This is a true story that happened in a meat processing factory.

Before leaving work, a worker entered the cold storage for inspection, and the cold storage door suddenly closed. He was trapped inside and struggled for five hours on the brink of death.

Suddenly, the door opened and the factory security guard came in to save him.

Afterwards, someone asked the security guard, "How did you think of opening this door? This is not part of your daily work! "

The security guard said: "I have worked in this enterprise for 35 years, and hundreds of workers come in and out of my face every day." He is the only one who greets me every morning and says goodbye to me in the afternoon. "

"Today he came in and said' Hello' to me, but he never said' See you tomorrow'."

"I am waiting for his' hello' and' see you tomorrow' every day. I know he hasn't said goodbye to me yet. I thought he should still be somewhere in this building, so I started looking for him and found him. "

According to this material, candidates should write an article on their own topic, with no limit to the subject matter, not less than 800 words.

Reference composition

When you give roses to others, the fragrance will stay in your hands.

-Candidates from Chongqing

"Hello" and smile every morning, plus "See you tomorrow" in the afternoon, warm the heart of the security guard and save himself.

The world says: give someone a rose, and the hand has a lingering fragrance.

Uncle who supports students' dream of reading kebabs adds a pair of wings to others' dreams in smoke and fire, and also brings laughter and warmth. Wang Lun's deep affection for Li Bai, saying goodbye in a hurry on the shore of the peach blossom, won the true meaning of Li Bai. The crocodile's open mouth provides food for the bird and also relieves its pain and pain.

Sunshine is warm, and air can't stop the spread of this warmth; The running water is full of joy, and the cold sword cuts this joy; Roses are fragrant, and fences can't stop the invasion of this fragrance.

When he was young, Marquez was a poor writer, and he lived in a noisy hotel with his boss and his wife every day-the boss's wife didn't want to take this destitute person in, but the boss insisted that Marquez stay because he couldn't afford the bill. The amiable boss gave the poor writer a place to live. Although Marquez left quietly a few months later, he soon returned to the hotel with "One Hundred Years of Solitude", with endless thanks and a lot of rewards. "One Hundred Years of Solitude" is a masterpiece, rewarding you for enjoying your old age. Thank you for illuminating people's hearts. This rose is always fragrant.

There is only one place in the world suitable for roses. If you give more people, the fragrance will spread all over the world.

When the fiftieth Lei Feng learning month comes in the spring breeze, can you feel the lingering fragrance of roses? Or trivial things, or touching behavior. Uncle Lei Feng sends roses everywhere with his hands. He poured the fragrance of roses into the ink and recorded them one by one. Joy was everywhere.

The same is true of saints. Confucius and Lu Yu, who traveled around the world, were bosom friends, and their feelings were lyrical. Without thinking, they will give precious things to their intimate friends, firmly believing that they have gained a lot-happiness and recognition.

Plant a seed in the spring breeze, irrigate and fertilize it, set up a tent frame to cover the hot light in summer, pick a handful of roses in autumn and send them in winter. Will it be cold in winter? Flaming, dancing-like laughter dispelled the cold wind in winter and left a lingering aftertaste in the air.

Give someone a rose, and the hand has a lingering fragrance. Look at the sea, it provides a comfortable place for cheerful fish and shrimp, and it is wider. Look at the deep forest, spreading its chest for the towering trees, and the water and soil are inseparable. Look at the blue sky, let the white clouds float freely and add color to yourself.

Being alone is better than being happy with others. A person has only one fragrance in the rose garden. When you leave this land, pick roses and send them with a smile, the fragrance between your fingers will be rich, and one day you will be surrounded by fragrance.

Rose, let your fragrance flow!

The examination room scores 20 points, expression 20 points, development 20 points, and the total score is 60 points.

The key point of grading is 1, which is accurate. The idea of examining the topic of this composition captures the key points of the material. The relationship between workers and security guards is the relationship between gift and return. Although it is an old topic, it is more appropriate to use it in this material.

2. Rich materials. The author is brilliant, from the real uncle of mutton kebabs subsidizing students, to the friendship between Wang Lun and Li Bai, from Marquez's kindness and gratitude, to Confucius' traveling around the world and spreading his wealth everywhere. The author argues that only the more roses are sent, the more fragrant they can be, the kindness and goodwill can be spread all over the world, and the world can be warmed.

Highlights of the score: ambitious, rich here.

redeem

A candidate in Chongqing

I stood outside my grandfather's traditional Chinese medicine for a long time, smelling the thick medicine incense greedily, and my soul seemed to be redeemed at this moment.

That's my grandfather's Chinese medicine shop. The patients affectionately call it "Xinglin". I seem to feel that there is a apricot forest behind this Chinese medicine shop, which shines brightly in the sunshine.

Looking and asking, I saw Grandpa squint slightly and gently press the patient's pulse with a wrinkled hand, which seems to have mastered the pulse of China for 5,000 years and continues to this day.

Grandpa said: "This is to save people, but also to save themselves."

I was deeply moved by grandpa's words, watching the pot with black coal at the bottom being licked gently by the open fire. The medicine juice inside bubbled loudly, and the medicine fragrance rose.

I think this medicine juice made of three bowls of water is the precious essence of traditional Chinese medicine: redemption and self-redemption.

While treating patients and saving lives, TCM is also washing its own conscience.

Grandpa said: "The society is indifferent now. In those western hospitals, doctors and nurses wear masks, and patients seem to have never seen them. " Their instruments are very advanced, but they are very cold. Isn't it a little inhuman? "

Grandma took out a bowl of freshly cooked Chinese medicine from it and handed it to a patient with a caring smile in her eyes.

When I was away, that moment was like a spring breeze.

Yes, with the development of commodity economy, the communication between people is becoming less and less, and the primitive and pure human touch between people is missing, as if the world is dull and tasteless.

Some people say that this is the lack of conscience, which makes us so lonely.

Chinese medicine seems to be the savior of such a nation. Between people, pass a bowl of Chinese medicine full of medicinal incense to save the soul. While saving others, the doctor helped the people, and the compassion for saving the world was also redeemed.

Giving warmth leads to warmth, and saving others is also a kind of self-salvation. This is what I saw from my grandfather and passed on by every doctor in China. The humanistic care that has lasted for thousands of years is permeated with the long-standing compassion of the Chinese nation.

I look forward to one day, I will become such a doctor, like my grandfather or more grandfathers; I also hope that more granddaughters like me will understand this redemption.

Let the preciousness of traditional Chinese medicine continue to be fragrant in this redemption.

Examination score

20 points for content, 20 points for expression and 20 points for expansion, with a total score of 60 points.

Scoring key point

1, the topic is concise and profound. This composition was recognized as a perfect composition by the marking group. This candidate has original ideas on examination questions and ideas. The two characters in the material are a security guard and a worker. The workers' greetings every day are actually goodwill to the security guards. Saving workers' lives by security guards is actually saving themselves.

2, ambitious and philosophical. The examinee chose Chinese medicine with the most traditional culture in China as the topic, and wrote the philosophy of life contained in Chinese medicine in detail. High and rich cultural nationalization, reading this article is like drinking fragrant tea. The more you smash it, the more interesting it becomes.

Highlights of the soundtrack: beautiful writing and rich meaning.

Let love last forever.

-Candidates from Chongqing

Draw a pair of eyes for the world with the purity of the first ray of light; Sing a song for the world with the voice of the first flower, and write a paragraph in the tense examination room with our first touched heart: Let love stay in my heart forever. Because goodness is the eternal truth in the world!

It is with kindness that the workers in the meat processing factory greet the security guards day after day and year after year, and finally save their lives. Kindness is not hypocrisy, arrogance, affectation, not just asking for nothing in return, but kind words on weekdays, which are broad, far-reaching and ordinary.

True goodness is broad.

Yao Ming's kindness is broad, not only for human beings to dedicate his wonderful skills, but also for us to protect nature and care for animals. How shocking is the public service advertisement of not eating abalone and shark's fin? It has made many numb people regain their love for natural creatures and prevented many animals from being slaughtered and killed. Yao Ming's kindness, we need to praise, please remember: no buying and selling, no killing!

True goodness is far-reaching.

"All men are created equal!" Listen, this is Martin's call for racial equality, harmony, mutual assistance and unity. At present, the racial problem is getting more and more serious, and Martin called on us to be kind, to be kind to others and to be kind to foreigners a hundred years ago. This is profound love. This love will flow with the times.

True goodness is ordinary.

People often say: "Go out well, say good things, and do good things. These words contain how kind people are. " A good word is warm in three winters, and a bad word is cold in June. "This shows how important it is to speak. This is the beauty of life and the beauty of doing things.

Look, who is that old man who rides a tricycle to pick up junk! Yes, Grandpa Bai. He collects junk day after day for college students to learn. Every dollar of his contains beautiful sweat and the fragrance of his soul. We have little respect for this ordinary love.

Mencius once said: People have four hearts-humility, kindness, shame and compassion. This is kindness, and this is the real "love" in the world, whether it is Zhu Guangya, a science and technology pilot who only does one thing in his life, or Hu Zhong and Xie Xiaojun, tielian who stick to the Qinghai-Tibet Plateau 12, whether it is Yang Shanzhou, a good secretary of the people with green hills and white hair, or Liu Jinguo, an iron-blooded general who is in command at the scene of the fire, whether it is the best mother who holds her life or "not asking for big love, but asking for small love."

"I hope everyone will give a little love and the world will become a beautiful world."

Examination score

The total score of content 20 expression 18 development 19 is 57 points.

Scoring key point

This is the benchmark composition evaluated by the marking expert group, and it is also an excellent composition in the examination room. It mainly has the following characteristics:

1. Step by step, clear. The article focuses on the idea of "goodness", and the center is prominent. The article takes "goodness is broad, far and ordinary" as the clue, and it is well organized.

2. Close to life, with detailed examples. Examples of workers in meat processing plants include Yao Ming, Martin, Grandpa Bai, Hu Zhong, his wife and Yang Shanzhou. They are all related to "goodness", close to reality, familiar to everyone and closely related to the times. At the same time, the classic quotations of Mencius are quoted, so the whole article has both practical significance and heavy culture.

3. The writing is beautiful and meaningful. Let Love Stay in Your Heart Forever reminds people to be "true and broad", "true and far-reaching" and "true and ordinary", while at the end, "I hope everyone will give a little love and the world will become a beautiful world", which not only deepens the theme of the article, but also inspires people to respect "kind" people.

Highlights of the soundtrack: pain and abuse penetrate into the heart.