1. An essay about a child being beaten to death due to domestic violence

With the improvement of people’s awareness of rights, gender equality and other concepts, violence between husband and wife has attracted the attention of most people . However, people are not surprised when it comes to violence against children. This may be related to the traditional concepts of the Chinese people. "The body, hair, and skin are all received by the parents." In the eyes of many Chinese people, children are like the private property of their parents, that is, "what they receive is from me" and they must be left to "my" disposal. Therefore, "a filial son emerges from under a stick" and "no talent can be achieved without beating", which became the correct reasons for treating children violently.

There are many heinous incidents of child abuse in society, all in the name of "education": incidents such as girls whose heads were scalded with boiling water and their mouths were sewn with fishing thread, and biological mothers who beat their own children to death. Newspaper. Society should not remain indifferent in the face of domestic violence against children.

There is no doubt that there are still many shortcomings in the protection of children’s rights and interests in our country. You must know that once a child reaches birth, he has become an independent individual with independent thoughts and rights. The psychological impact of domestic violence on children is immeasurable. Children who often encounter domestic violence will have certain psychological distortions, which will affect the child's entire life and even society. According to surveys, most children who grow up in a violent environment will have certain violent tendencies, and are prone to psychological deviations such as irritability, isolation, and paranoia, thus laying hidden dangers.

From this point of view, spanking children is not just a private matter within the family that cannot be interfered with by others, but a matter for the entire society. The whole society should establish correct ideas and eliminate domestic violence against spanking children. Say "NO" and let the children live in the love of the family and the love of society. Only in this way can the children be "naturally good" instead of "naturally evil". 2. How to write essay comments

Let’s first look at the comments a Chinese teacher wrote for a high school sophomore student’s five essays in one semester: 1. The essay "Guilt" recalls the junior high school English teacher Mr. Xu , the first one is about Teacher Xu wrongly accusing "I" of premature love; the second one is about meeting Teacher Xu by chance on the street after we parted, and Teacher Xu stopped him first; the third one is about "I" being addicted to the Internet; the fourth one is about meeting Teacher Xu again when he returned to his alma mater, and Xu The teacher was disappointed, so "I" felt guilty. Teacher’s overall comments: Lack of vivid materials. 2. The essay "Talk about Quality" is an argumentative essay for the material. Material: "The packaging bag of a certain brand of bread has the following words printed on it: Ingredients: French yeast, additives, British coconut, coconut powder, Australian butter. Someone entered the factory to investigate , it turned out to be ordinary bread, not those 'foreign products'." The essay first wrote "First of all, the merchants saw the preferences of the Chinese people", then wrote "Secondly, this originated from the profit-seeking interests of the merchants", and finally wrote "In short, the quality of the Chinese people. Needs to be improved”. Teacher’s overall comment: The final conclusion deviated from the material. 3. The composition "It's not harmful to talk about the relationship between boys and girls", which writes: "Puppy love is certainly wrong, but you can't include normal interactions between boys and girls within its scope." The teacher's eyebrows commented: Just one sentence. I antagonized teachers and parents. When you are writing an essay, you must be fair and not vomiting. General Comment: Can injustice convince people? Learn to "persuad" and put yourself in the right position. 4. The composition "Middle school students studying abroad has big disadvantages", which writes: "Getting back to the subject, middle school students can learn a lot from studying abroad, and the benefits are huge." The teacher frowned: Don't imitate the Japanese! 5. The essay "Talking about middle school students reading classics" first talks about the various benefits of classics, and then writes: "Some people will say: 'You talk about classics so well, don't they have any shortcomings?' The answer is yes." Teacher's eyebrow criticism: slap yourself in the mouth. The article went on to write: "Everything has two sides, and we cannot observe and understand things one-sidedly." The teacher said with an eyebrow: The political class has begun again. General comments: The opinions are wavering and there is no conclusion.

These comments from this teacher are normal. I think many Chinese teachers have written similar comments. They are not worth talking about. However, at the end of the semester, the teacher asked the students to When writing the "composition summary", this student showed a strong sense of failure in the summary, and wrote with resentment: "In addition, teacher, when you wrote the comments, you were too 'mean' and hurtful. Originally, I also wrote I prefer to write essays, but now I am more and more afraid of writing.

"The teacher's comments failed to stimulate students' enthusiasm for writing, but instead dampened their enthusiasm. That is a big sin. Now, combined with the analysis of the comments written by this teacher, I would like to talk about how to write composition comments. 1. Comments should point out problems. The focus of each composition training is not exactly the same, and the teacher's comments can focus on this focus or make corrections. For high school students who have just learned to write argumentative essays, they must first make their arguments well-founded, like the student in "Talk." The final conclusion in the article "The quality of Chinese people needs to be improved" has little to do with the materials given. The teacher's comment that "the conclusion deviates from the materials" is reasonable. 2. The comments should be targeted for each composition training. It is best to select one or two training points, and do not insist on perfection. The comments should be written based on these training points, with less reference to other points, and no special criticism. For example, the student's essay "Guilt" is a narrative essay, and the material may be very bland. But if students can use the materials skillfully and express clearly what they want to express, there is no need to force the materials to be "vivid". 3. Comments should reflect warmth and affection. Comments are of course a communication between the teacher and the students about a certain composition, and of course they are meant to point out problems. However, being full of warmth is still a prerequisite. Although the teacher’s comments on the students’ three essays accurately pointed out the problems in the students’ language expression, the tone was too sharp and a bit “hurtful”. If it is too appropriate, it will easily dampen students' enthusiasm. 4. Comments should be written as literary criticism and should respect the students' individuality in their compositions. Do not use the same standards to polish off the edges of students' compositions. Stop writing generic words such as "smooth sentences" and "complete structure". Comments should also arouse readers' thinking and imagination, and make people feel enlightened. 3. How to write comments for students' compositions

How to Write comments on students' compositions

1. Comments should pay attention to emotions

The compositions of primary school students truly reflect their thoughts and practices and are a natural expression of their pure psychology, using the teacher's true feelings. To infect students can arouse their enthusiasm and improve their ideological understanding. For example, a student in our class has poor academic performance and usually behaves very lonely. He confided that he often got into trouble and fights because he felt bitter and annoyed after his parents divorced. The article was very true, and I almost shed tears after reading it. When I wrote the review, it was like this. Although the article is short, every word is precious, because every sentence is meaningful. It shows that you are a student with great personality. There is not a day when you are not thinking and making progress. Your hardships and troubles are your motivation. As long as you do not use them in fighting, I believe you will succeed. There are teachers and classmates around you, and you are also Will it be painful or annoying?

2. Comments should be encouraging

As adults, we all hope that others will appreciate our achievements enthusiastically and sincerely, let alone as students. What about children? In the process of composition, regardless of whether the students write well or not, the length and length are the fruits of the students' labor. Therefore, teachers should look at the content written by the students, the feelings expressed, and the language and methods used. etc., to see their outstanding achievements or personality. The evaluation of students' writings should be mainly based on praise, so that students can constantly gain new understanding and gain successful experience in the process of composition evaluation.

3. Comments should be inspiring

When writing comments, focus on encouragement and do not exclude criticism, because comments also play a role in giving guidance, but you should pay attention to the tactful and friendly language. You cannot accuse directly, let alone be sarcastic or sarcastic. For example: When a classmate wrote the essay "My Teacher", there was a paragraph in it: Her pair of black and shining eyes seemed to be able to speak, motivating us every day, sometimes making you blush, sometimes making you happy. Such an article cannot be simply written with unspecific comments. What did the teacher's eyes say when I wrote it like this? Can you write specifically based on your usual observations? After the students read it, they immediately made additions.

4. There should be discussion-style comments

Primary school students are just learning to write essays. Most of their essays are semi-finished products with many shortcomings and flaws. This is normal. We cannot use literary standards to demand students.

Students are more likely to accept the shortcomings in their compositions if they use a discussion-style comment. For example: When a student wrote the essay "The Scenery of Spring", he wrote this sentence at the beginning, spring is the season when all things are fluffy, and nature appears full of vitality. In this sentence, the word fluffy was inappropriate. I first wrote him the meaning of fluffy next to it: describing the looseness of grass, leaves, hair, fluff, etc. Then you write a review. Think about it. Is "fluffy" appropriate to use here? What word would be more appropriate? When the student saw the comments, he came to me with the composition text and told me that he knew that the word fluffy was inappropriate and should be changed to "resuscitate". I gave my affirmation. Consultative comments can achieve a harmonious and democratic atmosphere. It encourages students to take the initiative to learn, increases students' enthusiasm for revising their compositions, and improves students' ability to revise their own compositions. 4. How to guide students to write good composition comments

1. Focus on encouragement and appreciation, supplemented by suggestions

Comments are very important in composition evaluation. The vast majority of students care more about essay comments than scores and grades. When students first started correcting each other's compositions, some students made comments that were too harsh, such as "What you write like this is pure nonsense" and "Your handwriting is so ugly that it doesn't look like it was written by a human being." Such comments The new bruise on the young author's self-esteem is too great. In response to this situation, I promptly guided students to focus on encouragement and appreciation when writing comments, and try their best to discover the shining points in the classmates' compositions they corrected, even if it is the standard and correct use of punctuation marks, or the good use of a certain word. , or the topic is good, the beginning is good, the ending is good... As long as there is a good aspect, even if it is a small one, you must praise the other person promptly and show your appreciation for the other party. With my efforts, the comments written by students have greatly improved. For example, one student wrote: "The ideas in your composition are shining, but the writing is a bit disappointing. The shining ideas should be expressed in beautiful writing, right?" "What wonderful words! In this way, students will gradually be appreciated by their classmates, and they even feel more face-saving than receiving praise from the teacher. This can stimulate their interest in writing and arouse their enthusiasm and confidence in writing.

2. It varies from person to person, and the specific composition will be treated specifically.

For the compositions of students with poor writing ability, I guide the reviewers to mainly focus on basic abilities when writing comments, such as Evaluate on correct writing, smooth sentences, clear expression, etc. For the compositions of students with good writing ability, when writing comments, they should pay more attention to the selection of materials, layout planning, refining of themes, rich literary talent, timeliness, forward-looking, and profound Evaluate aspects such as sex.

3. The form of comments should be diverse and eclectic

Composition comments should be eclectic in both form and content, and avoid stereotypes and clichés. When instructing students to write essay comments, I guide them to add additional comments in a timely manner and then add a general comment. Some students wrote comments in the form of poems, letters, etc., and drew pictures such as smiling faces, angry faces, raised thumbs, etc. to assist in the comments. I affirmed and praised these practices in a timely manner.

Through the training this semester, the results have been remarkable. First, it eliminates the phenomenon of a small number of students not submitting essays. Secondly, the comments written by the vast majority of students are becoming more and more rich, pertinent, profound and valuable. Some students’ comments are close to 400 words, which invisibly trains students’ language expression ability. , the effect can be described as killing two birds with one stone.

In short, I personally believe that boldly letting students evaluate each other's compositions and guiding them to write positive comments is definitely not cutting corners in teachers' work, but a belief in and training of students' abilities. However, this teaching activity must not be left to chance. Teachers must organize and guide seriously and attentively to stimulate students' enthusiasm for evaluating each other's compositions and explore their inherent potential in evaluating compositions, so as to achieve twice the result with half the effort.

Comments on the composition process:

1. With full ***, it describes... 2. The key points are highlighted, the details are appropriate, and the content is specific.

3. The metaphor is appropriate and the words are vivid. 4. The language of the article is easy to understand, close to the reality of life, and makes people feel warm when reading it.

5. ... told us in a relaxed and pleasant tone, which is endlessly memorable. 6. The narrative is natural and vivid, the structure is compact, the connection is natural and coherent, and the center is prominent. 7. When describing scenery, the language is concise and accurate, and the associations are vivid and emotional, and the scenes are naturally integrated.

10. The young author observes carefully and narrates in an orderly manner. 12. Carefully and delicately depicts the characters' language, expressions, movements, etc. This is a major feature of this article.

The ending of the composition: 1. The ending just highlights the center, the language is simple but profound, and thought-provoking.

2. Switch with feeling and end with feeling. This will make the article coherent and coherent, and at the same time make the theme of the article loop back and forth, making it highly contagious.

3. The praise for the characters at the end is sincere and touching. 4. The implicit ending of the article not only highlights the topic, but also is thought-provoking.

5. Focus on expressing emotions at the end, which not only reflects the beginning but also summarizes the whole text. Coherent from beginning to end, in one go.

General comments: 1. The article is complex but not chaotic, and can be detailed and focused. 2. Made a delicate and vivid depiction.

3. ... is realistic, contains simple and profound philosophy, and is inspiring and exciting to read.

4. This article is full of ***, and you can feel the author's love for... from between the lines. The full text is clear in level and the sentences are fluent.

5. The case description is vivid, specific, interesting, and consistent with the previous metaphor... Finally, the author uses a few words to express his emotions towards..., which is touching. 6. The article is coherent and forms a complete image. 5. How to write essay comments

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How to write good essay comments:

1. A serious and appreciative correction attitude:

Emerson once said: "The secret of successful education lies in respecting students." Teachers should first correct their mentality, treat students with an equal attitude, view students' works with appreciation, and respect the fruits of students' labor.

It is not easy for students to write an essay in one or two classes. In their opinion, they have worked hard to write it and have reached their own better level. When you send it to the teacher for correction, you are looking forward to the teacher’s affirmation or correction so that you can draw strength and inspiration from it. For teachers, positive comments should be the main focus when correcting. The most important thing is to allow students to see their achievements and progress through comments and strengthen their confidence in writing good compositions. If there is too much negation, not only is it unnecessary, but it is also easy for students to lose their self-confidence, inhibit their creativity, and even misunderstand or even resent the teacher's corrections. Even if it is a composition written by a poor student, as long as the teacher reads it carefully with love for them, he can always find some advantages in it and not all of them are without merit. For example, the writing is true, all in my own language, and there is no plagiarism; I do not write exactly according to the pattern taught by the teacher, but I have my own creation; there are one or two examples that are very special and are not noticed by others and are not commonly used; there is one appropriate point. Quotes aphorisms, sayings or famous sayings; the language is simple, without any traces of modification or elaboration; it is all line drawing, straight to the point, without elaboration or exaggeration... Find these advantages, praise them when evaluating the essay, and give them adequate praise when appropriate. encourage. Teachers may wish to observe carefully, as students will be more motivated to learn after being praised.

The subject of the composition is human beings, and the composition cannot be without self. In the composition review and revision, we must also vigorously advocate loving "I", respecting "I", and publicizing "I", using this as a breakthrough to change the concepts in the composition review and revision. Passive situation.

It is necessary to stimulate students' desire to write, guide students to appreciate life with their souls, and express life with their personality. Therefore, teachers must establish the awareness of students' subjectivity and position themselves correctly in the composition review. Teachers are not outsiders or condescending judges of students' compositions. Rather, he is a participant in students’ compositions, a life experiencer like students, and a communicator of students’ ideas.

2. Comments should be encouraging:

I once saw such a story: An old gentleman from a private school found three unusual compositions when he was reviewing student compositions. Add comments to each of them. After writing the title of the first article, he only wrote the word "husband" and then disappeared. He commented: "It has great potential for composition!" The second article only had a title without even the word "husband". He commented: : "It's wonderful to lead without saying anything!" The third article was a complete waste. He didn't even write a title. He still added a comment to it: "It's a joy to be innocent." This is of course a joke, with some irony, but after laughing , thinking about it in reverse, I think it also has some enlightening significance, that is, paying attention to mastering the knowledge of encouragement when writing essay criticism. Teachers' eyes should not be focused on finding students' shortcomings, but should also find their strengths and encourage them. In a sense, good composition is not necessarily taught by teachers, but it may be encouraged by teachers. People often say that the art of education is ultimately an art of encouragement, and the same is true for writing essay reviews. A Chinese teacher must implement the principle of encouragement in comments, dare to encourage, and be good at encouraging. When teachers mark essays, they are not judges who judge cases. They don’t have to be so rigid. They can insist on encouraging strengths but not condoning shortcomings. When Mao Dun was in primary school, his teacher wrote this comment at the end of his article "The Great Ancestor of the Song Dynasty drank wine to release his troops": "With good writing power, good insight, a keen eye for reading history, and a knowledgeable argument, a boy can make a difference. He worked hard and studied hard. At the end of the article "On Emperor Qin Shihuang and Han Gaozu Sui Wen", the teacher's comments are even more wonderful: "The eyes are like a torch, the pen is as sharp as a sword, and there are thousands of words, like mercury leaking into the ground, pervasive..." Reading such words , we can imagine how the young Mao Dun was inspired and inspired by it. :

It is not easy for students to write a composition in one or two classes. In their opinion, they have worked hard to write and have a correcting attitude that has been carefully appreciated:

Emerson once said: "The secret of successful education lies in respecting students." Teachers should first correct their mentality. , treat students with an equal attitude, look at students' works with appreciation, and respect the results of students' labor.

Reach your own best level. When you send it to the teacher for correction, you are looking forward to the teacher’s affirmation or correction so that you can draw strength and inspiration from it. For teachers, positive comments should be the main focus when correcting. The most important thing is to allow students to see their achievements and progress through comments and strengthen their confidence in writing good compositions. If there is too much negation, not only is it unnecessary, but it is also easy for students to lose their self-confidence, inhibit their creativity, and even misunderstand or even resent the teacher's corrections. Even if it is a composition written by a poor student, as long as the teacher reads it carefully with love for them, he can always find some advantages in it and not all of them are without merit.

For example, the writing is true, all in my own language, and there is no plagiarism; I do not write exactly according to the pattern taught by the teacher, but I have my own creation; there are one or two examples that are very special and are not noticed by others and are not commonly used; there is one appropriate point. Quotes aphorisms, sayings or famous quotes; the language is simple, without any traces of modification or elaboration; it is all line drawing, straight to the point, without elaboration or exaggeration... Find these advantages and give praise when evaluating the composition. 6. How should teachers give reasonable praise? Comments on student writing

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1. The full text is narratively focused, unbranched, simple and fluent in language, and sincere and touching in emotion.

2. By enriching the characters The language and actions bring out the ideological quality of the characters. The imagination of the article is reasonable, the narrative is natural and vivid, the structure is compact, the connection is natural and coherent, and the center is prominent.

3. The language is simple, the center is clear, the conception is reasonable, and the writing level Clear.

4. Being able to write the inner activities of characters very vividly is really valuable and leaves a deep impression on people.

5. The beginning and end of the article are connected, and the center is clear. The structure is complete.

6. The article is well-founded, persuasive, highlights the personality of the characters, has natural context transitions, is clearly organized, refers to the beginning and the end, highlights the topic at the end, and highlights the central idea.

7 . The author observes carefully, describes delicately, uses lively language, and expresses innovative techniques. 7. How to write essay comments

How to write essay comments Fengxin No. 2 Middle School: Xu Xiaomei Summary of content: A good comment Not only can it help students analyze the pros and cons of composition, but it can also stimulate students' enthusiasm for writing. Therefore, teachers should point less to shortcomings and more to advantages in writing comments, make less assertions, and make more discussions. They should not seek to be comprehensive but focus on key points, and should encourage students to write comments. Composition comments are a summary evaluation of a student's composition from the form to the content by the Chinese teacher. If correction is an important part of composition teaching, then giving comments to students' compositions is the finishing touch of this part. Composition comments have both evaluation and guidance functions. It not only evaluates the quality of students' homework, but more importantly, achieves spiritual communication and exchange between teachers and students. Teachers use comments to arouse students' emotional resonance, cultivate students' aesthetic taste, and enable students to pass long-term Infected by comments, you can understand writing skills, hone your will and quality, arouse your interest in writing, ignite your passion for writing, and gradually improve your writing ability. Obviously, a good comment will be of great benefit to students: it can help students write good compositions and learn how to behave; it not only promotes emotional exchanges between teachers and students, but also harmonizes the relationship between teachers and students. It can be said that its significance goes far beyond the comment itself. A good comment can not only help students analyze the pros and cons of a composition, but also stimulate students' enthusiasm for writing. 1. Point less to shortcomings and more to advantages. In the past, when we corrected compositions, we always pointed out many shortcomings and shortcomings to students, such as "the center is not clear", "the content is not specific", "the material is inappropriate", "the structure is unreasonable", "Irregular writing"... It seems that only by doing this can we help students improve their writing skills, and only by doing this can we show the level of teachers. However, how can we make the center clear, the content specific, and the materials selected appropriately? After reading the comments, the students still didn't understand, but their enthusiasm for writing was greatly affected. We say that composition correction should focus on effectiveness. Why not focus more on the advantages and less on the shortcomings? We can completely put aside the unreasonable selection of materials in a certain exercise and point out the advantages of his article's exquisite conception and expressive language. Pointing out the advantages not only encourages students, but also strengthens correct knowledge. So, can we turn a blind eye to the shortcomings and problems in the exercises? Neither. Teachers should clearly point out existing critical problems and make suggestions for modifications. ——Of course, this content should generally not be reflected in the comments, but should be fed back to students in the composition review.

2. Make less judgments and discuss more. There is no doubt that teachers’ comments can only represent the opinions of one family. Different teachers can give different or even completely opposite evaluations on the same essay.

Therefore, it is unscientific for teachers to always judge students' compositions based on their own evaluation standards and require students to fully accept their own opinions. Unless there are obvious problems, teachers should generally not make judgments easily, but should discuss things from an equal standpoint. For example, instead of writing "The content is not substantial enough" in your review, you might say "In my opinion, your article would be better if you could flesh it out with more typical and specific material. What do you think?" Such exploratory comments make students feel that they and their work are respected, and usually they will pay full attention to the comments given by the teacher.

3. Not seeking to be comprehensive but focusing on the key points. Some teachers strive to be comprehensive in their comments, for fear of omitting a certain aspect and causing losses to students. Therefore, their comments can be described as detailed, specific, and sincere, from the review of the topic and the structure of the article to the choice of words, sentences, punctuation, and the word count requirements for the writing format. However, it is impossible to "complete all the results in one battle" in composition training, and there is more than one section of composition class, so why not consider "defeating each one"? Too much information is poured into students at once, making it difficult for students to understand and apply it. This is the so-called "biting off more than one can chew". Our approach is to comment only on the main aspects, and other content will be reflected through side comments or direct modifications. In this way, the priorities are clear, the key points are highlighted, students' efforts are directed, and the results are easy to detect. It also greatly improves the efficiency of teachers in correcting compositions.

4. Encourage students to write comments. The comments mentioned here include two types:

1. Self-evaluation after writing. Every time after students write a composition, after repeated revisions, they point out the advantages of their composition and put it in the comment column. This is not only a kind of self-affirmation and motivation, but also a reference for teachers to correct their compositions.

2. Mutual evaluation of classmates’ compositions. Students find each other's strengths in each other's compositions. This is first of all a process of learning from others' strengths and making up for their own shortcomings. At the same time, it can also be used as a reference for teachers to correct their compositions. Attention to the above four aspects enables composition teaching to overcome the shortcomings of one-way communication and form a new pattern of educational dialogue. In this equal dialogue and exchange, students' innovative spirit and writing ability will be subtly cultivated and improved. A good composition review can not only evaluate the level of students' composition, but also stimulate students' interest in writing, explore students' writing potential, and play a role in awakening, inspiring and motivating.