Composition on Kite and String (1)

Xu Wan, Class 501, Jinjiang Primary School, Yujiang County

Once upon a time, there was a pair of inseparable good friends - the kite and the string .

One day, the wind was very strong, and Xian said to the kite: "Let's go out and play!"

"Okay!" The kite readily agreed.

When they came to the wilderness, they saw the kite leaping up and shouting: Flying! Fly! Flying leisurely into the wind. He flew left and right, and when he saw that the iron tower was higher than him, he said unconvinced: "I want to fly higher than you!" So, the kite flew higher than the iron tower. He was so excited that he shouted: "I fly the highest!".

At this time, a beautiful bird flew from a distance, flying faster than a kite. The kite proudly said: "What's so great about this? I can fly higher than you!" As he said that, he spread his wings and rushed into the blue sky. The kite shouted to the line: "Let the line go! Let the line go! The line had to keep flying." string, the kite flew higher. "I said, little bird, you are too stupid!" ..." Before he finished speaking, a huge object jumped out. It turned out to be a plane. The kite wanted to fly higher than the plane, but the line had reached its limit. The kite said to the line angrily: "You useless guy! "As he said that, he cut the thread with scissors, and the kite flew again. However, halfway through the flight, the kite fell from the air.

The kite came to Universal Hospital on its feet (lower wings) Mr. Mu, the orthopedic surgeon at the hospital, said: "You are so dangerous! What's more, airplanes don't fly the highest! There are things higher than airplanes including the sun, moon, and satellites... Do you want to go to space? ! ". Kite said regretfully: "I'm sorry, I was wrong! "Don't apologize to me, go apologize to Xian!" "

The next day, Kite went to the flower shop and bought some bouquets of flowers, with a sign on them: "Sorry! "The kite came to the Thread Orphanage. As soon as he entered the door, a thread attendant came towards him. She asked: "Sir, do you want to collect the orphan thread? ""Yes! "Okay, come with me!" "The kite looked around and finally found a good friend's thread. He said softly: "I'm sorry! I was wrong! This bouquet of flowers is for you! ""Thanks! "The two of them went home holding hands again.

Published in "Yujiang Daily" on February 17, 2015 Published in "Gandong Metropolis Daily" on January 10, 2015 Instructor Xiong Jiehui

Composition on Kite and Thread (2)

Fuhai Junior High School Class 2013 (3)? Mao Shulami

This article won the 10th Chinese Middle School Student Award First Prize in the Essay Contest (Zhejiang) and the Second "Middle School Student World" Cup Essay Contest (Cixi Division)

Mom and Dad hope that you can fly as far and as high as possible, but you are tired of flying. Remember to come back, we have been waiting here for you...

——Inscription

When I was sorting out the debris, I accidentally saw the kite in the corner of the room, which was already covered with dust. , lying there quietly. I picked it up and dusted it off carefully, and my mind couldn't help but drift back to that spring.

That day, the sun filled the earth, and the sky was blue, occasionally. There were a few wisps of clouds passing by. The wind was neither strong nor weak, and it was a good time to fly a kite. So, our family of three bought a kite and went to the school playground to fly it. I held the kite and my father held on to the coil. I ran quickly against the wind, and the wind slipped through my fingers, gently and softly, "Let go!" "My mother gave the order, and the kite flew up, carrying a long line. The line became longer and longer, and the kite flew higher and farther, and finally only a small point was visible. Dad held the coil and controlled it. My mother was pointing the direction of the kite... Suddenly, I felt like I was the kite flying freely in the air, and the one I loved was my parents.

I am lazy by nature and don't like it. I don't move around very much, so I stay at home on weekends, either sleeping in or studying, or watching TV or eating, so I like to be alone in school and mind my own business, and I'm not very gregarious.

Dad saw it and was anxious in his heart. One weekend, my father saw that I had finished my homework and urged me to go to my classmates' house to play. I didn’t want to go out, so I said I didn’t have my classmates’ phone numbers, let alone their addresses. As if he had already planned it, my father gave me the phone number of a girl named Luo. So, I had no choice but to call and go to my classmate’s house. When I went out, my parents kept nagging behind me: Be safe when you go, and be polite at your classmates' houses...

Later, every weekend, every time I finished my homework, my father would urge me. Go outside to meet classmates. Slowly, I found that I became more lively and sunny, and my academic performance actually improved.

Later, at the beginning of each semester, my father asked me to make all plans. At first, my father made arrangements for me and told me the tasks; later, my father and I discussed the tasks together and set the tasks; now, I make the arrangements myself and tell my father. From the beginning to now, my ability has gradually improved because of my father's step-by-step guidance.

Every time the weather is nice, my parents will take me to the wild and do anything. Dad said that it is better to bask in the sun, enjoy the wind and look at the scenery than to stay at home. So, the above scene occurred.

The line between my parents is getting longer and longer, forcing me to integrate into society step by step.

One day, I wanted to buy a pair of jeans, so I told my mother my request. My mother asked me to buy it myself, saying that it would hone my abilities. I have never bought anything alone. What if I get scammed? But my mother said: "There are always a lot of things wrong with the first time. If you do it more times, won't you be able to buy good things?" I heard the same thing, and I knew that no matter how hard I persisted, I couldn't win, so I had to do it alone. People go to explore the world. The result is of course predictable. The pants I spent a long time picking out were not easy to wear and not beautiful. My mother took that pair of pants and told me how to choose them. Now, I’m an expert at buying clothes!

Dad always said to me: "Dad only makes you mature when you are ignorant. Your future is in your own hands. Mom and Dad will let you go little by little. , let you fly freely. Mom and Dad hope that you can fly farther and higher, but when you are tired of flying, remember to come back, we have been waiting for you here..." I always think when I hear these words. I shed tears, and it was precisely because of these words that I grew up.

Now, although I will still fall and fail, I will wipe away the tears from the corners of my eyes and stand up again; now, although my daily plan is incomplete, at least I already know Perfect in deficiencies; now, although I am not mature enough, I have learned how to integrate into society...

Because I know: Mom and Dad are the long string; and I am the kite , embracing the blue sky with colorful dreams. When you are tired, fly back; after a short rest, start again...

(Instructor? Shen Haiping)

Kite and String Composition (3)

◎ Yan Jiayi

Dragging my suitcase and walking into the campus, looking forward to my future life on campus, I sang an ode to freedom in my heart.

My parents weighed it for a long time before deciding to let me live on campus. I have been raised like a little emperor since I was a child. I have opened my mouth to eat, stretched out my hands to wear clothes, and have never left home. My studies have never deviated from the beautiful blueprint planned by my parents. But it was this current situation that made them worry about my inability to survive in society. After a struggle between caring and letting go, they made a choice. When I went to school, my parents nagged me all the way, but I was perfunctory, secretly happy that I could finally control my own time. I finally broke free and gained the freedom I longed for.

The life in school is always full of novelty, and I simply enjoy it. I no longer give a detailed report on my day. When my parents called, I would quietly tell my classmates to lie and say I was away. As a last resort, I would just say a few words. The voice on the other end of the phone was always full of anxiety and expectation, but I never cared.

I am no longer overwhelmed by the sea of ??questions. I have learned to spend the whole night studying on my own and reading leisure books, and then rush to catch up on homework in the last few minutes; I have learned to use the quilt to cover the light of the flashlight, and in front of the teacher’s eyes I violated discipline and read novels... All signs showed that I was degenerating, sinking, and wasting my time, but I was still complacent.

My mother became more and more worried, but I remained unmoved.

It really corresponds to the lyrics, "You always have to wait until before going to bed to realize that you have only done a little homework; you always have to wait until after the exam to realize that you have not read all the books you should study." Once the monthly exam papers were handed out and faced with a bunch of symbols, I couldn’t figure out where to start. Of course the result was terrible, and the teacher's face was certainly ugly.

Facing the last results, I began to feel uneasy. Indeed, I fulfilled my so-called wish, but I lost more than I gained. I can almost imagine the scene where my mother would get so angry that she would pick up the slippers, beat me up, and then leave me behind to think about my mistakes. I thought about whether to hide the test papers or forge signatures, but I quickly rejected this idea. Even though it was so unbearable, I still chose to face it. As the saying goes, "Those who know shame are almost brave."

For the first time, I called my parents. After hesitating for a while, my mother heard my uneasiness. She calmly asked me if I didn't do well in the exam. I fell silent. Self-blame and guilt flashed through my heart, and in an instant, scenes passed through my mind. Their choked reminders when they sent me to school, their disappointment when I answered the phone impatiently, and their joy when they saw me gobbling up snacks... They cared about me so much, but I wanted to squeeze them out of my world. For the first time in my life, I said to them on the other end of the phone: I'm sorry.

"This is not just your fault," my mother's voice was as self-blaming as mine. "It was me who restrained you too much before, but suddenly indulged me. This deserves our collective reflection. Too much The constraints will restrict you, but without constraints, you will not be able to recognize yourself..."

Perhaps mistakes can serve as a wake-up call. After that, I changed a lot. Those bad habits were corrected one by one under the supervision of my parents. I no longer resist their discipline, because I understand that without restraint, I can't go far.

Just like a kite and a string, the string restrains the kite, but without the string, the kite will fall. Do not overindulge the kite in stringing, because overindulgence will make it difficult to control, and the kite will easily fall and get bruised. The kite and the string must depend on each other, just like my parents and I. They have to control the degree of retraction and retraction, but I can't just want to break away. I have to follow the pace of the line to truly find my own blue sky.

Comments

The essay title "Kite and String" should be written as a narrative. The key is to choose typical and vivid examples according to the topic. Whether the material selection is appropriate is an important factor in the success or failure of the article. When writing, the process of things should be unfolded layer by layer, and people and events should be described in detail to make the central idea clear and prominent. Fortunately, the author of this article has accumulated life experience and writing ability, and has met the above requirements.

The central incident of this article is that parents over-restrain their daughters, causing their daughters to "reverse restraints" and use "living in school" to gain "freedom", and "freedom" makes their daughters lose control. For this reason, both mother and daughter *** Let’s reflect on our respective mistakes. This material is well chosen and consistent with the metaphorical meaning of "kite and string". How do parents discipline their children, how do children view discipline, and how to deal with conflicts between parents and children during discipline? These problems come from life and are relevant to current issues. By solving these problems, the purpose of the article will be profound and its practical significance will be enhanced.

The writing ideas of this article are clear and smooth: the bondage of love → the freedom to live on campus → self-indulgence → academic regression → guilt reflection → mother’s self-blame → clear explanation of the topic. The joy of gaining freedom, the behavior of indulgence and the psychology of guilt and self-blame are all written in a detailed and contagious manner. Especially when writing about ideological changes, there is no simplification or conceptualization. Instead, we focus on writing the process of ideological struggle, and naturally connect it with the context, making it true and credible. The mother's self-blame on the phone is a wonderful piece of writing, which not only closely follows the meaning of the question, but also deepens the core. The final paragraph explains the dialectical relationship between "kite and string", which is the finishing touch. It not only summarizes the full text, but also sublimates the main idea.

There are some inappropriate words in the article. "All signs indicate that I am degenerating, sinking, and squandering my time." "Degenerate" and "sink" are strong words and are inconsistent with the performance of "I". "Squandering" should be changed to "wasting". The last sentence of the last paragraph, "I have to follow the pace of the thread, can I truly find my own blue sky." If there is a grammatical error, it can be changed to: "Only by following the retraction and rhythm of the thread, can I fly to my own blue sky."

Reviewer: Special teacher? Yang Junyan