How can we make the language concise and clear?
First of all, don't talk nonsense when writing, that is, don't say anything irrelevant to the central idea and main content. This point was also mentioned when we talked about "cutting materials according to the center" earlier.
Second, don't say wordy things when writing, that is, don't say things that are unnecessary to repeat. Lengthy language will not only "drown" the central idea, but also annoy readers.
How can we make the language less verbose? Specifically, we should pay attention to the following two points:
(1) Prevent language duplication. You can understand it in one sentence, and you will never use two or three sentences. This skipping competition is really disappointing, regrettable and unforgettable. I sit next to the fish tank. I opened my eyes wide. I am absorbed in observing how goldfish eat. (3) Cleaning begins. Li Hua and I are responsible for pulling weeds on the classroom walls. Li Hua and I began to work energetically. When Li Hua was pulling up a deep-rooted weed, he fell on his back in the mud because Li Hua used too much force. Li Hua got up from the ground. Li Hua is covered in mud, like an eye inflammation. Li Hua and I laughed at the same time. When my mother saw me coming back, she asked uneasily, "Did you refund your ticket?" I said, "I have already refunded my ticket." I patted my chest and said proudly, "Look, this is the money for returning the plane ticket." Mom said, "Give me the refund!" "I said," here you are. "Mom took the money. For example 1, at first glance, it seems to be repeated, and the word "made man" appears three times at intervals. However, on closer examination, the words "disappointment", "regret" and "unforgettable" list three similar psychology about this skipping competition, which makes mistakes in semantic repetition and should be deleted. The problem with Example 2 is that the actors in the sentence are repeated. The same person or thing doing several actions in a row can be expressed in one sentence. The person or thing (subject) who does the action only needs to appear once at the beginning of the sentence, and can be omitted later. Therefore, these three sentences can be changed to: I sit by the fish tank, open my eyes and concentrate on watching how goldfish eat. The mistake of Example 3 is the improper use of personal pronouns. There are only two people "I" and "Li Hua" in the text. He represents Li Hua, and we represent "Li Hua and me". In some places, people who do actions can be omitted, which is concise. This passage can be changed to: the cleaning has begun. Li Hua and I are responsible for pulling weeds on the classroom walls. We started to work with great energy. When Li Hua was pulling out a deep-rooted weed, he fell on his back in the mud because of too much force. He got up from the ground, covered in mud, like an ophthalmia patient. We both laughed at the same time. The problem with Example 4 is that the dialogue is very long. Elliptic sentences can be used when describing the dialogue between characters. Because in this case, the self-evident part is omitted and the complete meaning can still be expressed. This passage can be changed to: My mother saw me coming back and asked uneasily, "Did you refund the ticket?" "Come back!" I patted my chest and said proudly, "Look, this is a refund! """Give me the money!" "Here you are." Mom took the money.
(2) prevent word accumulation. It is right to dare to use words and pursue vivid images of language; But you can't just make up flowery words. If you can express yourself in one word, you must never use two words or three words. The piling up of words will be self-defeating and puzzling. He ran over happily and said happily, "I got the movie tickets for tonight!" " "You see, the dazzling and silvery domestic watches in the counter constitute a beautiful picture. The meanings of "happily" and "happily" in the example 1 are duplicated, so one should be deleted. There are many beautiful words in Example 2, all of which mean bright and dazzling, so choose one "dazzling".
2. Introduce a book to people and write the main content. Write a 400-word composition in concise language. "Books are the ladder of human progress, and books are the nutrition of all mankind."
A good book will bring us rich knowledge and endless happiness! Friends, do you like reading? I want to recommend one of your books, The Education of Love. This is the representative work of the famous Italian educator Armitage, The Education of Love.
Until now, I still clearly remember the sentence on the title page of this book: a good book can change the fate of countless people. A drop of ink can make millions of people think.
It was this sentence that made me finish reading this book with my heart. The book mainly tells the story of Amway's growth. The author describes the protagonist's experience, hearing, seeing and feeling in the past year with the tone of a primary school student, and expresses the feelings of hometown, teachers and students, parents and children, and the affection between people.
Inject love and beauty into readers' hearts through ordinary and humanized living conditions. The author writes in the form of a diary, but every month there is a long and well-structured "monthly story".
These stories record what he saw and heard in school, family and society, reflect the situation of all social strata, and are linked with noble love and emotion to form a vivid picture, which brings us the enjoyment of love and beauty. At the same time, I also made some new friends, such as "Little Doctor" Derossi, "Little Hero" Lobedi, Caron who loves to help others, poor Nelly, well-dressed Valtini ... I like this book because it doesn't have any hypocritical preaching and rhetoric.
Through simple description and wonderful language, I believe that "books are the ladder of human progress, and books are the nourishment of all mankind."
A good book will bring us rich knowledge and endless happiness! Friends, do you like reading? I want to recommend one of your books, The Education of Love. This is the representative work of the famous Italian educator Armitage, The Education of Love.
Until now, I still clearly remember the sentence on the title page of this book: a good book can change the fate of countless people. A drop of ink can make millions of people think.
It was this sentence that made me finish reading this book with my heart. The book mainly tells the story of Amway's growth. The author describes the protagonist's experience, hearing, seeing and feeling in the past year with the tone of a primary school student, and expresses the feelings of hometown, teachers and students, parents and children, and the affection between people.
Inject love and beauty into readers' hearts through ordinary and humanized living conditions. The author writes in the form of a diary, but every month there is a long and well-structured "monthly story".
These stories record what he saw and heard in school, family and society, reflect the situation of all social strata, and are linked with noble love and emotion to form a vivid picture, which brings us the enjoyment of love and beauty. At the same time, I also made some new friends, such as "Little Doctor" Derossi, "Little Hero" Lobedi, Caron who loves to help others, poor Nelly, well-dressed Valtini ... I like this book because it doesn't have any hypocritical preaching and rhetoric.
Through simple description and wonderful language, I know that love is selfless and priceless. Love cannot be exchanged with anything. Love is an indispensable part of this world. Love is what everyone needs! If you see this book, you must savor it! Remember that sentence: "The world is full of love".
3. Write a cartoon composition of 300 words in concise language. I am an ordinary woodpecker. Like all woodpeckers in the forest, I look at insects on the trees every day. This is a very important job. If insects eat trees, trees will die, and all trees will die. There will be no forest, no forest, no home, no home for monkeys and rabbits, and all animals living here.
Today, as usual, I am flying in the Woods in a low voice. "What's that noise?" Suddenly found a tree fell! Strange, it didn't thunder! I will fly there soon. -I can write that people cut down trees here. I think the idea has been provided, so let the children practice writing by themselves. . . This paragraph is about cutting down trees.
I watched a tree fall like that, and my heart was so painful that I was about to cry. I shouted to the tree cutter, please stop! However, he didn't seem to hear it at all. The old woodpecker told me that people cut down trees to make firewood for their houses. I think, is it that a tree with insects is not suitable for use? So I tried my best to fly to the man's shoulder and tried my best. I shouted: there must be bugs in this wood! ! ! My mother taught me not to lie, but I think this time, lying may stop him. Mom, I'm sorry:
Please, leave our forest alone, it is infested with insects and is not suitable for you. Please leave this tree alone! !
That's the basic structure. I didn't count the words, thinking.
Give points if you feel good. Typing is not easy.
It is not difficult to see that this cartoon reveals that some parents in modern society lack true love for their children, which implies the fault of doting. You can imagine the child's future habits. That would be chaos! Such a child has been dependent on his life since childhood, and his parents have arranged everything in his life since childhood. When he grows up and goes out into the society, he won't form the habit of independence, and his survival ability is poor, so he can't do much. He is like an animal in a zoo, eating, playing and sleeping all day. If one day, people put them into nature, they will not be able to stand the test of nature and their chances of survival will be very slim. If they have lived in nature since childhood, experienced all kinds of adversity and have enough survival experience and ability, they will adapt to the life of nature very much. There is a classmate in our village named Duan Ye, who is in Grade Three. His parents doted on him very much, and even sent him to school by motorcycle, so he couldn't ride a bike since he was a child. Once, his father went to the street on business and didn't come home one day and one night. The next day, he got up and went to school, but he couldn't see his father's shadow and insisted that his mother carry him to school. His mother was afraid that her son would be wronged and affected, so she had to follow him. Needless to say, I was late for school that day. In fact, there is nothing wrong with going to school by bike. It can exercise.
Introduce a book to people and write the main content. Write a 400-word composition in concise language. Friends, do you like reading? I want to recommend a book to you-The Education of Love. \x09 \x09 This is the masterpiece of Amicus, a famous Italian educator. Until now, I still clearly remember the sentence on the title page of this book: a good book can change the lives of countless people. A drop of ink can make millions of people think. It is this sentence that makes me think. X09 mainly writes the growth story of Amway. The author tells the story of the protagonist's experience, hearing, seeing and feeling in the past year in the tone of a primary school student, and expresses the feelings of his hometown, teachers and students, parents and children, and the affection between people. Inject love and beauty into readers' hearts through ordinary and human existence. The author writes in the form of a diary, but there is still a long one every month. A well-structured "monthly story". These stories record what he saw and heard in school, family and society, and reflect the situation of all social strata. They are linked with noble love and emotion, forming a vivid picture, which brings us the enjoyment of love and beauty. At the same time, they also brought us some new friends, such as "Little Doctor" Derossi, "Little Hero" Loberti, and Caron who loves to help others. Pity. X09 I like this book because it doesn't have any hypocritical preaching and rhetoric. Through simple description and wonderful language, I know that love is selfless and priceless. Love cannot be exchanged with anything. Love is an indispensable part of this world. Love is what everyone needs! \x09 \x09 If you see this book, you must read it carefully! Remember that sentence: "The world is full of love".
Beautiful and delicate sentences can be used to write compositions, such as scenery, people and people. Looking up at the blue sky, there are endless beautiful scenery in the sun.
Turn around and backlight. Before the arrival of that summer, the warmth was scattered all over the floor.
Has nothing to do with ups and downs. If you are well, it will be sunny for me.
Flip through the yellow scroll gently, and mottled past events come to mind.
It's raining outside, looking at the glass window and remembering quietly. ...
Looking at the drizzle outside the window, the sky was covered with a layer of melancholy.
Dense fog pervaded, creating a calm and peaceful night.
Several elegant chandeliers, with adjustable light and shade, glow with soft orange light.
The twilight of summer spreads, giving rise to all kinds of warm little emotions, washing away the sadness and taking it away.
6. Concise News Mr. Lu Xun once said: There is no other way but to read and write more.
Systematically speaking, to write a good composition, there must be four preparations-
1\ There is something to write in three aspects: language, thinking and sense of language.
Practice as much as possible anytime, anywhere. Practice makes perfect.
Specifically, you should master certain composition learning methods, including:
1, read and write a lot, and strengthen composition accumulation.
Newspaper clippings: don't move the pen and ink, don't read the language, and think with a sense of language: "reasonable, unexpected" and "ten strange"
2. Learn to write news and get into the habit of writing.
Methods: Learn to write news (one sentence-a paragraph-a long paragraph)-hundred words new things training.
Function: Strengthen the basic requirements of "truthfulness, novelty, conciseness and fluency" in writing.
"Sparrows are small and complete", and their bodies are refined, so they pay more attention to writing well, such as short poems and couplets.
Case: News reports of literary club activities
3. Learn 4X and master the thinking method.
-Three principles of thinking, divergent thinking and association
-choose, write or not, write first and then write, write in detail and skim.
-Write, in one go
-repair, language sense method, calm method
Practice first and then guide, so as not to limit thinking.
Case: "Running Experience"
4. apply what you have learned, and apply what you have learned.
Look for every opportunity to practice and publish, and break the "motivation" barrier of composition.
-Letters and diaries
-Draft event notices, news reports and broadcasts
-Graduation message, short message-Answering questions is also a composition (biological topic: expressing opinions on the reconstruction of school flower beds)
7. How to write a good composition easily? First, the composition should learn to accumulate "reading thousands of books, writing like a god" and "a clever woman can't cook without rice", which explains the importance of "accumulation" in writing from both positive and negative aspects.
"Usually rely on accumulation, the examination room depends on play", which is the same experience of the students in the examination room. (A) language to establish a "vocabulary".
Vocabulary is the cell of an article. Vocabulary in a broad sense refers not only to the collection of words and phrases, but also to sentences and sentence groups.
There are two ways to establish "vocabulary": the first is reading. Usually, you should read books, newspapers and periodicals extensively, take reading notes, extract some beautiful words, sentences and paragraphs from a specific notebook, or make reading cards.
The second is life. At ordinary times, we should capture the fresh language in the popular spoken language and write it down in a small notebook or card that we carry with us. Over time, we can say it chapter by chapter and write it beautifully.
(2) Strengthen the accumulation of materials. Materials are the flesh and blood of the article.
Because many students usually don't pay attention to accumulating materials, they are worried every time they write a composition, or edit or copy it. The solution to this problem is to accumulate materials.
Usually, you can take a video camera and tape recorder with you, observe life deeply, actively participate in life, and record your experiences in family life, campus life and social life in time in the form of sketching, keeping a diary and writing observation notes. When recording, we should grasp the details and the characteristics of people, things, things and scenery.
The article written in this way is flesh and blood. (3) We should strengthen ideological accumulation.
Opinion is the soul of an article. The center of the article is not clear, or the thought is not profound, which often shows that the author's thought is superficial.
Therefore, it is necessary to establish a "think tank". There are two ways: first, be thoughtful.
"One more miss, one more gain." Think deeply at ordinary times and ask "why", "what" and "how" when something happens.
So you can see the essence through the phenomenon. It is also necessary to record the "sparks" of thinking and the conclusions of thinking at any time.
The second is compilation, that is, extracting famous sayings and aphorisms. In short, the composition should be accumulated, and the three writing warehouses of vocabulary, material and thought should be regularly counted, sorted and classified to continuously enrich and expand.
Second, to write a good composition, first learn to observe that Mr. Lu Xun emphasized two points when answering the question of "how to write a good article" for literary youth: one is to read more books, and the other is to practice more. Here, "seeing more" means observing more.
This shows that in order to write a good article and master skillful writing skills, it is necessary to observe more and learn to observe, and observation is the necessary premise and foundation of writing. Russian novelist Chekhov earnestly warned beginners: "A writer must train himself to be a keen observer and never give up! -It is a habit to exercise your own observation, as if it were second nature. "
It takes time to hone observation into habit and second nature, which is very useful and remarkable. Pay attention to the people, events, sights and things around you, and hunt for the materials needed in the composition: be interested in some seemingly insignificant but meaningful things, and pay attention to the cause, process and result of things; You should pay attention to how the plants in the campus flower beds change their colors all year round, and learn to get to the bottom of it and find out the ins and outs of these changes; You should go out, enter the society, meet more people, observe their words and deeds, think about some things, and integrate into your own thoughts at any time.
This is the process of observation. In the process of observation, we should pay attention to the following points: (1) Observation should never be limited to "seeing with eyes". Broadly speaking, more practical observation refers to mobilizing all the five senses of people: listening with ears, feeling with the body and, more importantly, thinking with the mind, so that the observation will be more delicate and profound.
(2) Pay attention to the use of "bad writing" in the observation process. As the saying goes, a good memory is better than bad writing.
Many students see a lot and think a lot every day, but they are not good at writing it down at any time, which will waste the observed materials and a lot of valuable things. (3) Pay special attention to perseverance in observation.
Don't make "brain fever". Three minutes of heat is not conducive to writing a good composition. You should observe life and think about every day in your life, so that you can write wonderful articles. Learning to observe plays a great role in laying the foundation and promoting a good composition. Without observation, you often find it difficult to write.
May you learn to observe, constantly cultivate and improve your ability to observe, and make great progress in your writing practice. Third, if the meaning is high, the meaning will be better, that is, to establish the center and intention of the article.
So what problems should the article pay attention to when expounding ideas? (1) Correct conception is the first meaning of the article. The so-called correctness is to ensure that the feelings and thoughts of the article are correct, in line with the nature and laws of objective things, in line with China's basic political principles, in line with people's basic moral requirements, and can give people positive inspiration. (2) Intentional singleness "The thing of composition is singleness, specialization is success, and dispersion is stupidity."
No matter how complicated things are, the main idea cannot be dispersed. An article should explain both this problem and that point of view, and it is ambiguous to ramble.
In fact, if you want to cover everything, it is definitely not in place. Moreover, an article can only have one center. Instead of "biting off more than one can chew", it is better to concentrate on expressing a center with pen and ink. Even if we express the center through several things, we should stick to the center, keep the same goal, pay attention to the combination of materials and centers, and let all the forces contained in materials point to the center. (3) The idea should be novel. Don't follow the crowd, the novel angle is the core of composition innovation.
The novelty of conception requires jumping out of the old box, not following the advanced thinking, habitual thinking or the original psychological formula, but examining the alternative content contained in the topic from a unique perspective to avoid what others often write and what others have not written. Even the same writing object can always be cut from multiple angles. As long as we break the mindset, stand at the height of the times, avoid "vulgarity" and seek "difference", think from many angles and sides, or associate, or expand, or analogize, or reverse, which makes people unhurried, we can rank fifth.