flavors of life. The sweetness of mutual help, the fragrance of dreams, the sadness and joy of responsibility, the bitterness of kicking down a bridge when it rains, and the acrimony of hitting a person when he is down ... What is the final collocation? This is a bottle of mineral water. Just like white, it is actually composed of seven colors. The highest state of life is to be calm after the storm. The wind and waves of the world can't make a ripple in my heart. This is the real maturity, with a pair of truly humiliated eyes to see the ebb and flow of the world, flowers bloom and fall. Only in this leisurely state of mind can we taste the faint but rich feeling in clear water.

Life must be like this, drifting away. There is a saying that teenagers look at mountains and waters; Looking at mountains in middle age is not mountains, and looking at water is not water; The old man sees mountains or mountains, water or water. This statement is correct. Life is a cycle from simple to complex, and then to calm and simple. What we have to do is to enjoy every taste and feel every realm, and in this process, purify the meaning of life.

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Set the three people in the test material as teenagers, middle-aged people and elderly people in turn, and then describe the different "tastes" experienced in the three stages of life. This is the angle that the author grasps the material as a whole to conceive.

The composition of new materials, although there is no need to quote materials at the beginning of the article, is close to the raw materials at the beginning of this article. The first paragraph outlines the materials from the causal relationship, and the second paragraph shows your own ideas ("imagination"). This text is clear and easy to be accepted by readers.

In terms of content, it is rare that the candidates are teenagers, but they also have an understanding of the "taste" of middle-aged and elderly people; Naturally, this is what the author got through observation and reading.

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Fujian college entrance examination perfect score composition "I saw it in coffee"

Let's remember the years together, love and time. -inscription

Sitting alone in the empty sky, smelling the aroma of cappuccino in boiling water. I like coffee very much. This bitter and sweet taste seems to be a long journey of life.

My old friend told me to have the simplest life and the most distant dream. With a flick, the words reached my ears.

From birth, like this pot of boiled water, it is simple and tasteless. Gradually, brewing in this brown powder becomes full of flavor. In the process of slowly tasting, we learned to live. And it's not easy for us to walk all the way to today. Ye Zhi said, there are too many tears in this world, you won't understand. This stubborn love of a feminist who died of illness is very similar to our stubborn unrequited love for the future. In the lingering fragrance, we reflect on yesterday and look forward to tomorrow.

A pragmatic life lies in a valuable life, like coffee, like every tiny particle of experience, in nirvana? Burn and dissolve in it, savor it occasionally, and then get to know it in the cold and warm.

I know that there are things in this world that are much bigger and sadder than we expected, about love or hate. Since the Wenchuan earthquake, my heart has been immersed in a trough, and life and death are just a moment. Such pain is engraved on the life line like a concave and convex inscription. Let you pout and frown, so bitter coffee, only you know.

Shi Tiesheng said, son, this is your sin and your happiness.

Crying and the happiness of the rest of my life are mixed together and melted in this coffee. You see, life is always mean to us and always disappoints us, but life is generous and always saves us after we are disappointed.

I think, because of this generosity of life, we must live with dignity, just like life itself, and respect our existence.

I stared at the coffee in this white porcelain cup and thought of this genius who was bound between love and death all his life-Virginia? Woolf. Her soul is full of profound thoughts and disorder. I seem to see the cornflower-scented sunshine in the beautiful Scottish countryside in spring, the friction between quill pens and thick paper, and the hot coffee on the dining table. She is writing a letter to Orlando.

My mouth lifted gently. The genius was legendary all his life and eventually died of illness. She said that the core of life is empty, just like a room.

In other words, after she tasted the bitterness and sweetness of coffee, all she left was an empty cup, and she could not take anything away in her life after death.

In this small world, what I have experienced is just an ordinary life, and what I have seen is just an ordinary world. In fact, there are not so many stories in life, but love is the whole meaning of our life. The bitterness and sweetness of this coffee is a comprehensive taste. Take a sip and feel for yourself.

A moment's love in life has brought us a lifetime's effort. We are so happy with great sadness. Whether it is bitter or sweet, I can taste this life without regrets!

I don't know when a kite flew in the sky and lonely birds circled around it. I reached out to block the light from the sunset in my eyes, just like an illusion of light and shade. Remembering that I stumbled all the way, I couldn't help crying. Look up and drink the last sip of coffee, and the fragrance of life stays between your teeth.

Woolf said with a smile, let's remember the years, love and time.

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Thick and noble, I believe many readers will feel after reading this article. The author of My Opinion in Coffee takes "coffee" as the angle and "coffee" as the background. As a thinker, the author tastes coffee in the thin smoke of coffee, releases his thoughts, reads life and feels the years. The "I" in the article is outstanding. The author interprets Woolf and Shi Tiesheng from his own unique perspective. In the interpretation, he is faithful to his unique feelings, not only detaining the coffee, but also simply dismembering it. Because of this, there are many sentences with flashing thoughts in the article, such as "... a valuable life, you should have the experience of grinding every particle like coffee, burning and dissolving in nirvana, and occasionally savoring it."

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Fujian college entrance examination perfect score composition "Colorful makes harmony"

Three people went into the shop looking for something to quench their thirst. Like sweet like juice, like light choose mineral water, like bitter with sweet coffee. The three flavors are different, but they are harmonious because of their differences-harmony without difference is harmony. If there is only one kind of drink in the world, it will be boring.

Colorful makes harmony. Look at the light yellow of goose willow smoke, the green of green grass, the brilliant red of red apricots on the wall, and the blue sky with clouds and clouds. Their colors are different, but what's the harm? "Ten thousand colors are always spring", and the happy spring day for all things is not dominated by one color. Difference is the appearance, harmony is the essence, and colorful achievements are colorful richness, which is the real harmony.

Tap on the door of the red chamber and look for the dream that has been longed for for for a hundred years. You said that in A Dream of Red Mansions, Zhong Ling had so many beautiful daughters. Who is the reader's favorite? It has always been difficult to adjust, but it has always been appealing to both refined and popular tastes, stroking the slightly rolled pages. We seem to hear the publicity of "I'm late and I haven't met a distant guest", the sadness of "I don't know when the flowers have fallen", the surprise of "this elder sister seems to have met somewhere" and the call of "love my brother, love my brother" merge into one.

Harmony is not a ruler, which abruptly measures everything and orders everything in the world to reach the same amount with the same standard; Harmony is a decision-maker, or commander, who takes the overall situation into consideration, makes everything in its proper place, allows them to show their true selves and achieve real harmony.

Thousands of years ago, in the war years of the Spring and Autumn Period and the Warring States Period, an unprecedented and amazing cultural feast was staged. The voice of a hundred schools of thought has penetrated the history books, and it is still hitting the floor through time and space; Thousands of years later, Mr. Cai Yuanpei's famous saying "Don't bind others with your own thoughts, and don't bind yourself with other people's thoughts" shocked many people in China. The idea of "academic tolerance" continues to this day, which is admirable.

Therefore, please respect different views and choices, please understand and care for real harmony with your heart, and please protect the different customs and habits of all ethnic groups; Please tolerate different living habits in different regions; People who respect different drinks in the store; Respecting customers of classical music or pop rock music in video stores ... is everyone's different characteristics, which makes up this changeable and colorful world. Without difference, there is no real harmony.

-ask the boundless earth, who is in charge of ups and downs?

-Colorful colors,

-Why?

-Colorful makes harmony!

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With regard to this composition examination, many candidates are only satisfied with deducing a certain "taste" in the examination materials, failing to further explore and expand the materials, and lacking in profundity and speculation. The remarkable feature of this paper lies in the discrimination of "taste", which meets the same in differences and hits the view that "harmony without difference is harmony" on the floor.

The secret of this article is to express your thoughts bravely, see what others have not seen, say what others have not said, think positively and be good at thinking.

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Fujian college entrance examination perfect score composition "Qu Qing so much"

Life is like running water, clear and faint. Don't be magnificent, ups and downs, it will make people tired; Don't be colorful, just give people the illusion of a mirage.

The trajectory of life doesn't always go in the right direction as planned. You need a calm heart to face the unknown calmly.

During this period, the painter Huang Yongyu and the writer's uncle Shen Congwen passed each other on the way down the mountain. Shen Congwen told Huang Yongyu lightly: "Be calm." Ten years later, Huang Yongyu said that these three words would always come to mind inadvertently.

Indeed, what a calm and open-minded attitude towards life! As clear as water, but as firm as water, it never stops. That is to show others a "piece of ice in a jade pot" calm!

As the old saying goes, a friend of a gentleman is as light as water. It can be seen that water is also a measure and a very high standard in dealing with interpersonal relationships.

A friend of a gentleman is not in fame and fortune. Zhuangzi said: "Don't be ambitious for the crown, and don't be vulgar for the sake of difference." Confucius said: "A gentleman is harmonious but different; A gentleman is not as good as a week. " As friends of water, we don't need the smell of copper to pollute it, let alone confuse it because we disagree. The sages set an example for us in dealing with people and things. In Boya period, mountains and rivers met bosom friends, and the poet Du Li and his poetry friends paid tribute to each other, and so on. Communication with people is as clear as water, as harmonious as water and as warm as water. Harmony is proud of * * *.

Clear water has always been a symbol of the whole national spirit. In the face of the people in Jiangshan, Lao Tzu said that "goodness is like water"; Du Fu said: "Moisturize things silently".

The earthquake in May, the Sichuan earthquake zone touched the hearts of the whole country. People silently prayed for the disaster area and silently contributed their meager strength. We can't remember the names of every rescuer, every donor and every medical worker ... but we know that they have love, respect for life and sincerity to the country! Great love is traceless, great love is like water, and it moistens things silently.

This is a person's attitude towards life, the criterion of communication with others, and the highest level of dedication to the country and the nation!

No waves, no colors, only silence like water, which is the highest respect for life!

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The biggest feature of this paper is that it can be put away freely, natural and unrestrained, and it is close to the center. From the introduction of "life is like running water, clear and faint", from Shen Congwen's "calmness" to the alternative interpretation of "friendship between gentlemen is as light as water" and "mountains and rivers meet bosom friends", it is finally concluded that "clear water" has become a symbol of national spirit. The article runs through the whole article with the lightness of water and endows it with rich cultural connotation. With novel materials, the stories of Huang Yongyu and Shen Congwen seem casual, but they are sincere. The material of the Sichuan earthquake has also been skillfully included in the category of "water", which shows that the author has a high ability to control the material.