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An 800-word composition about autumn, combining virtual and factual descriptions from the side

1. The beginning of the article is simple and appropriate. It uses the description of the environment to set off the mood of the characters, which is very artistic.

2. The beginning is concise and to the point

3. The beginning of the article is novel and has the effect of preempting others. So that readers can have an impression of the characters as soon as they meet them.

4. The beginning of the article is engaging and attracts readers. …The combination of points and aspects makes the article vivid, concrete, and detailed.

5. The language of the article is vivid and rich, and it is highly readable.

6. The beginning is extraordinary and attracts readers

7. The beginning is touching and has real feelings.

8. The explanation at the beginning of the article is very clear, which plays the role of leading the whole article.

9. The article’s selection of materials is novel and arouses readers’ desire to read on.

Composition process:

1. With full passion, it describes...

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2. The key points are highlighted, the details are appropriate, and the content is specific.

3. The metaphor is appropriate and the words are vivid.

4. The language of the article is easy to understand, close to the reality of life, and makes people feel warm when reading it.

5. ... told us in a relaxed and pleasant tone, which is endlessly memorable.

6. The narrative is natural and vivid, the structure is compact, the connection is natural and coherent, and the center is prominent.

7. When describing the scenery, the language is concise and accurate, and the association is to touch the scenery and evoke emotions, and the scenes are naturally integrated.

8. By enriching the character’s language and actions, you can bring out the character’s ideological quality.

9. The article is both narrative and lyrical.

10. Make full use of the writing method of combining movement and static, supplemented by metaphors, personification and other techniques

11. The young author observes carefully and narrates in an orderly manner

12. The use of some exquisite words virtually adds a lot of interest to the article.

13. The article is elegant, smooth and coherent, especially the characters’ language is humorous

14. The imagination of the article is reasonable and reasonable.

15. Through vivid and vivid language The description makes the readers feel as if they are in a dream.

16. The article has clear clues, prominent themes, and closely revolves around...

17. The detailed description is quite original. Very knowledgeable.

18. Carefully and delicately describe the characters’ language, expression, movements, etc. This is a major feature of this article.

19. The description is delicate, the flavor of life is strong, and the words and sentences are accurate and expressive.

20. The language is accurate, clear and vivid, and the content is extremely rich and specific.

21. The examples are described vividly and concretely, and the words and deeds of the characters are consistent with their respective identities.

22. The article comes from life, so although the language is not very beautiful, it is real and interesting, and the writing is emotional and reasonable

23. The article writes... in detail

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25. Use a lot of spoken language in daily life to make the article more natural and friendly.

The ending of the composition:

1. The ending just points out the center, the language is simple but profound and thought-provoking.

2. Switch on and off with feelings and end with feelings. This will make the article coherent and coherent, and at the same time make the article's theme loop around and have a strong appeal.

3. The praise for the characters at the end is sincere and touching.

4. The implicit ending of the article not only highlights the topic, but also is thought-provoking.

5. Concentrate your emotions at the end, which not only reflects the beginning but also summarizes the entire text. Coherent from beginning to end, in one go.

6. The vivid depiction of details can effectively reveal the inner world of the characters. This is the success of this article.

7. The article ends with..., it is concise and concise, but its meaning is endless.

8. The sentence that reveals the central point at the end of the article is truly a pen of clarity. The summary is short and powerful.

9. The ending is full of expectations and enthusiasm. The words have been finished, but the meaning is still unfinished.

10. The poetic language at the beginning and end of the article is full of imagination and rhythmic beauty, which makes people want to read, love to read, and can't bear to put it down.

11. Although it is a small matter, the author describes it vividly and vividly, and the indispensable point-of-view at the end better highlights the theme of the article.

12. Although the story is ordinary, the emotions are sincere, abundant and touching.

13. The ending of the article is unconventional and gives people a feeling of reluctance.

14. The ending ends with..., which is implicit, meaningful and meaningful.

Overall comments:

1. The article is complex but not messy, and can be detailed and focused.

2. The article fully and appropriately renders the atmosphere of... and depicts the key points of the article delicately and vividly.

3. ... is realistic and contains simple and profound philosophy. It is inspiring and exciting to read.

4. This article is full of passion, and you can feel the author's love for... from between the lines. The full text is clear in level and the sentences are fluent.

5. The case description is vivid, specific, interesting, and consistent with the previous metaphor... Finally, the author uses a few words to express his emotions towards..., which is touching.

6. The article is coherent and forms a complete image.

7. The language of the article is fresh and lively, the description can capture the main characteristics of things, the length is short and concise, and it is worth reading.

8. The content of this article is vivid and rich, the language is novel and refreshing, and the structure is unique and reasonable.

9. The article is detailed, well-organized, and the content is vivid and concrete. It can be regarded as an excellent article.

10. The close-ups are unique and interesting. The full text is full of childlike innocence and fun, and makes you feel cordial when reading it.

11. The article can use fresh and interesting language to describe... The words between the lines are full of the true childishness of childhood, and the laughter is endless. It can be regarded as a masterpiece.

12. Appropriate detail and the coexistence of reality and fiction are the two major features of this article. The content is richer and more vivid.

13. The full text is fresh and elegant, friendly and tactful, simple but not vulgar. It is worth reading.

14. The language of the full text is vivid and accurate, and the plot is exciting and twists and turns, which seems to bring readers into a happy paradise and make people smile.

15. The full text is easy to understand and interesting.

16. The full text is clear, vivid, compact and interesting.

17. Pay attention to observing specific things and develop appropriate imagination. This is the success of this article.

18. The article blends emotions into the scene, expresses emotions while depicting the scene, and is good at using metaphors to make the article vivid and concrete

19. The article has novel content, reasonable structure, smooth and coherent , naturally accessible.

20. This article is based on real life, the material is appropriate, very innovative, the paragraphs are clear, the transition is natural, full of interest, and highly readable.

21. The language of the whole text is fluent, the writing is relaxed and natural, and it can be regarded as a relatively successful work.

22. Although the language in this article is not gorgeous, it is extremely accurate and vivid, rich in emotion and true, and it is enjoyable to read.

23. The structure of the article is concise and reasonable, and the author has a very deep and thorough understanding of the original text. The language of the full text is sonorous and powerful, and it makes people excited and excited when reading it.

24. This composition uses novel materials, wonderful ideas, and vivid language. The fresh breath of life and children's interest are revealed between the lines.

25. The article describes the events of... in the order of their development. The language is relatively fluent, the levels are clear, and it seems enjoyable from beginning to end.

26. The full text has a lively rhythm, fresh language, and is always full of humor and fun. It is endless fun to read.

27. The full text is narrated in a concentrated manner, with no branches or branches, simple and smooth language, and sincere and touching feelings.

28. The tone of the whole article is relaxed and humorous, making it full of wit and fun. It is hard to put down after reading it.

29. The author has a clever conception and is good at selecting points to expand on. His writing is full of ups and downs and is thought-provoking.

Handwriting

A. The book is beautiful and neat, just like the streets of a small seaside town. There is no trace of dirt... The regular handwriting makes people feel really comfortable reading... Your handwriting is as beautiful as the printed one...I'm ashamed that my handwriting is not as beautiful as your handwriting...

B. It's casual, the handwriting looks like it was drawn by a cat...the words are not in the grid Of course, it doesn’t look pleasing to the eye in the middle... Your handwriting is swaying here and there. Is it because the wind is too strong today? I don’t believe that your handwriting is not good and it will always be so sloppy... Write carefully and patiently, you You can write better than me...

Content

A. Such rich content is almost the same as what the author wrote...

Your compositions are full of flesh and blood, and it’s really a pleasure to read them...

Your compositions are specific in content, and I enjoyed reading them very much...

You must like to read them as essays before you write them. There are so many words...

B. Dry content is like boiled water, with no taste at all. Add more beautiful words and sentences and it will taste better...

Your composition is like 90 The mouth of the old lady is dry and hollow, and her speech is leaking...

Sentences

A. The smooth and vivid sentences are like the Lushan waterfall, flowing down, extremely smooth...< /p>

The metaphor is very appropriate, which shows that you have always been observant and careful...

How did you come up with such a clever personification...

Rhetorical questions are so useful here. Appropriate...

This exclamation expresses your true feelings at that time...

The quotation of ancient poems is just right. I will also use the poems I have learned in my compositions in the future...< /p>

The use of postscript is so wonderful that it makes my stomach hurt from laughing...

B. The composition is lumpy and uncomfortable to read, like walking on a bumpy road in the countryside. It's easy to fall if you're not careful...

The sentence seems to have been cut off by someone, making it incomplete...

After you have written it, read it carefully and you will find the inconsistencies...

Don’t be afraid of trouble, good articles can only be corrected...

You can’t always rely on others to do it for you, you must learn to modify every sentence yourself...

Levels

A. The subsections are clearly divided...

The subsections are divided appropriately...

A subsection tells one layer of meaning, and the paragraphs are clear...< /p>

B. The levels are confusing. One section contains so much content that I feel out of breath...

There are too few subsections. Are you reluctant to divide more...

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The middle section can be divided into several subsections...

The first and second subsections should not be divided, but should be merged...

The content of this section and the previous subsections Unable to contact...

Details

A. Highlight the key points...

The key parts are written in detail, good...

What happened is described clearly...

The various scenic spots are described in the order of the tour, focusing on...

B. Section X is too written Wordy...

I can’t see what the point of this essay is...

The content that is not the focus should be written briefly...

Title

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A. The title is fresh, like bamboo shoots in spring, tender and crisp...

The title is very interesting and makes people want to read on...

Tell Me, where did you come up with such a wonderful title...

The title is punctuated (ellipses, question marks, exclamation points, dashes), which is different...

I like you very much This is an interesting topic...

B. If the topic is the same, people won’t be interested in reading your essay...

Everyone will have this kind of topic, it’s too common...< /p>

The content seems to be inconsistent with the title...

Use your brain to find a more suitable title...

I think the title might as well be called "... ...》More appropriate...

Punctuation

A. The punctuation is regular. It shows that you are a serious person... The punctuation is very accurate...< /p>

B. No matter how exciting the content is, if the punctuation is careless and careless, no one will want to read your composition...

You have lost a lot of punctuation, and you want me to read it without stopping. Hold on to me...

The punctuation is not delicious...

There are too many punctuation points, and the reading jumps and jumps, like a lame walking...

I hope you will mark every punctuation carefully...

When the meaning of a sentence is finished, there should be a period...

The ellipsis occupies two spaces and cannot be placed in one...

30. There are many remarkable sentences in the whole text. It adds some literary flavor to the article

Words of encouragement

This article is more written than the previous one, keep up the good work...

Make the content more specific and vivid , you are very hopeful to become a member of the composition group...

Read more, observe carefully and think hard, your essay will be published in newspapers and periodicals soon...

×××,× ×× is not a child prodigy. If they can do it, I believe you can do it too, and you will perform better than them...

They are all taught by teachers, are you still afraid that your writing level will not improve...

Insist on reading more extracurricular books, and this is how I mastered a lot of good words...

Nothing is difficult in the world, only those who are willing...

Now you practice The number of words is much more than before. This is the result of your careful diary writing...

Don't you want to become a composition star? Develop a pair of "thieves' eyes", and let your keen observation bring flowers to your writing...

The last time your composition was read aloud in class, I would like to express my congratulations to you. Try to write better next time, okay? ...

Don't always worry that you are stupider than others, as long as you do what the teacher asks, your dreams will come true sooner or later...

The reason why you can't write anything is because of your efforts There is still too little sweat...

Borrow the diaries and essays of your classmates in the composition group and read them more, I guarantee they will be of great help to you...

Inspiration never likes to visit lazy people. ...

Be diligent and diligent, and when your name appears in the newspaper, you will feel that it is worth the hardship...

Wonderful comments (1)< /p>

1. Was the rice ball stuck in your throat when you were eating? Otherwise, why would there be so many illogical sentences?

2. When I read your words, I felt as if I had just come back from a spring outing, still in a happy mood.

3. The first paragraph of the exercise is too long, like a person with a big head, which makes it uncomfortable to look at.

4. Your handwriting is crooked, as if you were drunk and dancing.

5. The sentence is difficult to read, like a river blocked by stones.

6. In your essay, I want to find a good word and sentence, which is even harder than finding a needle in a haystack.

7. The content is not interesting at all. Reading it feels like being hypnotized. I really want to sleep as I read it.

8. After reading your composition, my irritable mood suddenly became much more cheerful.

9. There are many unreadable sentences in this composition, as if the clear lake is filled with garbage.

10. The words are written in big words and small words in small words, just like a group of big ants taking the little ants out to look for food.

11. After the character dialogue is over, you always close the door without putting double quotation marks. Do you usually wear clothes without buttons?

12. There are too many shortcomings in the exercises. Just like drawing the height of a rectangle, you can draw countless lines.

13. I hope your writing skills can rise from the ground like bamboo shoots in spring.

14. The disadvantage is that the words are not beautiful, like the marks left by a chicken pecking here and there when looking for food.

15. The second paragraph of the article is too long, longer than a golden-scaled python.

16. There are no beautiful words or sentences in the whole text. It is like a person with a bald head and no hair.

17. There are so many typos in the exercises that a truck can’t fit in them. It’s really scary.

18. The characters speak without expression, as if they are always talking to others with a straight face.

19. The title of this article is general, like a piece of dry rice paper, lacking the feeling of moisture.

20. The sentences in the full text are fluent, just like a silk scarf, which feels very smooth.

21. There is a lot of nonsense in the composition, as if a fat man has a lot of fat on his body.

22. The title is attractive, like a magnet, attracting the reader's attention.

23. There are many typos in the article, like spots on a toad, which is disgusting.

24. There is no description of the facial expressions of the characters during dialogue. Are they made of plasticine?

25. The words lost in the exercises can add up to a mountain. Please be more careful in the future, okay?

Wonderful comments (2)

1. Many words are used inappropriately, just like a person’s hands growing to his neck, which makes people uncomfortable.

2. The sentence reads very smoothly and naturally, as if drinking a bottle of ice-cold soda on a hot summer day is very enjoyable.

3. It is a layer of dry skin, peeled off, with no blood or flesh inside. How can others not feel uncomfortable when they see it?

4. That metaphor is very subtle, and it is more brilliant than the idea that a clever fox comes up with.

5. The phenomenon of missing punctuation marks is serious. Total number of lost punctuation marks is ×. Do you like to eat punctuation marks as a meal?

6. You use a lot of dialects in your composition, and you seem to be an expert in this field.

7. The title has an ellipsis, which is vivid and fresh, like a green leaf.

8. Your article is like a withered flower, with no fragrance at all. Think about it, how can we make the flowers smell fragrant again?

9. The content is specific, but unfortunately there are too few natural paragraphs. Are you afraid of spending money and are reluctant to divide it into more paragraphs?

10. There is a sentence in the composition that I don’t understand. It’s like you told me to breathe with my ears. I feel baffled.

11. Some of the content seems to be made up by you and is not very true, so when I read that, I couldn’t help but raise a question mark in my heart.

12. Your exercises are no longer like boiled water. Now they have a sweet taste. Keep working hard. I will shout "Come on" for you!

13. The sentences are not very fluent, like my cousin’s face is covered with pimples, which makes me feel uncomfortable when I read it.

14. The focus is not too prominent, just like a water fight, with water splashing everywhere but no target to attack.

15. Your handwriting is flying and phoenix dancing. Maybe you want to be a cursive calligrapher?

16. There are too many typos, just like the sesame seeds on the sesame cakes. Can you try to take the sesame seeds off the sesame cakes?

17. The words are very crowded, are you afraid that they will cause problems due to heat?

18. The phenomenon of losing words is serious. I wonder if you often break your umbrella on rainy days?

19. The content is as dry as autumn leaves. How can people be willing to read it? Read more extracurricular books to ensure that the dead leaves will become green again next spring.

20. There are so many typos like a hornet's nest... I am already a fourth grade student, how can I still use pinyin to replace words I can't write? Is your dictionary sleeping?

21. The content of this article is vivid. After reading it, I feel like I have just eaten a piece of fresh milk cake. It is evocative.

22. There are very few movements written, like branches in autumn, without a single leaf.

23. Your sentences are like goldfish in a tank, not alive at all.

24. The punctuation is regular, like smooth floor tiles.

25. The writing is as scrawled as the grass on the ground, and it is swaying and unable to straighten up.

Content:

1. The content is close to modern life, novel and unique, grasps the pulse of the times, and has the flavor of the times.

2. The context is clear, the sense of hierarchy is strong, the narrative is orderly, and the details are not chaotic.

3. The details are appropriate, the priorities are clear, and the ideas are clear. Carefully selected, the materials seem to be tailor-made for the theme.

4. The narrative is detailed and specific, the details are vivid and realistic, the characters have distinctive personalities, and the images are full and vivid on the page.

5. Use the environment to highlight the mood of the characters, blend the scenes, make the mood appear in the scene, and the scene appear with the scene.

6. The book is rich in imagination, unique in conception and does not deviate from the reality of life. It is rooted in the associations of life, broadens readers' thinking, and makes people feel lively and interesting.

7. The description of the scenery is vivid and lifelike, the words and sentences are appropriate and appropriate, the sceneries follow the emotions, and the scenes blend together. What is presented to the reader is like a vivid sketch that conveys emotion.

8. The imagination is wonderful, which not only originates from life, but does not lose the reality of life, and is higher than life, broadens readers' horizons, and is full of artistic charm.

9. The description of the event process is detailed and specific. Although the content is large, it appears methodical and orderly, reflecting the author's clear thinking and ability to plan the article.

10. The description of the appearance is vivid, the character's face is realistic, and the clothing is appropriate and suitable. It is like a mirror reflecting the character's personality. It is really the so-called "life depends on the relationship".

11. The description of the environment is objective and true. The environment serves the character's personality and better explains the ins and outs of the character's personality formation process.

12. The description of the expression is vivid and expressive, and in just a few words, the character's personality characteristics are clearly outlined, and the character's speech and behavior have a distinct and unique personality.

Content:

1. The content before and after is not closely related, some content is too isolated, and the connection with the main body of the article is not close enough.

2. The narrative is simple and rough, with only a frame structure, and the characters lack distinctive personality traits.

3. The detailed arrangement is inappropriate and the priorities are not clear enough.

4. The content is mostly line-based outlines and lacks point-based detailed descriptions.

5. It is inconsistent with the flavor of the times and the content is too outdated.

Theme:

1. Highlight the focus, clear the center, and have a clear intention.

2. The views are clear and the likes and dislikes are clear, making it clear at a glance.

3. The theme is directly highlighted in the content, clear and concise, without any redundancy.

4. The theme is serious, the thoughts are noble, and the spirit of enterprise is strong.

Theme:

1. The center is not clear enough and the intention is not clear enough.

2. The theme is vague, the meaning of the text is vague, and the purpose of writing is unclear.

3. Although there is a central theme, the expression is not sufficient and powerful, the words are not true, and it is empty and powerless.

4. The theme is not serious enough and there are still residues in the thought.

Plot:

1. The plot is twists and turns, and the narrative process has a certain sense of ups and downs, which reflects the curves and beauty of the plot and is fascinating.

2. The plot has strong twists and turns, and it can attract readers' attention due to ordinary and unexpected events.

3. The changes in the plot do not fall into the clichés. Occasionally, suspense arises suddenly, and the twists and turns are unexpected. The development process of the events reflects the author's innovative ideas.

Plot:

1. The plot develops relatively slowly and lacks a certain ups and downs.

2. The plot changes are bland and lack new ideas.

3. The plot is straightforward, without any suspense, and the narrative is straightforward and like a running account.

4. The process is detailed, but the ending is brief and incomplete. The structure is unreasonable and gives people a feeling of anticlimax.

5. The concept is unreasonable, the content is full of loopholes, and it cannot reflect the reality of life.

6. The plot has ups and downs, the transition is too fast, and it is not coherent and natural enough.

Rhetoric:

1. The metaphor is vivid, vivid, and appropriate. The ontology and metaphor are similar in form and spirit. The interest and persuasiveness of the article are greatly enhanced.

2. Appropriately use contrast, comparison and other techniques to effectively support the center of the article through the disparities and differences between things.

3. Use the technique of parallelism without losing any opportunity to explain the characteristics of things from many aspects, which not only enhances the momentum of the language, but also leaves a very deep impression on the readers.

4. Skillfully use personification techniques to make the objects in the article possess human behavioral characteristics, human thoughts and emotions, so that they can reflect the spiritual journey of the protagonist in the article from the side.

Material selection:

1. Be able to choose themes with typical significance in life, and the events are highly representative.

2. The selection of materials is novel and unique, not mediocre, and sweeps away the pedantic atmosphere, which is refreshing.

3. Although it describes ordinary things, the analysis is thorough and reasonable, and the rationality is deep, highlighting the essence of the incident.

4. Although the incident is small, it reflects a deeper truth and has certain universality.

5. Select materials from multiple aspects and angles to fully reflect the character’s personality and create a rich image.

Selection of materials:

1. The selection of materials is too popular, not representative, old themes, old ideas, bland.

2. Although events in life with certain narrative value were selected, the underlying truth of the events was not deeply reflected due to incomplete analysis and insufficient excavation.

3. The selection of materials is bland, too old, vulgar, simple and childish, has no new ideas, and is difficult to profoundly reflect the contemporary nature and authenticity of life.

4. Failure to reflect big principles through small things, and the expression technique of "seeing big things from small things" is not skillful enough.

5. There is a lack of multi-angle portrayal of the characters, but a narrow theme is selected to one-sidedly display a certain aspect of the character's personality characteristics.

Emotion:

1. Strong emotions, like a volcano erupting, gurgling out, which can deeply move readers.

2. Sincere feelings, deep affection, like mellow wine, make people drunk without drinking.

3. The emotions are real and natural, without any pretense, and the true feelings can be realized with a calm heart.

4. The inner process is real and delicate, and the characters’ thoughts and attitudes are clearly visible to the readers.

5. The feelings are real and delicate, and the words are touching. They are indeed words from the author’s heart.

6. Seek gains and losses in life from self-reflection, reveal true feelings in repentance, and the words are sonorous and powerful, shocking.

Emotion:

1. The language is simple, the feelings are flat, and the affection is not deep enough.

2. The emotion is too strong, and it doesn’t seem to be a genuine emotion.

3. The emotion lacks depth, and it fails to express feelings through scenes and events. Although feelings are hidden in the text, they cannot be deeply explored.

4. The psychological depiction is not vivid and specific enough, and fails to effectively express the character's thoughts, attitudes, likes and dislikes.

Principle:

1. Repeatedly emphasize the author’s point of view from different angles and aspects, with thorough reasoning and clear intention.

2. Quote famous quotes and classic examples, which are more persuasive and can express the author's point of view more effectively.

3. The arguments are sufficient and powerful, the analysis is thorough and reasonable, and the philosophy is strong.

4. The examples are rich, the materials are properly selected, the descriptions are detailed and appropriate, and it is more convincing.

Things:

1. The logical reasoning ability is weak and the evidence is not conclusive and sufficient.

2. Failure to write true stories, tell the truth, express true feelings, create a true personality, and express a unique individual.

Sentences:

1. The sentences are fluent, the meaning of the sentence is smooth, the words are beautiful, the narrative is vivid, vivid and vivid, and the language expression ability is strong.

2. The language is concise, concise, expressive, concise and powerful, and the writing is full of power. Only a few words can convey the spirit of the character.

3. The language is smooth and clear, the descriptions are detailed, and the descriptions are vivid; the sentences are implicit and euphemistic, and contain deep meanings. After reading, it is like the lingering fragrance after drinking, which lingers in your mouth.

4. The language is lively, humorous and makes people laugh.

5. The behavioral description is exquisite and accurate, and the series of verbs vividly highlights the character's psychological state and highlights the character's personality traits.

Statements:

1. The language is basically fluent, with occasional snags.

2. The language is not clear enough, the meaning of the sentence is vague, the teeth are bent and it is difficult to understand.

3. The sentences are long-winded, do not convey the meaning, are only detailed but not omitted, and are redundant.

4. The language is too concise, it seems to be an outline narrative, but it fails to outline and grasp the main points, the text is incomplete, the narrative is boring, dry and lifeless.