Zhou Ren 'ai, Wen Lan Middle School.
Subject 1
Read the following text and complete the following composition.
There is a well-known story in Britain: Roibert Briuis, the king of ancient Scotland, was defeated six times by the invading enemy and lost confidence. On a rainy day, he was lying in the hut and saw a spider weaving a web. The spider tried to wrap a silk around the opposite wall and failed six times, but after the seventh effort, it finally achieved its goal. Robert jumped up excitedly and shouted, "I want to come for the seventh time!" " "He organized an army to fight back against the invaders and finally drove the enemy out of Scotland.
Please write an article on the topic of "turning point": ① Write your true feelings according to your own experience. ② No less than 600 words. (3) The names of people and the real names of schools should not appear in the text.
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This is the first monthly composition test in Grade Three. Look at the stories in the materials when reviewing the questions. King Robert lost confidence after being defeated by the invading enemy six times. This is the mentality when the characters appear. However, when he later saw that a spider had failed to weave a web six times and tried to persist until the seventh success, his mind was excited. He not only shouted "I came for the seventh time", but also immediately organized troops to fight back against the invaders, and finally succeeded. Robert achieved a turning point in the war. However, when we combed the materials, we found that the author simply wrote the final success, but described in detail Robert's psychological changes before and after the turning point and the spirit of spider's seven persistence. From this, we understand that the focus of conception should be on depicting positive energy such as persistence, hard work and fear of failure in human nature. When choosing themes and dealing with details, the focus should be on how to overcome difficulties and adjust the change of mentality. In short, in the main content of the composition, we must write a tortuous process to complete the turning point. The more concrete and vivid this process is, the more it can reflect the depth of the idea.
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Chen Jiajin, a junior high school student in Wen Lan, Hangzhou.
In Wild Growth, Feng Lun said: A person standing on the roadside with a cup is a beggar for one week, a performance art for one year, and a sculpture for ten years. We all want to be a sculpture, but we simply can't. We have to endure a week of ridicule and discrimination, a month of wind and rain, and ten years of loneliness before we can change from beggars to sculptures.
Of course, we may not need that long, but the pain is inevitable. During the time when I joined the volleyball team, I practiced in the dim volleyball hall for more than an hour every day. I kept serving, spiking and doing push-ups. My knees were black and blue, and my arms were covered with crimson blood spots, but I still couldn't do it well. I was criticized by Teacher Ye and teased by Teacher Chen. Of course, I'm also worried. Looking at the seniors in senior three at that time, I suddenly felt a sense of terror that I would never get out. One day, one week, one month, I was intoxicated with the lightness and pride of not having volleyball, no training hall and no teacher Ye. When I looked at my teammates sympathetically, I found that they were so positive and happy every day. As a bystander, I can even see that their future will get better. Indeed, there was such a turning point before me at that time. However, complaining and avoiding fatigue made me turn a blind eye to this turning point. Sure enough, after graduating from the third grade, teammates who had suffered and been criticized together became seniors in the third grade in the new year. Instead of being scolded by the coach, she was worshipped by the girls in Grade One and Grade Two. And I gave up early. As a loser in this war, I have long been forgotten. No one will think of me who didn't want to persist, and I lost my turn.
Adults used to tell me that she was unhappy in the company. Senior colleagues always bully young employees like her, but she didn't give up and made her own efforts. Finally, one day, unknown, she was promoted to project manager. This surprised everyone. It turns out that all this is in the eyes of the boss.
God saw it in his eyes. Just like climbing a mountain, there are only endless steps under your feet, but as long as you keep walking, you will always reach the top of the mountain and see endless scenery. Yes, I will be a sculpture, not a beggar.
Comments on outstanding works
Chen Jiajin's composition is novel in material selection, active in thinking, not constrained by style, and is written with great bearing. At first, she wrote with Feng Lun's famous words in Wild Animals that she longed for a similar transformation from beggar to sculpture. In the main part, she boldly chose the failure experience of quitting the school volleyball team because she could not insist on playing volleyball, and then wrote a successful experience of an elder who silently insisted on working hard in the company until she was promoted by her boss, which formed a sharp contrast. At the end, I not only used a vivid metaphor of the period, but also showed my ambition-"I will become a sculpture", starting from this concern. Therefore, the full text is ingenious in conception, fluent in language and rigorous in structure, and it is a masterpiece in the examination room.
(Zhou Ren 'ai)
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Yao Pei, Grade 3, Wen Lan Middle School.
"There is no doubt about mountains and rivers, and there is another village." Life is like a winding mountain road. Sometimes, we don't know whether we are "in the circle of mountains" or "facing the sea and blooming in spring", but this road is destined to be connected by bends, even the smallest bend may bring us the scenery like a peach blossom garden.
I like to do things alone since I was a child. Even after finishing the group work, tell others what to do and ask others for help. In a word, everything is my decision. I am like running water in a deep mountain, and I don't allow any impurities to pollute my purity. I never felt anything wrong. It was our turn to organize a blackboard newspaper, but I did.
That day, I drew a sketch, wrote materials and sent them to every classmate. "A classmate, you go to print data; B classmate, you go downstairs to get colored chalk; C classmate, you clean the blackboard first; D, after wiping the blackboard, divide the area according to the figure. " At that time, I didn't know how strong my tone was, but I felt that my arrangement was in order. Everything went according to plan, but the result was not as good as I expected. I looked at a large piece of data printed, and I was so angry that I asked her, "Do you want me to copy it exhausted?" Looking back, I saw a blackboard with red letters on a white background and said angrily, "I just want you to draw a line." Are you helping me color? " Isn't that going to be wiped again? "Seeing another box of red and purple chalk, he said," I can't stand it. Colored chalk, classmate, who asked you to take red chalk? "It's still as red as Tibetan village girl Plateau Red!" My heart is full of discontent. Don't! None of them are right! How did they make things so bad? It wasn't my idea at all!
After a while, I began to adjust my mentality, restrain my emotions and ask myself: What are you angry about? You are the only one who does nothing and still makes a hullabaloo about. Why? Finally, I calmed down, raised my sketch and asked, "Who painted this?" A said, "It was your own decision, wishful thinking. Have you asked us? " Of course not. Isn't that what I always do? C said, "You just go your own way, and B found it without even asking for information." I looked at B in surprise. She just buried her head. I said indignantly, "Nobody told me ..." "You didn't ask!" Classmate c answered. My eyes were black, only sour, and I left the classroom quickly. This is my fault. I don't know how to face it, so I have to leave.
When I returned to the classroom, many students left, leaving only B in the empty classroom, and a beautiful butterfly on the blackboard, a butterfly that was not in my plan. B found me standing at the door of the classroom, packing up and going home in a hurry. When I passed by, I said softly, "I'm sorry." You shouldn't be the one who said you were sorry, but it was actually my fault. I picked up the picture on the ground, pressed it on the corner of the blackboard and asked B softly, "Would you like to post it here?" B paused, and it took a long time to react. He smiled and said, "That's what I thought!" That afternoon, B and I redesigned the style of the blackboard newspaper in the golden sun. Of course, this is richer, more reasonable and more beautiful than my previous "masterpiece", and the most important thing is harmony.
It was a turning point in the blackboard performance in our class, and we were awarded an unprecedented achievement. Of course, this is a turning point in my character. I learned to respect other people's ideas and cooperate. This experience also illustrates a truth: the more winding and secluded, the more people linger.
Comments on outstanding works
Material selection is the biggest highlight of this paper. Yao Pei chose to publish such ordinary trivia as "Blackboard" and concentrated on describing various contradictions in trivia with vivid language. She doesn't shy away from the shortcomings of her personality, likes to direct others, writes about her self-confidence and unexpected results in assigning tasks, which leads to the contradiction between her and her classmates, and explains the details of classmate B's silence. This is a failure before the turning point. At the same time, continue to portray classmate B to apologize to her, and then redesign the blackboard together. This is an effort before the turning point. Finally, she was just passing by. Therefore, the appropriate details are the second highlight of this article. At the end of the chapter, it is a matter of course
(Zhou Ren 'ai)