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Let the world change its appearance because of you (56 points)

Don’t let the darkness that engulfs the world bury you ideal, because the only value of your existence is to let the world change its appearance because of you. Quoting famous quotes, subtitles, and highlighting opinions)? - Steve Jobs?

Man is born to be kind and firmly believes in the beauty and eternity of the world. However, when overwhelming undemocratic, immoral, and unfreedom flows like a torrent, if Individuals choose to change themselves and surrender, and the era no longer has the power to move towards the ideal state. Only by adhering to individual beliefs can the world be changed. Countless active individuals are like a beam of light surrounding another beam of light, and only then can we have a hopeful nation and a strong country. (Connected with social reality, based on comparing the values ??of changing oneself and changing the world, with a focused perspective and a clear point of view)

Picking up the moral barrenness

Once upon a time, you witnessed the desolate morality of the world. On the slippery slope, choose to change yourself and let go of your responsibility for a better world. You once condemned the indifference of people on the street, but such condemnation lacked inner strength; you grieved for everyone's self-interest, but such heartache lacked social recognition. So, you follow the mediocrity and head towards the opposite side of morality without looking back. Can you gain inner peace only after you have developed the ability to have eyes as dry as a well and a mind as numb as a tree? (Refutation of self-change that follows the trend and hits the mark on current social ills)?

That’s ridiculous! Look at the countless intellectuals in society who adhere to the spirit of independence and embrace the dream of changing the world. Bai Yansong refused to change himself and used the power of the media to call for care to become a value for everyone; Luqiu Luwei was unwilling to give in and ran around day after day to guide the public to accept the truth and practice the virtue of kindness. You cannot give up your enthusiasm and responsibility for love and justice because of your insignificance. You must firm up your new look and reshape a warm moral world! (Comparative presentation, positive examples, concise language, outstanding views, strong feelings)

Shine the light of democracy

The American public on the other side of the ocean is unwilling to have individual rights ignored by the powerful and is determined to rise up Fight to change the world and occupy Wall Street. They are unwilling to let society ignore the value of the weak. They have the courage to think, debate, and act, and have the courage to choose the good. In order to achieve a more equal American dream, they want to sow the fire that changes the world throughout the world.

Even if the road to promoting national democracy is like a burning bush, you cannot annihilate the call for democracy deep in your heart. Are you willing to live a useless life where you can only live a stable life by relying on a political party? Are you willing to endure the moral and awe-inspiring lies of anchors when you turn on the TV every day? Can you endure the sudden deprivation of your rights, and then accept that these rights are given by others? If not, go and change the world, and let democracy one day become the cultivation of everything you do, and let it be as important as the air you breathe every minute! (Discussing "If you can't change yourself, change the world" from the perspective of democracy and human rights, it embodies the universal value of a civilized society, the language is appropriate, and the appeal is strong)

We cannot let the darkness that engulfs the world change our lifelong determination. We must not acquiesce or condone the world's immorality, democracy, and human rights. Therefore, we can only change the world, straighten our backs, support the backbone of the country, and be a strong man who stands upright, so that the world will change its appearance because of the existence of every individual!

I believe that the people of my country and everyone under the same starry sky can become strong people who change the world.

Comments: This article has a high-minded intention, from the perspective of citizens' moral behavior and social fairness and justice, pointing out the absurdity of following the crowd, being numb and silent, and pointing out that every citizen should stick to the good thoughts in his heart and persist in his belief in democracy and freedom. , use their meager efforts to bravely undertake the mission of “changing the world”. The structure of the full text is clear and clear, combining breaks and establishments with distinct layers. The exposition language is closely related to the topic, full of strong emotions, and reflects the valuable "responsibility" spirit of young people. Some sentences are a bit extreme.

Test question analysis: review question analysis

1. This question is an essay topic that introduces the scope of writing from the material. The "material" refers to a world-famous rock musician John Lennon Quotes. The famous saying has two meanings: the first level is "If you can't change yourself, you change the world"; the second level is "If you can't change the world, you change yourself." In short, one is to change the world, and the other is to change yourself.

The material is concise, comprehensive and full of philosophy.

2. Thinking deeply, John Lennon’s words reveal a basic social reality - in the relationship between people and the world, they always have to experience a history of "conflict-harmony". From the perspective of ideological roots, this sentence embodies the dialectical philosophical view. "Changing the world and changing yourself" are in a contradictory movement of the unity of opposites.

3. Candidates are "required" to write that this famous quote triggers their own thinking. They can write about their own experiences related to this famous quote in their lives, or express their understanding of this famous quote, whether it is "experience" ” or “understanding” must be consistent with the style of your choice. When writing, you can choose to write "change the world", you can write "change yourself", or you can write both, but no matter how you write, you should reflect the inner conflict between the two. If you choose to write about one side, you should also use the other side as the background. , if one side is completely put aside and the other side is written in isolation, although it is not a deviation in conception, it is obviously not the best angle.

For example: The examination article "Change Yourself" has three sub-themes in the whole text, focusing on the specific methods of "changing yourself". To change your mentality, change your thoughts, and change your methods, the focus of the writing falls on In terms of mentality, thoughts and methods, if you ignore the opposite of "changing the world", you will naturally not be able to get high scores.

4. The material raises a question about the trade-off between "changing yourself" and "changing the world". It is both a restriction and a prompt. If the candidate only uses examples to confirm the prompt, it will be comprehensive and without his own analysis and Without understanding, it is impossible to achieve high scores.

For example: Candidates rigidly apply the hierarchical formula "What is to change oneself and change the world", "Why should one change oneself and change the world", "How to change oneself and change the world". Although such an article will not go off topic, but just by looking at the arguments, you can basically judge that the article has no thoughts and insights of its own.

Perspective of intention

“The perspective of an essay can distinguish the candidate’s thinking and comprehensive ability.” A clear perspective is a prerequisite for a high-scoring essay. Dispersed perspectives will result in no center. The argument may not be written thoroughly within the limited space of 800 words. Chen Miaoyun once said that for an 800-word essay, it is better to write only one angle. If you write two angles, it means that the candidate has reduced the level of the essay to a 400-word essay.

What elements should a good "angle" contain?

First, it must be realistic and targeted. "Articles are written according to the times." Any article should be based on the present moment and reflect an attitude of paying attention to life and reality. This question is directly related to the current "democracy and freedom", "innovative development", "social harmony" and "following the trend". It is best for articles to be based on reality and think about fashion and the future through history and tradition.

Second, there must be the manifestation of thinking. Writing ability is first of all thinking ability. The ideas expressed in many candidates' articles are superficial and outdated, lacking thinking. Sticking to the facts and discussing the matter, the result is that the article has no new ideas and ideas. This is firstly related to the choice of conceptual perspective, and secondly, students lack basic perspectives to understand the world and themselves, and often make partial generalizations, which blinds the vision.

Comments: Structural Language

First, multi-field + individual thinking. Candidates should choose the stylistic themes that they are good at, and after understanding the meaning of the question and determining the basic point of view, they should quickly search for personal life experiences and various materials that can prove their opinions in the material library, and choose a touching life experience to write a narrative, or a relatively novel one. Write argumentative essays based on viewpoints and relatively fresh materials.

At the same time, candidates can try different and reverse ideas to achieve breakthroughs in theme ideas, such as: changing oneself and changing the world, in addition to the relationship of rejection and opposition, can also be unified and transformed. It can be said that "change yourself, like and step down." What is your evaluation of this answer? Comments are closed // High quality or satisfactory or special type or recommended answer time window.iPerformance && window.iPerformance.mark('c_best', +new Date); Recommended lawyer service: if not To solve your problem, please describe your problem in detail and get free professional consultation through Baidu Lulin for other similar problems 2014-03-03 World-famous rock musician John Lennon said: If you can't change yourself, you change the world , If you can't change the world, you change yourself12012-06-04World-famous rock musician John Lennon said: "If you can't change yourself, you change the world; if you can't change the world, you change yourself142017 -12-16 Read the following text and compose according to the requirements. (60 points) The Washington Post once conducted an interesting experiment, asking the world’s greatest musician 12016-03-11 to read the following text and write a composition according to the requirements. (60 points) The nineteenth-century British writer Dickens once said in "A Tale of Two Cities": "This is a bright day. 2012-06-0420. Read the following text and compose as required. (60 points) 12017-11-27 Read Write the following text according to the requirements. (60 points) Indian poet Rabindranath Tagore said: "Life should be like a brilliant summer flower, everlasting and charming. 242016-12-01 Read the following text and write as required. (50 points) Some people said: If you keep looking up, you feel like you are below; others said: If 172021-09-11 read the text below, compose as required. (60 points) Rabindranath Tagore said: “Your burdens will turn into gifts, and your sufferings will light your way.

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