Compare the difference between a piece of text before and after modification, and issues that should be paid attention to when using and selecting examples. ?

Read the article and think about the questions?

Attachment: The original draft and revised draft (part) titled "Name and Reality"?

Original draft:?

Of course, a person’s “realness” does not necessarily mean that he will become “famous” during his lifetime, but as long as he has “realness”, he will definitely be remembered and affirmed by history. This is It is also another kind of "name" - a name that lasts through the ages. For example, Li Bai and Du Fu are both "immortals of poetry" and "sages of poetry" recognized by history. It goes without saying that their talents are great, but their official careers were not smooth sailing and were always bumpy. At that time, they were not popular among people. Especially when bureaucrats approve. But after the precipitation of history, they were finally recognized by people. Although this kind of name is not very direct, it can also show that "name" is based on "reality". ?

Revised draft: ?

Of course, there are situations where a person with real talent and learning and independent achievements may not be able to receive people's praise and win the due recognition during his lifetime. reputation. But as long as he truly achieves something, he will definitely be recognized by people after his death and gain the "name" he deserves. The painter Van Gogh's paintings and painting style had been abandoned by appreciators during his lifetime. However, with the development of the times and the advancement of history, his "advanced" works were finally understood and appreciated by future generations. It can be seen that a "real" person, even if he is lonely during his lifetime, will achieve great fame after his death. ?

Thinking questions:?

(1) What is the point of view? What are the differences in the expression of the central argument?

Clearly: the core of this passage: a person with "realness", even if he is lonely during his lifetime, will achieve great fame after his death. ?

Errors in the presentation of the central argument in the original manuscript: The "name" and "act" in the central argument of the original manuscript are too abstract and do not indicate what their specific content is. The revised draft specifically points out their respective connotations. ?

(2) Questions for students to think about: Why did the author change the example to Van Gogh in the revised manuscript?

Clearly: We can see that the original manuscript uses Li Bai and Du Fu as examples. It makes sense to compare their posthumous names with their experiences during their lifetimes, but it is inappropriate to associate "name" with "official career". Inappropriate; besides, Li Bai was famous all over the world during his lifetime, which is inconsistent with the center. Therefore, when using arguments, pay attention to the correctness of the arguments. In addition, Li Bai and Du Fu are both familiar to us, while Van Gogh's case has a certain freshness and contemporary feel, giving people a refreshing feeling.