As a Chinese teacher, correcting students' compositions is one of the most basic tasks. "The teacher is afraid to change the composition" not only because it takes us a lot of time, but also because every time I change the composition, it will hurt my brains for the students' composition evaluation. I often feel that "Jiang Lang is exhausted". In fact, as a Chinese teacher, we must not ignore the inspiring effect of comments on students. The following are some wonderful composition evaluations I collected. Let's share it! This paper is ingenious in conception and profound in connotation. On the surface, the little author writes about squeezing mud by himself, and savoring it carefully is to "shape" a brand-new campus with sincere childlike innocence, expressing children's expectation and positive theme for the development prospect of the school. The language is lively and full of childlike interest. The topic is the eyes of the article, and it takes some time before writing. The language of the characters in the article is true, especially a passage from my mother, which is original. This article wrote a very common thing about giving up your seat. Although the selection of materials is a bit trite, the writing method of comparison is still very appropriate: the description of characters is concise and vivid. The description of the portrait of middle-aged women is only a dozen words, but it captures the characteristics. The two descriptions of Mr. Pang are also very successful, which fully shows the author's disgust and contempt for him. Ending with a question leaves readers room to think. The ending sticks to the theme and expresses the author's complicated feelings. That's right. It starts with "crying" and ends with "laughing", which is a perfect combination of the beginning and the end and effectively expresses the theme. Little girl, don't forget that "there is no limit to learning the sea, but there is no limit to sailing." Life has a long way to go. If you don't reach your goal, you will be exhausted. Then the door of Peking University Tsinghua is open, and you are missing. What a pity! "The future is limitless, twelve-year-old children are precious, and another masterpiece has come out! Being able to speak this language means that there is no one in the motherland. Careful description of inner activities and clever care before and after prove that you have mastered certain writing skills. From your article, I seem to see Ba Jin in 2 1 century! " I understand your emotional pain very well. Thankfully, you are a strong child, a sensible child, because you have written such a touching masterpiece. I'm glad to have a student like you. As long as you grasp today, your future will be beautiful and happy. An ugly duckling flew into my jungle. I sympathize with her inferiority and delicacy. I admire her honesty and frankness. I cherish and comfort her wet wings. Can you believe it? Such an ugly duckling will really become a proud white swan in the dense jungle. This narrative only writes one thing, and I don't feel thin after reading it, because it is typical and can fully express the theme of the article. It can be seen that young writers will choose materials. By setting suspense and describing characters, the author successfully created the image of a contemporary outstanding soldier. This kind of writing is worth learning. Rigorous structure. Seeing the truth in simplicity is a remarkable feature of this language. Good title. The "empty box" gives people a sense of mystery and has a strong suspense effect. At the same time, as can be seen from the title, this article is also very novel. The idea is also very clever. Using flashback technique, I pulled the past memories out of the box in front of me, and there was remorse between the lines, which also reflected my mother's good intentions in educating me. The details are appropriate. At the beginning of this article, directly get to the point; The middle part grasps the characteristics of Yali pear, describes its flowers and fruits respectively, and briefly describes them in detail; The ending is concise and closely related to the theme. Vivid language and delicate description. The author described the shape, color and taste of Yali pear in detail, among which the words "pudgy", "Huang Chengcheng" and "My Sweetie" were used properly. There are many elves in nature. As long as you observe them carefully, they will give you rich associations and beneficial enlightenment. Some people observe bees and praise their selfless dedication; Some people observe ants and admire their industrious character. You observe the little crab and like its stubbornness. Look, these elves really give us a lot of inspiration. As you said, it's cute for crabs to walk sideways, and it's annoying for people to walk sideways. You found this, and adults have to admire it. Words are human faces. The progress in writing this composition is obvious, and your face is much brighter. However, the typos you have always hated always follow you and cast a shadow over your composition. I'll give you a good prescription: look up the words you can't write in the dictionary, and ask the teacher or classmates after writing the composition. would you like to have a try？ Zhang Ming used to be at the starting line with you, but now, people have won three consecutive excellent compositions, and you still have 12 typos and 15 sick sentences, which is tragic enough! You, you. It's not that you have no ability, but that you have no ambition! "I apologize to you for those adults. I wonder if this sincere apology can comfort your twisted mind. I can imagine your anxiety when waiting for the bus; The pain of being left behind by a car; The embarrassment of being crowded in the car. I can understand your resentment. But I also want to tell you frankly that the teacher is so crowded, and the teacher wants to tell you that just as you will grow up to be a handsome young man in the future, our society will be beautiful, because there are shadows in the sun, but more sunshine. Home should be warm and happy, but what is your situation now? Not good? . The teacher is sympathetic to this, but you should face up to the reality: on the one hand, bad environment can temper your will, and I believe you will succeed; On the other hand, we must find ways to change the environment. You can boldly do uncle's ideological work and persuade them to play less or not. Although this is not good, it is not good. Everything depends on one attempt? Let's work together! Li Jian, you dare to reveal your true thoughts in your composition. The teacher admires you for this, but the views in your composition are wrong and one-sided. Although XXX has such shortcomings, it is by no means all he has. We should learn to fully and correctly understand the things around us (including people). In fact, XXX also has many bright spots. For example, he runs very fast and works hard. We should see this and try our best to help him. ? The beginning of life is naturally good? As long as we sincerely help him, he will definitely change and become a good student, don't you think? " XXX, do you know? The teacher is really happy for your progress! I hope you will make persistent efforts and recommend a famous saying by ostrovsky. People should control their habits, but never let them control themselves. Whether a person can get rid of bad habits is worthless. . "I understand that my language is fluent and my literary talent is flying. This sophisticated language skill is unmatched by many candidates." If there were no whimsy, childhood would not be colorful. It is not only a pleasure, but also a good thing to experience the prestige of commanding others from another angle and the taste of hard work in another way. In the text? Commander? And then what? Soldiers? Are both words and actions? Soldiers? Yes, again? Naive? Yes, the serious expression of the two children who are really commanders and soldiers makes people laugh and admire the liveliness described by the author. "Cooking alone for the first time is inevitable. According to the order of cooking, the author wrote the whole process of rice washing, cooking and cooking. Due to lack of experience, we must be extra careful; The more careful, the more panic. Fortunately, the little author is very smart, and he can use his quick wits at the critical moment to turn the corner. Did the author catch it? First time? The characteristics of cooking, few words; But it was written in wavelet. Although the author is in a hurry when cooking, the article can be written very orderly. " You really watched the autumn outing carefully! Beauty in your eyes is like a painting! If only you could write down your happy mood at that time! The meal you cooked for your parents is really delicious. Does the teacher still have a chance to have a good meal? Your article awakens the sleeping earth like spring thunder, adding new green to a new day ... ""The teacher once told you that as long as you do one thing with your heart, you will succeed. Isn't it? Now you can write a good hand and dare to speak in class because you are quiet and timid. You are happy for your progressive teacher. In the future, carry forward the advantages of being polite and loving labor, study hard and write carefully, then you will achieve better results, and I believe you will do it! " "When you give your" masterpiece "-a beautiful painting to the teacher for appreciation, the teacher is really proud of you. Your mother must be as excited as the teacher! It took you a lot of effort to create this painting, didn't it? I tell you, studying is like painting. As long as we are willing to work hard, we will gain more. " "You compare the' long rope' in tug-of-war to the' indecisive child', which is so apt! Although the competition failed, your composition was a success! It would be better if the end of the composition turned my disappointment into several short revelations! You are such a sentimental child! How good you are at understanding the feelings in life. Although you are a little timid about writing, you have grasped the true meaning of writing-I am writing about my feelings. As long as you write your true feelings, the teacher must like you very much. You are a clever and sensitive child. You once had a happy family and you loved your family. But don't you love when something unpleasant happens in your family? Call your family harmony and happiness with your intelligence and your love! How beautiful autumn you write! From your composition, the teacher saw the high blue sky, golden rice fields, flying geese in the south and falling yellow leaves, all of which made me feel the beauty and magic of autumn. How I want to say to autumn: autumn! Turning decay into magical autumn, how beautiful your students' compositions are! When the teacher opens your composition book, he can always hear a burst of crying. It turned out to be punctuation, because you paid too little attention to it. Think about it, the teacher despises your composition just as you despise punctuation. Don't you cry? Your composition can describe the autumn fields in detail, which shows that you are an observant child. But what a beautiful season autumn is. Autumn is a harvest season, and autumn is a colorful season. The teacher really hopes to feel that beautiful and poetic autumn in your article! Through psychological description and action description, the author truly and meticulously showed his nervous and scared psychology at that time. Nice cut. The pen and ink are concentrated and meticulous. The language is concise and general. The theme is positive, the beginning is concise, the end is powerful, and the suspense is well used, making the plot twists and turns attractive. Typical materials. Wu Regret, a theorist of modern opera in China, once said: "Everyone has his own scene, which evaporates from himself. Sorrow and joy have a master, and crying has a root. Zhang San is the crown, and Li can't wear it. " Therefore, when writing a composition, you must pay attention to what characters you write and what characters you must turn yourself into. We must appreciate, ponder and enter the role from the identity, gender, age and personality of that role, and we must never use our student accent to set others' words. Horace, an ancient Roman poet, said, "You have to laugh before others can laugh. Similarly, you have to cry yourself to cause a crying reaction in other people's faces. " When writing a composition, please think carefully and let the characters enter the role. The title of this composition is well-conceived, the content is true and concrete, and the description of the characters in particular is successful. No matter the description of feelings, psychology or actions, it conforms to the age characteristics of the characters and the specific situation at that time. In addition, the previous descriptions of the environment are not idle, but pave the way for the development of the plot. Pointing out the theme at the end is a warning to young readers. This article is about true feelings. Very full, very specific, in addition, the use of narrative and lyrical writing, can arouse the reader's * * * sound, has a tear-jerking effect. Good grasp of details. Select a life segment. Spoken language, full of deep affection for mother with straightforward and simple narration, is touching to read. The materials selected in this paper are true, typical and representative. Several words that imitate sounds are used very accurately. Sentence A, a fluent and vivid sentence, is like Lushan Waterfall, flowing down very smoothly ... The metaphor is very appropriate, which shows that you have been carefully observing ... How did you come up with such a clever anthropomorphic sentence ... How appropriate this rhetorical question is used here ... This exclamatory sentence expresses your true feelings at that time ... The quotation of ancient poetry is just right. In the future, I will also use the poems I have learned in my composition ... Pragmatics after recess (this _ text _ source _ in _ my _ learning _ net) www.gzu521.com "target =" _ blank "> http://www.gzu521. Com laughs so hard that my stomach hurts ... b, the composition is uneven and difficult to read, just like walking on a bumpy road in the country, and it is easy to fall down if you are not careful ... This sentence seems to be cut off and incomplete ... After reading it carefully, you will find something meaningless ... Good articles have been changed ... You can't always expect others to help you correct it. Learn to correct every sentence by yourself ... The levels of A and sections are very clear ... These parts are properly divided ... Each section has a meaning, clear paragraphs ... B, the hierarchy is chaotic, and a chapter contains too much content, which makes me feel breathless when I read it ... There are too few sections to give more points ... in the middle. Merge ... this part can't be linked with the content of the previous part ... First, the key points are prominent ... The key parts are written in detail, which is good ... This story is described in detail ... The scenic spots are described in the order of sightseeing. It focuses on ... Part B, X is too wordy ... I can't see what the key point of this composition is ... If it's not the key point, it should be simply written ... Topic A, the topic is fresh, like bamboo shoots in spring, tender and crisp ... The topic is very interesting, and people can't help but want to see it ... Tell me, where did you come up with such a good topic .. This topic is punctuated (omitting is unusual ... People are not interested in reading your composition ... Everyone can think of such a topic, which is too general ... The content seems to be inconsistent with the title ... It is more appropriate to use your head and change the topic ... I think it is better to call it "better" ... Punctuation ... I can see that you are an honest person ... Punctuation is very accurate ... B, the content is wonderful and punctuation is sloppy, so people don't want to read your composition. It seems that the lame are walking ... I hope you can use every punctuation carefully ... When the meaning of a sentence is finished, you should draw a full stop ... Ellipsis occupies two squares, and you can't play in one square ... How to write a thick stack of students' compositions looks almost the same. How to write a review? Yes! Among dozens of students' compositions, there are only a handful of excellent compositions, most of which are bland and similar. In a word, I just can't bear it. After careful evaluation, it is difficult to find advantages. What should I do? First of all, we should make clear the purpose of the comment, which is well known. Comments are to point out the advantages and disadvantages, so that students' writing level can be improved. ..... We summarized four kinds of comments: the beginning, the process, the end and the general comment of the composition. You can comment and see if it works. Of course, the composition is different, and the comments vary widely. General comment: 1, the article is miscellaneous but not chaotic, but can be detailed and focused. This article fully and appropriately exaggerates the atmosphere of … and gives a detailed and vivid description of the key points of the article. 3, ... practical, contains simple and profound philosophy, exciting and emotional to read. This chapter is full of passion. Between the lines, we can feel the little author's love for …. The full text has distinct levels and fluent sentences. 5. The case narrative is vivid, concrete and interesting, which is in line with the previous metaphor. Finally, the author expressed his feelings for … in a few words, which is touching. 6. The article is well organized and forms a complete image. 7. The language of the article is fresh and lively, the description can grasp the main features of things, and the length is short and pithy, which is worth reading. 8. The content of this article is vivid and rich, the language is novel and refreshing, and the structure is unique and reasonable. 9. The article is meticulous, orderly, vivid and concrete, which is a masterpiece. 10, the close-up is unique and interesting. The full text is full of childlike innocence and interest, and it is very kind to read. 1 1. This article can be described in fresh and interesting language ... Between the lines, it is full of childlike interest and laughter, which is a masterpiece. 12, appropriate details, and the combination of reality and reality are the two major characteristics of this article ... the content is richer and more vivid. 13, the full text is fresh and elegant, kind and euphemistic, simple and unconventional, and it is worth learning. 14, the full-text language is vivid and accurate, and the plot is wonderful and tortuous, which seems to bring readers into a happy paradise and make people smile. 15, the full text is easy to understand and interesting. 16, the full text is clear, vivid and compact, and interesting. 17, paying attention to specific things and expanding the imagination space appropriately, which is the success of this paper. A, the notebook is handsome and neat, just like the street in a seaside town, without any dirt ... Straight handwriting makes people really comfortable to read ... Your handwriting is as beautiful as printed ... I'm ashamed that my handwriting is not as good as yours ... B, whatever. Of course, it doesn't look pleasing to the eye ... Is it because the wind is too strong today ... I don't believe that your handwriting is not good, and you will continue to scribble like this ... You will write better than me carefully and patiently ... The content of A is similar to that written by writers ... Your exercise is flesh and blood, and it is really a great enjoyment to read ... I read it very happily ... It's better to add more beautiful words ... It's better to use Vivienne Liu's words (or give names to other poor students). Don't you feel a little embarrassed ... Your composition is like a 90-year-old woman's mouth, dry and empty, and her speech is straight ... Like Lushan Waterfall, it goes downstream ... The metaphor is very appropriate. It shows that you have observed carefully ... how did you come up with such a clever anthropomorphic sentence ... How appropriate this rhetorical question is to be used here ... This exclamatory sentence expresses your true feelings at that time ... The quotation of ancient poems is just right, and I will use the poems I have learned in my composition in the future ... The use of two-part allegorical sayings is wonderful and makes me sick. Reading is very uncomfortable, just like walking on a bumpy road in the country, and it is easy to fall down if you are not careful ... This sentence seems to be cut off and incomplete ... Read it carefully after writing, and you will find the impassability ... Don't be afraid of trouble, good articles have been changed ... You can't always expect others to help you correct it, but learn to correct every sentence yourself ... The layers of A and sections are clearly divided ... These paragraphs are very clear ... B, the hierarchy is chaotic, and there is too much content in one section, which makes me feel breathless when I read them ... There are too few sections to give more points ... The middle section can be divided into several parts ... The first section and the second section should not be separated, so they should be merged ... This part cannot be linked with the contents of the above parts ... First, the key parts are prominent ... The key parts are written in detail. But ... the events are described in detail ... the scenic spots are described in browsing order, and the key points are ... B. Section 10 is too long ... I can't see what the key point of this composition is ... It's not important to write simply ... Topic A is fresh, like bamboo shoots in spring, tender and crisp ... The topic is very interesting and people can't help but want to read it. Where did you come up with such a good topic ... The goal of the topic is punctuation (ellipsis, question mark, exclamation point, dash), which is different from others ... I like your interesting topic very much ... B, the topic is old-fashioned, and people are not interested in reading your composition ... Everyone will think of such a topic, which is too general ... The content seems to be inconsistent with the topic ... Use your head. It is more appropriate to change the topic ... I think it is better to call it "better" ... Punctuation A is clever, and I can see that you are a conscientious person ... Punctuation is very accurate ... B, the content is wonderful, punctuation is sloppy, and everyone doesn't want to read your composition ... I lost a lot of punctuation, so you want me to read it all at once. Just like a lame man walking ... I hope you can use every punctuation mark carefully ... When the meaning of a sentence is finished, you should draw a full stop ... Ellipsis occupies two squares, and one square can't be typed ... This article is more encouraging than the last one, so keep on cheering ... The content is more concrete and vivid, and you are likely to become a member of the composition team ... Read more carefully, observe more and think harder. Your exercises will be published in newspapers and periodicals soon ... Ding Yishan and Lou Wei are not prodigies. They can do it, and I believe you can do it, and they will perform better than them ... all of them are taught by Teacher Qin. Are you still afraid that your writing level will not go up? .. insist on reading extracurricular books. That's how I come up with a lot of good words ... nothing is difficult in the world, but there are more words in your exercise than before. Practice a pair of "thief eyes" and let your keen observation make you write flowers ... Congratulations on the last time you read your composition aloud in class. Try to write better next time, ok? ..... Don't always worry that you are more stupid than others, as long as you follow Mr. Qin's request, your dream will come true sooner or later ... You can't always write anything, because you pay too little sweat ... Lending the diary and composition of the composition group to read more will be of great help to you ... Inspiration never likes to visit lazy people ... Diligence and diligence will make your name appear in the newspaper and make you feel bitter.