1. The article never tires of making hundreds of changes, and repeatedly refines the beautiful sentences to
code Wang Anshi's sentence "Spring breeze is green in Jiang Nanan". When writing the sentence "Spring breeze is green in Jiang Nanan", the word "green" is repeatedly scrutinized and revised, from "to".
2. When you write, you want to make wind, and you will make meritorious deeds every day. Deliberate poetry is beneficial to practice, and parallel language is especially good. Lou key "Jiang Cixi Wan Ci".
Translation: If you want to write like the wind, you should hone it every day. Deliberation makes the poem lean, the couple handsome and neat.
3. "After reading for ten years, it was added and deleted five times". "Every word seems to be blood, and ten years of hard work is unusual"-Cao Xueqin
Cao Xueqin was born in Nanjing and lived a rich life in his youth. When he was thirteen years old, that is, the year after the Cao family was copied, his family moved back to Beijing, and his family's fortune declined sharply. From then on, Cao Xueqin lived a hard life. Every word seems to be blood, and ten years of hard work is unusual. This masterpiece exhausted his whole life's efforts, but before the book was finished, he became ill and "died of tears" because of his beloved son's sudden death, and he was less than 5 years old.
4. Throughout the ages, anyone who writes well has probably worked hard on revision. -He Qifang
The moral is to tell us that constant revision is the ladder of our progress.
5. Don't be in a hurry to write, and don't hate revision. Instead, rewrite the same thing ten times or twenty times. -Leo Tolstoy
The moral tells us that we should not rush for success in everything, be calm and calm, seek gradual progress and strive for perfection. 2. About the composition adapted from ancient poems
Li Bai's "To Wang Lun" is a well-known farewell poem.
the first two sentences are positive narration, and the last two sentences are that things are aroused, and the invisible friendship is transformed into a vivid image, ethereal and aftertaste, natural and true. "Chinese Curriculum Standard" points out that exercise teaching should "stimulate students' imagination and fantasy, and encourage them to write imaginary things."
This poem provides a basis for students to imagine freely. We might as well instruct students to rewrite this ancient poem into modern literature. Students should use their own life experience according to the content of the ancient poem, imagine the scene of Li Bai and Wang Lun saying goodbye, and taste the poet's feelings between the lines. The exercises written by students will definitely be interesting.
This extracurricular exercise design is suitable for students in grades 5 and 6 of primary school. Writing process: 1. Enter the poetic realm and taste reading; 3. Appreciate the soundtrack animation of "To Wang Lun", and the teacher narrates the legend about this poem.
2. Put yourself in Wang Lun's shoes and imagine the experience. 1. "Li Bai will want to travel by boat". (3) Play the animation of "drinking and enjoying the moon". The teacher tells with deep affection: Seeing this, Li Bai is full of emotion and thoughts, and there are scenes of getting along with Wang Lun: drinking-guiding students to imagine their language, movements and demeanor. The teacher introduced the following situation in camera for students to imagine: In Li Bai's eyes, Wang Lun is a witty, studious and enterprising young man, who has the same interests and met each other late, and they can be said to have forgotten each other; In Wang Lun's eyes, although Li Bai's poems are famous all over the world, he has never been arrogant. He is a charming and knowledgeable scholar and an amiable elder.
Appreciating the Moon-Li Bai is very fond of the moon, and has written many wonderful poems about the moon, such as Thinking of a Quiet Night, Walking on the Moon in Gulang, Moon Song in Emei Mountain, etc. Students can be guided to apply them to this situation. Wang Lun recites these poems and expresses his admiration.
Play, play chess, fish, recite poems, climb mountains ... 2. "Suddenly smell the singing on the shore" "and yet, while China holds our friendship, and heaven remains our neighbourhood." -Wang Bo "Advise you to drink more wine, and there is no reason to go out to Yangguan in the west."
-Wang Wei "oh, go and ask this river running to the east, if it can travel farther than a friend's love!?" -Li Bai "Mochow has no bosom friend in the road ahead. Who in the world doesn't know Jun?" -Gao Shi "Yangliu Dongmen Tree, Qingqing Sandwiches the Royal River. I have been climbing hard recently, and I should be separated. "
-Wang Zhihuan 3. "Peach Blossom Pond is deeper than thousands of feet, not as good as Wang Lun's." time was long before I met her, but is longer since we parted saw you off for a thousand miles, but there was a farewell. When Li Bai got on the boat, the boat gradually went away, and his eyes were blurred with tears. He couldn't help but sing a poem-teachers and students chanted "To Wang Lun" in unison. Third, stimulate expression and rewrite ancient poems. 1. Students, today, we came to the Peach Blossom Pond and experienced the affectionate farewell scene together. Can we still be indifferent? Then let's get a pen and write down this touching scene! 5. Students rewrite ancient poems, and teachers give individual guidance.
4. Show your works and exchange comments. 1. Who wants to read your own composition to everyone? Teacher's camera comments. 2. After appreciating this classmate's composition, you can talk about what you admire or are most moved by, and you can also talk about your personal opinions or suggestions.
3. Teacher's summary: Students, today, we crossed the boundaries of time and space, talked with the ancients and talked with poets, and gained the nourishment of language, the edification of emotion and the treasure of friendship. Can you talk about your feelings in this class in one sentence? Design comments: I think that rewriting ancient poems by students is a process of "conversion of words and meanings". Let's try to elaborate this exercise design as an example.
1. How can the transformation from "speech" to "meaning" as an ancient poem be transformed into "meaning" in students' minds? In my opinion, teachers mainly guide students to penetrate the "two layers", that is, the surface layer and the intrinsic layer of language. From the operational point of view, the first is "dialogue", which allows students to use their own life experience and knowledge reserves to have a "dialogue" with poets, enrich the "blank" of ancient poems with imagination and association, and make the "meaning" contained in ancient poems full and complete.
the second is "understanding". On the basis of dialogue with poets, students are guided to "touch" and "taste" ancient poems with their own senses. Due to the deep involvement and emotional input of students, they enter the "connotation layer" from the "language surface" and thus enter the "artistic conception" of ancient poems. On the basis of * * * knowledge, * * Ming, on the basis of * * * Ming is a heartbeat together.
Only in this way can ancient poetry be endowed with vivid spirituality, which is the "meaning" in students' minds. In the teaching design of this course, the teacher first leads the students to "put on the prose to get in love", and through appreciation, taste and reading, the students can "talk" with the poets, so as to understand poetry and understand poetry.
Then the teacher leads the students to "put themselves in their own shoes and imagine the experience", and by creating situations, the students can "recite poems and read books, and live with the ancients; Reading, reciting poems, and scheming with the ancients "(Confucius' language), put yourself in dialogue and communication with poets, and let students enter the situation of" making my heart enter the heart of the Tang Dynasty, and making the heart of the Tang Dynasty be my heart "through imaginative experience, and reach the realm of Wang Guowei's" seeing things from me, everything is in my color ". Students and poets have an emotional * * * sound, which leads to the psychological impulse to express their feelings.
specifically, it is to make students and the author communicate and understand each other in the dialogue situation in the text interpretation activities, stir up the accumulation of life accumulated in the students' hearts, touch their sensitive and affectionate heartstrings, and make them have the impulse to write, so as to let the torrent of language vent. Second, the transformation from "meaning" to "speech" So, how can students transform the "meaning" internalized in their hearts into "speech"? In my opinion, there will be two levels of process here: one is to transform the "meaning" internalized in the heart into the "oral language" of students.
In students' oral expression, it is easier for students to express themselves because the teachers have created some situations and have topics of interest, and they can also use body language. The second is to transform "oral language" into "written language", that is, students should accurately and finely express the "meaning" formed in their hearts with tangible words.
in the teaching design of this course, teachers take students into the zone of "expressing their feelings directly, but they can't stop" and "expressing their feelings but giving up". Ye Shengtao said: "The natural order of composition should be that I know things, I feel in my heart, and the waves of feelings impact me. When I have the desire to speak, I want to pour it out, so the article was born."
At this point, the "meaning" in the students' minds has reached the position of "be vividly portrayed", reaching the leaf. 3. Help to revise a 7-word composition. Help me find out what is urgent and wrong. It is best to change
As a result to Consequently to avoid As in the first two sentences. Keep healthy and keep our body fit. A good diet is important. Don't add having. a good habit of diet is very important. It is important to change it to good eating habits. There are generally two kinds of physical exercise, workout and Sport. It is seldom said that exercise. exercise makes you fit and helpsyou relax. Fit can be changed to healthy because you have been saying healthy.relax can be added after it. After hard study after intense study, you can say Above is my tips of keeping healthy at the end. These are my tips to keep healthy, because you didn't say it very specifically, and the method is a bit too big. 4. How to rewrite ancient poems into articles
Rewrite ancient poems, basically without changing the ideological content of ancient poems, only changing the form of ancient poems into vernacular, changing the structure and reorganizing the language.
Poem:
Qingpingle Village Residence
Author Xin Qiji Dynasty Song
Mao Yan is low and small, and the stream is covered with green grass.
when you're drunk, Wu's voice is charming, but who's got white hair?
Big Er hoes the east of Douxi, while Middle Er is weaving a chicken coop.
I like the death of children most, and I lie on the stream and peel the lotus.
Rewrite the article:
In the afternoon, I walked slowly with a leisurely mood and accidentally saw a low and small hut. Behind the hut are green and tall bamboos and rolling mountains, revealing the quiet atmosphere of the countryside. There is a stream next to the hut. The river is clear and transparent, and all the fish in the river can see it clearly. Under the sunshine, the river looks sparkling.
a breeze blew, causing ripples on the river. There are several beautiful lotus flowers on the stream, some of which are in full bloom; Some are in bud; Others seem to be put down. White inside and pink inside, like a shy girl with a veil on her face. There are clumps of green grass beside the stream, which grow very luxuriantly. Against the backdrop of the stream and lotus, it is even more beautiful and lovely.
There is an old white-haired couple in front of the hut. They just drank some wine. From their red faces, we can see that they are slightly drunk, leaning together and having an intimate conversation in the dialect of Wudi, and the second son next to them has put in a few words from time to time!
The eldest son of the old couple is weeding hard in the bean field on the east side of the stream. How hard he works! The second son is not idle, and is carefully weaving a chicken coop with bamboo and grass, very focused. The youngest son, who is not yet an adult, can't do anything. He can only lie on the side of the stream and tease the fish naughtily, while peeling the lotus and eating, shaking his feet. It's really lovely!
what a happy family! I was deeply intoxicated, and I just stood there, unwilling to leave for a long time ...
Expanding information:
Rewriting method:
1. Changing the style: I basically did not change the ideological content of the original, and mostly focused on changing the form of the original. For example, ancient poetry is rewritten into words, poetry into narrative, and narrative into expository; The novel was changed into a script.
2. Change the style: change classical Chinese into vernacular Chinese; Change the structure, change the order to flashback, and reorganize the materials;
3. Change the person: the first person is changed to the third person, and the third person is changed to the first person.
4. Change sentence patterns: enlarge sentences. Abbreviated sentences, etc.