1. About the composition based on ancient poems

Li Bai's "Gift to Wang Lun" is a popular farewell poem.

The first two sentences are a positive narrative, and the last two sentences are about the rise of things, turning the invisible friendship into a vivid image, ethereal and lingering, natural and true. The "Chinese Curriculum Standards" point out that composition teaching should "stimulate students to imagine and fantasize, and encourage students to write about imaginary things."

This poem provides a basis for students to freely run their imaginations. We might as well guide students to rewrite this ancient poem into modern prose. Students can use their own life experiences based on the content of the ancient poem, imagine the scene of Li Bai and Wang Lun's farewell, and taste the poet's emotions between the lines. The exercises written by students will definitely be unique. Interesting.

This extracurricular exercise is designed for primary school students in grades 5 and 6. Writing guide process: 1. Enter the poetic realm and savor the recitation. 3. Appreciate the soundtrack animation of "To Wang Lun". Teacher *** narrates the legend of this poem.

2. Put yourself in his shoes and imagine the experience 1. "Li Bai is about to travel in a boat" (3) Play the animation of "Drinking and admiring the moon". The teacher said affectionately: Seeing this, Li Bai's heart is surging and his thoughts are thousands of times. , the scenes of getting along with Wang Lun appeared in front of their eyes: drinking - guiding students to imagine the language, movements, and expressions of the two people. The teacher introduced the following situation to the camera for students to imagine: In Li Bai's eyes, Wang Lun is a witty, interesting, studious and motivated young man. He is famous all over the world, but he is never arrogant. He is a personable, knowledgeable scholar and an amiable elder.

Moon Appreciation - Li Bai was very fond of the moon and wrote many beautiful poems about the moon, such as "Thoughts on a Quiet Night", "Gu Lang Yue Xing", "Moon Song of Mount Emei" "wait. Students can be guided to apply them to this situation, Wang Lun recites these verses and expresses his admiration.

Playing, playing chess, fishing, reciting poems, mountain climbing... 2. "Suddenly I heard singing on the shore" "There are close friends in the sea, and they are like neighbors at the end of the world." - Wang Bo "I urge you to drink another glass of wine, There are no old friends when you leave Yangguan in the west."

——Wang Wei "Please ask me about the water flowing eastward. Who do you want to compare with?" ——Li Bai "Don't worry about having no friends in the world. Do you know me?" - Gao Shi "The willow tree at the east gate is green and the river is difficult to climb. It must be because of the separation."

"The water of Peach Blossom Pond is a thousand feet deep, not as deep as Wang Lun's. "Send me love" It's hard to say goodbye when we meet, but it's hard to say goodbye after seeing you thousands of miles away. Li Bai got on the boat, and the boat gradually went away. His eyes were blurred with tears, and he couldn't help but recited a poem - Teachers and students together He recited "A Gift to Wang Lun" in a loud voice. 3. Stimulate expression and rewrite ancient poems 1. Classmates, today, we came to the Peach Blossom Pond and experienced the affectionate farewell scene together. Can we still remain indifferent? Then let us pick up the pen and write down this touching scene! 5. Students rewrite ancient poems, and teachers provide individual guidance.

4. Display works, communicate and analyze 1. Who is willing to read their own composition to everyone? Teacher camera review. 2. After appreciating this classmate’s composition, you can talk about what you admire or are most moved by, or you can share your personal opinions or suggestions.

3. Teacher’s summary: Students, today we cross the boundaries of time and space, dialogue with the ancients, and talk freely with poets. What we gain is the nourishment of language, the edification of emotion, and the cherishment of friendship. Can you describe your feelings about this class in one sentence? Design comments: I think students' rewriting of ancient poems is a process of "transformation of words and meanings." Let's take this exercise design as an example to illustrate.

1. The transformation from “words” to “meanings”. How can the “words” of ancient poetry be transformed into the “meanings” in students’ minds? I believe that teachers mainly guide students to penetrate the "two layers", namely the superficial layer and the implicit layer. From an operational level, the first is "dialogue", which allows students to use their own life experience and knowledge reserves to have a "dialogue" with the poet, and use imagination and association to fill the "blanks" of ancient poems and make the "meaning" inherent in ancient poems Become full and whole.

The second is "realization". On the basis of dialogue with the poet, students are guided to "touch" and "taste" ancient poems with their various senses. Due to the deep involvement and emotional investment of the students, , from the "surface level" to the "intrinsic level", thus entering the "artistic conception" of ancient poetry. On the basis of consciousness, the sound of blood is the sound of the heart, and the sound of sound is the heartbeat together.

Only in this way can ancient poems be endowed with vivid spirituality, and this is the "meaning" in the students' hearts. In the teaching design of this course, the teacher first guides the students to "read the text to express their feelings", and allows the students to "dialogue" with the poet through appreciation, taste and recitation, so as to understand the poetic meaning and understand the poetic sentiment.

Then the teacher guides the students to "put themselves in their shoes and imagine their experiences". By creating situations, students are allowed to "recite poems and read poems to live with the ancients; read and recite poems to make plans with the ancients" (Confucius said) and put themselves in the poet's shoes. Dialogue, communication, and imaginative experience allow students to enter a state where "my heart is the heart of the Tang Dynasty, and the heart of the Tang Dynasty is my heart", and achieve Wang Guowei's "Looking at things with me, everything is into the realm of my color”. The students and the poet have an emotional resonance, which triggers the psychological impulse to express their feelings.

Specifically, in text interpretation activities, the minds of students and authors can achieve communication and tacit understanding in dialogue situations, stir up the accumulation of life accumulated in the hearts of students, touch their sensitive and passionate heartstrings, and make them Generate the impulse to write, allowing the torrent of language to vent. 2. Conversion from "meaning" to "words" So, how can students transform the "meaning" internalized in their hearts into "words"? I believe that there will be a two-level process here: First, the "meaning" internalized in the heart is transformed into the students' "spoken language".

In students' oral expressions, because teachers create some situations, have topics of interest, and can also use body language, it is easier for students to express. The second is to transform "oral language" into "written language", that is, students must express the "meaning" formed in their hearts accurately and delicately in tangible words.

In the teaching design of this course, the teacher brings students into the zone of "expressing their feelings directly and unable to stop" and "resigning after being moved by emotion". Ye Shengtao said: "The natural sequence of writing should be that I understand things, feel something in my heart, and the waves of emotion hit me. I have the desire to speak, and I want to talk, so the article was born."

This At this time, the "idea" in the students' hearts has reached the point where it is "ready to come out" and reaches Ye.

2. Imitate the teaching design lesson plan of the poem What Color I Love

What Color I Love Teaching Design Lesson Plan Teaching objectives: 1. Learn poetry, understand the content of the poem, and experience the author’s feelings. 2. Recognize the 10 new words in this lesson, including 9 It is required to be able to write new words. 3. Understand and appreciate the artistic conception of poetry, stimulate students’ thoughts and feelings of loving life, and students’ creativity and imagination. 4. Recite poetry correctly, fluently and emotionally. Teaching preparation: new word cards. Class schedule: 3 class hours Teaching design: The first lesson: 1. Introducing excitement and reading the text for the first time. Our world is colorful and our lives are colorful. Read the text by yourself and see what colors the author likes? Why? 2. Group self-study and initial perception. 1. The group leader leads the group members to discuss how to prepare for a preliminary understanding of the text content and eliminate text barriers. 2. The teacher guides and proposes learning methods. The learning methods can be summarized as four readings: First reading: Scanning (Removing reading obstacles). Read the text quietly and freely, read the pronunciation of the characters in the text accurately, mark the words you don’t know or don’t understand, and look them up in the dictionary to solve them. Second reading: continuous reading. Members in the group divide into natural paragraphs. Read the text, read through the text, and check the pronunciation of the words. Third reading: Want to read. Read the text quietly and freely, and think about what is written in the text while reading? Fourth reading: Selective reading. Choose your favorite sentence and read it several times. 3. Under the leadership of the group leader, students study the text by themselves. (Teacher’s tour guidance) 4. Check the self-study situation (1) (Create words on the blackboard) in self-study What difficulties do you face when writing? (Difficulties in pronunciation, font shape, meaning, etc.) What other good methods do you want to tell your classmates when learning Chinese characters on their own? Focus on guiding the strokes of the three characters "Wei, Wei and Wu". Students communicate and learn. (2) Show students the difference between "宝" and "宝". The teacher guides students to carefully distinguish their different usages. 3. Read the text again to understand the artistic conception. 1. Read the text in sections by name, while other students listen and imagine. 2. Name and briefly describe the colorful pictures formed in the mind after reading. 4. Complete the "Chinese World" of "Chinese World" and copy it over time: green, blue, vast, mighty, riding the wind and waves... The second lesson: 1. Review the text and accumulate words. 1. Try to memorize poems and find words that describe colors. 2. Say the words you have accumulated about "color". 2. Read carefully and experience emotions. 1. Students Independently explore the writing of three sections. 2. Guide students to understand the author’s pursuit of hometown, life and ideals. 3. Students freely discuss their favorite colors and reasons. 3. Guide students to read poems emotionally. 4. Assign homework : 1. Complete the "Chinese World" and look for words that describe colors: red () ()... The teacher focuses on instructing students to "use association to understand words" (Golden Key) 2. Please imitate the poem and compile another paragraph. The third lesson is one , display the sequel to cultivate interest. 1. Display within the group and evaluate the best works. 2. Exchange outstanding works with the whole class. 3. The teacher guides students to choose meaningful and vivid things to describe. 2. Read it , memorize it. Not only can we use words to describe the colors of the world, but the ancients also loved colors. Show "Yu Gezi" and "Xiao Chu Jingci Temple to Send Lin Zifang" 1. Read to yourself and solve the unfamiliar words .2. Underline the words describing color in the poem. 3. Talk about the picture you imagined. 3. After class, collect ancient poems about describing color. 3. How to change a poem into a narrative

How to set up a good framework for an article can not only help us determine how to write, but also determine to a certain extent what we are doing. What should be written in the beginning, body and end. Sun Tzu's Art of War says: "The battle situation cannot be better than the strange and right, and the meaning of the strange and right cannot be defeated. The strange and the right arise from each other, just like the endless cycle, and practice can lead to poverty." The structure of a composition is something deep-seated, and it is inseparable from its origin. Our narrative about people can adopt the following structure:

1. Introduction: description of the character’s appearance to clarify the theme

2. Narrative: selected from different angles

3. Reveal the title: Write in detail one thing that best reflects the character’s ideological connotation.

4. Enlightenment: stick to the topic or discuss or express emotions.

In this article, we have laid down the basic structure of writing narratives about people. In the next article, we will talk about how to write about people to make the article vivid.

4. Please rewrite poetry

I don’t know what you want, let me teach you! Design ideas for rewriting ancient poetry. This design can allow students to enter poetry through rewriting training of ancient poetry, have a spiritual dialogue with the author, appreciate the profound artistic conception of ancient poetry, and understand the splendid and long history of the ancient culture of the motherland, thereby cultivating students to creatively use the motherland. The ability to express feelings through language. Writing process 1. Preparation before class 1. Let students write the ancient poems they like and the reasons why they like them. 2. Choose a song or a painting for the poems they like. , pay attention to the connection between the content of the poem and the selected music or painting. 3. Let the students share the music or painting they chose for the poem with the class, and introduce the reasons for choosing these songs or paintings. Then let other students comment on it Comment on the poems and the selected music or paintings. Then ask students to express the above content in words to lay the foundation for classroom rewriting. 2. Class operations 1. Introduction of excitement. There was a scholar who was called because of his excellent calligraphy. He wrote Wang Zhihuan's "Liangzhou Ci" for the Empress Dowager Cixi. While writing, he accidentally missed the word "Jian" in the poem. After reading it, Cixi thought that the scholar was mocking her for being uneducated. She was furious and ordered the scholar to be pushed out and beheaded. The scholar was so anxious that he quickly said that what he had written was not a poem by Wang Zhihuan, but a poem, and he recited it loudly on the spot. When Cixi heard this, she turned her anger into joy, let the scholar go, and gave him many rewards. The classmates knew that How does the scholar recite? (After the students discussed and answered, the teacher gave the answer: Far up the Yellow River, there are white clouds, an isolated city and Wanren Mountain. Why complain about the Qiang flute? The spring breeze from the willows will not pass through the Yumen Pass.) The intelligence and wit of the scholar are praised, but at the same time, it also enlightens us, The connotation of ancient poetry is rich and profound, and multiple styles are interconnected. Another example is the well-known poem "Qingming" by Du Mu, which has been adapted into Wujue, Ci and drama. Today, let us go into ancient times together In the world of poetry, pick up a few waves of poetry to rewrite and describe them to create a gorgeous chapter. 2. Analyze images. Training purpose: This link mainly allows students to learn to analyze and extract the images in ancient poetry, so as to prepare for accurate and comprehensive rewriting. Poetry lays the foundation. Training intention: Classical poetry has always been known for its conciseness and richness of meaning. The short length often contains extremely rich connotations. There are beautiful scenery, sincere and profound emotions, and philosophies that inspire wisdom. As we chanted, its long lasting charm slowly flowed out from our lips. 5. How about using ancient poetry in the examination room and rewriting it into a composition?

I don’t know if this person is going to take the college entrance examination or the high school entrance examination. For the college entrance examination, argumentative essays should be the main focus. If you want to use poetry, it is best to use poetry. Famous lines and the background or allusions of the poem are used as material examples. If you insist on rewriting, it will be slightly more difficult. For the high school entrance examination, I personally recommend using this form in topic compositions. Even if you make up a story or something, it must be related to life. Yes, never let the wild horses of thought run wild = =! Or write the poem as a clue. If necessary, you can also modify one or two words in the poem (replace with another word or something). This form of clue will be very popular if used well. But no matter what it is, The most important thing about the exam is the words. This directly affects the mood of the marking teacher and the score of the essay. Next, there are questions at the beginning. If possible, you should click on the questions everywhere to make the article more compact. But the questions at the beginning are the most important. . 6. How to revise an essay (lesson plan) (outside article)

Teaching purpose: Cultivate students’ ability and habit of revising essays Teaching content: 1. Famous quotes about article revision 1. Articles should be revised over and over again Think about the best sentences 2. Good writing is not as good as good correction 3. He Qifang: Throughout the ages, anyone who writes well has probably spent time on revision.

4. Ye Shengtao: After writing something, read it several times, revise it, and then do the math. This is a good habit. 5. Lu Xun: Read it at least twice after writing it, and try your best to delete unnecessary words, sentences, and paragraphs without any regrets.

2. Stories about the revision of the article: 1. The poems written by Bai Juyi are easy to understand, and even illiterate old ladies can understand them.

One day, Bai Juyi read a poem he had written to his neighbor's old lady. The old lady didn't understand it at first. Bai Juyi went back and carefully revised the poem. After revising it, he read it to her again, but the old lady still couldn't understand it. Unable to understand, Bai Juyi went back and corrected it repeatedly until the old lady understood it, and he was not satisfied.

2. It is said that when Wang Anshi, one of the "Eight Great Masters of the Tang and Song Dynasties" and a famous writer in the Northern Song Dynasty of my country, wrote the sentence "The spring breeze turns green to the south bank of the river", he repeatedly thought about the word "green" and revised it successively. From "to", "blowing", "passing", "coming", "staying"... I kept changing it until I was satisfied with the word "green", so this famous sentence that has been passed down to this day was born. 3. The full text of the prose "Mr. Fujino" written by the great Chinese literary master Lu Xun is less than 4,000 words, but there are more than 160 changes.

4. According to records, Russian great writers Lev and Tolstoy revised their masterpiece "War and Peace" seven times. "Anna Karenina" took five years to write, and only the beginning part was revised. It was revised 20 times. Hemingway revised the ending of "A Farewell to Arms", which is the last page, and rewrote it 39 times before he was satisfied.

5. "A Dream of Red Mansions" has been read for ten years, with five additions and deletions. 3. Relevant modifications (1) Modifications to conventional compositions 1. Pay attention to external beauty: modifications of literary writing First, the modification of literary writing The basic requirements are correct fonts, clear strokes, clear modifications, and neat rolls.

The handwriting should not be illegible, illegible, confusing, or blurry. Whether the font is correct and whether the writing surface is neat is also one of the reflections of a person's language quality.

A person with high cultural accomplishment must master the language of the motherland, develop good writing habits, and give people a good impression. Secondly, when writing, you also need to pay attention to the banknote format.

For the line format, the font size should be moderate, the stroke thickness should be appropriate, and the word and line order should be just right. Horizontal paper and square paper have different requirements, so you should pay attention to this when writing.

In addition, punctuation not only plays the role of sentence segmentation, but also plays a very important role in tone, which directly affects the ideological expression of the article. Therefore, when it comes to punctuation, it is necessary to ensure that the usage complies with regulations, the form is written in a standard manner, and the format is used appropriately.

For example: various period marks cannot appear at the beginning of a line; quotation marks, brackets, and the first half of a book title cannot appear at the end of a line, and the second half does not appear at the beginning of a line; dashes and ellipses occupy two spaces. There is no break; the continuation mark and the spacer mark occupy one space, and these four symbols are all placed in the line when writing; the emphasis mark, the proper name mark and the wavy book title mark are marked under the words. 2. Pay attention to inner beauty: modify the concept, structure, and language. The specific steps and methods are as follows: First, check whether the content of the article is relevant and whether the center is clear.

Delete the content and sentences that are irrelevant to the topic and have nothing to do with the center. If the materials related to the center are unclear or unspecific, they should be rewritten clearly and specifically, and the missing parts should be filled in. Second, check whether the structure of the article is clear.

It depends on whether the hierarchical arrangement of the paragraphs is reasonable, whether the details are appropriate and the key points are highlighted, whether the transition is natural, and whether the previous and later ones are connected. If there are any inappropriate or deficient parts, they should be adjusted or changed, and if there are repeated paragraphs, they should be deleted.

Third, check whether the sentences in the article are smooth and vivid, and whether the wording is accurate. The language of the article must be appropriate, concise, and vivid. If it is unclear or insufficient, it must be corrected.

(2) Several conventional methods for revising compositions 1. Check carefully and be meticulous: this is required for the inspection of inner beauty. 2. Ask for advice humbly and listen to opinions: "Those who are in authority are confused, but those who are onlookers know clearly."

Students always have some preferences for their own works. They don’t want to delete or modify them, but they always feel reluctant to part with them. At this time, give the work to your classmates and listen to their opinions with an open mind, so that you can discover your own shortcomings and improve your composition level.

3. Recite to yourself, and change it if it doesn’t go your way: This is a better method of self-examination. During the recitation process, if you find something that is not smooth and difficult to understand, it should be revised.

If it goes smoothly, it will be six; if it doesn’t go smoothly, it will be deleted.

4. Summary: Writing a good composition is not an easy task and requires long-term and multi-faceted efforts.

Only by reading more, memorizing more, writing more, and revising more can we improve. However, many students now write articles as soon as they start writing, and the important task of revising the articles is handed over to the teacher.

However, the teacher’s careful corrections sometimes resulted in “disdain” from many students. How can you improve your level in this way? Everyone should learn from the valuable experience of masters at home and abroad, both ancient and modern, and practice hard skills in revising their articles.

5. Comments on comments: Comments from classmates, comments from parents, comments from teachers, comments from yourself labor. However, there is a common phenomenon in the current primary school composition teaching that is out of touch with students' knowledge level and life reality. Many students' homework is "fake, big, and empty", which appears dull, lifeless, lacks vitality, and lacks creativity, which seriously hinders students' creativity. The development of thinking.

Therefore, it is particularly urgent and important to improve children's understanding and expression ability, establish innovative consciousness and develop creative ability through composition teaching. This is not only the need of composition teaching reform, but also the objective requirement of modern education for talent cultivation.

I think it should be cultivated from the following aspects: 1. Seek innovation in propositions to stimulate students’ curiosity and desire for knowledge. Mr. Ye Shengtao said: "When setting essay topics, you must think about the students, get into the students' hearts, and make sure they have something to say."

This means that the essay topics must be based on the psychological characteristics of the students. Starting from the beginning, we should be familiar with the specific situations of students in terms of perception, thinking, imagination, emotion, interest, etc., and get into their hearts to make propositions. A good essay topic attracts students just like flowers attract bees, thereby stimulating students' interest in writing.

Therefore, I agree. 7. The ancient poem "Village Living" is adapted into a composition.

The ancient poem "Village Living" is adapted into a composition. One day in spring, Gao Ding went out for a walk and saw that the grass had already poked out its green head.

The grass that grew first swayed, as if calling other partners. Several oriole calls were heard in the air. Gao Ding looked up and saw two orioles chasing each other and playing.

It was February in spring, and Gao Ding came to the embankment to enjoy the beautiful spring scenery. At this time, a few willow branches touched him lightly.

Gao Ding looked up and found a willow tree next to him, stroking the embankment with its green branches. Gao Ding walked a few more steps and found that the front was getting blurry - it turned out to be the evaporation of water and vegetation, condensing like smoke. He felt as if he was in a fairyland.

The children in the village were after school. They didn't delay much along the way and came back very early. After the children returned home, they quickly picked up the kite and ran out the door. Taking advantage of the strong east wind, they happily flew the kite.

At this time, the poet Gao Ding also ran over to join in the fun and said, "Can you add me?" Those children all agreed to add Gao Ding. So Gao Ding and the children happily played kite flying.

When it got dark, the children reluctantly collected the kites and left. Gao Ding was also a little reluctant - because he had not played so happily for a long time. When he got home, he wrote a poem to express his emotions: The grass grows long and the orioles fly in the February sky, and the willows brush the embankment and are drunk by the spring smoke.

Children come back early from school and are busy flying kites in the east wind. It is titled "Village Dwelling".

Gao Ding looked at this poem and remembered the scene of flying a kite today, and couldn't help but smile. Because he was so happy today.