Confucius said: Words have no words, but actions do not go far. Articles should pay attention to literary talent and beauty. If the language of the article is not literary, it will be difficult to spread for a long time. Therefore, we must make the language in the composition elegant and "bright" in the language.

Characteristics of "bright" language

1. Concrete and perceptible

2. Vivid and vivid

3. Rich in emotion

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Concrete and perceptible language

Example

The mother leaned her body and her steps were a little messy. She struggled to grab the big bag with both hands. His tendons were clearly visible, as if they were angry because of the excessive load, as if they were about to break. Her hands kept changing positions, as if she wanted to take advantage of the moment of exchange to relieve the pressure. A few strands of hair fell to her forehead as if to cover up her frown, soaked in sweat... ——"My Sight"

Clear and vivid language

Example

What is the color of life

Columbus said: It is blue. I have been with the sea my whole life. Blue is tolerance and broadness.

Yuan Longping said: It is green. I have been cultivating Long Mu for fifty years. Green is dedication and hope.

Nightingale said: It is white. I wear a white dress to protect life. White represents care and responsibility.

Helen Keller said: Black means I live bravely in the darkness. Black means unyielding and hard work.

Lenin said: It is red. I have been fighting for the liberation of mankind all my life. Red is fighting and ideal.

Emotional language

Example

I was standing in the Tengwang Pavilion. It started to rain in Nanchang in July, and the Yangtze River outside the pavilion was raining. The sound is like singing, like crying, like chanting. The sound of rain lingers in my thoughts, and in those thoughts is the figure of the eternal genius Wang Bo, mixed with my love, regret and regret.

Refining the description

Transforming the abstract into concrete

Appropriate citations to add color

Refining words and enhancing expressiveness

Lively sentence patterns, integrated and integrated

Specific methods to achieve bright language

1. Description refinement

The main function of description is to make the description object more detailed Realistic, more vivid, and can give people an immersive feeling. The article is beautiful and vivid, and description is essential.

Example 1

Only one student, Hu Fenfen, was left before the high jump. At this time, the crossbar had risen to 1.35 meters, one centimeter higher than last year's women's high jump record. The whistle of the competition sounded, and Hu Fenfen was seen running forward. Less than half a meter away from the crossbar, she jumped and flew over the crossbar, breaking the school sports meeting record.

Disadvantages: This excerpt only has about 100 words in total. It really describes the scene when classmate Hu Fenfen broke the high jump record. There is only one sentence, only 20 to 30 words, which is very unspecific.

Modification strategy: decompose the action description and reproduce the action details.

The whistle sounded. Hu Fenfen jumped up and down a few times, habitually pressed her left leg, then her right leg, straightened her waist, took a deep breath, and then took a brisk and powerful step. , rushing towards the high jump. (Run-up) When approaching the high jump, make a sharp turn and kick with both feet. The two actions are completed almost simultaneously. (Take off) Before the audience had time to blink, her head and shoulders had already crossed the crossbar, and then she raised her chest, tightened her abdomen, and raised her waist, forming a "back-crossing" style. (Climbing)..."Successful!" He broke the school record, and there was applause from all around, making the crossbar on the high jump seem to be jumping. (Landing)

Practice: shooting, shooting

Ronaldo took the ball, rushed to the penalty area, flew up and kicked the ball into the net.

Modify the strategy: Break down Ronaldo’s wonderful shooting action into five small actions:

Then, describe the five small actions in detail.

①Catch the ball; ②Bounce the ball; ③Dramble; ④Avoid the goalkeeper; ⑤Shoot.

Ronaldo straightened up and contracted his abdomen in the midfield, caught a high ball from his companion, and used his calf to gently bump the ball as usual, and the ball magically jumped over the opponent's defender's head. He quickly jumped in, and with a flexible and lifelike feint, he dribbled the ball past the three defenders of the opponent and rushed into the penalty area. He cleverly avoided the goalkeeper who had rushed to him. He stepped sideways and kicked the ball with a 'swish' sound. Enter the network in response.

Example 2

In the dead of night, I was reading a Chinese book. At this time, my mother pushed the door in with a glass of milk.

Mom said: "Qianqian, the high school entrance examination is tomorrow, don't read tonight, drink milk, go to bed early!".

I said: "I don't want to drink, I want to watch it for a while." Mom said: "You'd better go to bed early for the exam tomorrow."

After hearing what my mother said, I was very angry and said: "Stop talking! I can't even watch it!".

Disadvantages: monotonous and straightforward

Modification strategy: add verbs and adjectives to modify and enhance the descriptiveness.

In the dead of night, I was still flipping through the Chinese language book in a panic, but I couldn’t read it at all. At this time, my mother gently opened the door and came in, holding a cup of hot milk in her hand.

"Qianqian, the high school entrance examination is tomorrow, don't read tonight, drink milk, go to bed early!" Mom said with a smile and concern.

Although I knew what my mother meant, my irritability turned me into a hedgehog, and my mother became the target of venting.

"I don't want to drink. I don't even have time to read. Do I still have time to drink milk?" I didn't even raise my head, and my heart was as frizzy as grass.

"You'd better go to bed early for the exam tomorrow, otherwise you won't be energetic tomorrow." There was a hint of anxiety in my mother's tone.

"Stop annoying me! I can't even read the book!" I yelled at my mother.

Example 3

The test papers were handed out and I got 100 points in Chinese. I was very happy. However, several classmates said that I copied it and said a lot of sarcastic remarks in front of me, which greatly stimulated me and increased my confidence in learning.

Disadvantages: This kind of very vague narrative is quite representative in examination compositions. How the classmates satirized "me" and what kind of stimulation they caused to "me". What is "my" mentality? Nothing specific.

Revision strategy: turn narrative into description

The results were announced. Ha, 100 points, long live! I want to sing, jump, and share my joy with everyone I know or don’t know. Several classmates came over and I greeted them with a smile, ready to accept their congratulations. Unexpectedly, what penetrated his ears was a string of taunts: "Look at the pride, the sparrow has turned into a phoenix!" "Huh, I'm proud of the points I copied!" "Hee hee hee..." "Hahaha..." Boom! My mind exploded, and the warm sunshine in front of me suddenly turned cold. I want to cry, cry hard! No, I can't cry! I want to use more 100 points to prove to them: I, the sparrow, can turn into a phoenix!

Example 4

A little girl stood by the flower bed, her thin little hand slowly stretched out towards the most colorful chrysanthemum. As soon as her fingertips touched the petals of the chrysanthemum, suddenly She retracted again, looked around warily, and then stretched out her little hand. She paused next to the chrysanthemum. She took a deep breath, then reached over with her little hand, cut off the stem of the chrysanthemum, and held a piece of chrysanthemum. The chrysanthemums flew away.

Meticulous and detailed description

In the place in the article that can highlight the center most, or the place that best expresses the character of the character, the author should not hesitate to use ink to describe it carefully, and the more delicate the language, the more delicate the description. The more beautiful it is, the more it can infect and impress readers.

Example 5: Vivid description in examination room composition

A small car carries a large pot, a bag of dough, a bag of coriander and green onions, a basket of eggs, and several plastic bottles Divided seasonings. A rusty iron box dangles a solitary coin.

She is a short, middle-aged woman who always wears a grease-stained apron and smiles at passers-by, showing her uneven teeth. He stood aside silently, receiving money and handing over gifts.

She just looked forward to someone stopping in front of the car, and then she happily agreed, skillfully pushing the dough, sprinkling the vegetables on it, frying it on the pan, shaking it and folding it; Opening the mouth of the plastic bag with both hands, she gently stuffed the breakfast, handed it to the customer, and took the money.

——"Them"

2. Transform abstraction into concrete

1. Interpret abstract concepts with concrete examples in life

Example 6: Details of love

In the pouring rain, the young mother held her daughter's hand and walked carefully across the road, although the rain quietly dripped on the young mother's back; the warm sunshine Under the dim light, an elderly couple supported each other and walked towards the depths of the park, although they were faltering; under the dim light, the grandson held his grandfather's hand and jumped in front of him, although he did not understand his grandfather's joy and joy... great Selfless and sincere love is an indispensable landscape in the world.

Example 7: Maternal love materialized

Many plots from the past suddenly appeared in front of my eyes: the bed sheet with the best quality in the house, the room with the best location, the best open space. The beautiful pot of flowers, the most delicious dish, and even the bowl with the most exquisite pattern when eating...

——Qiao Ye "Sunshine Zone"

Example 8: What is a sense of responsibility? We can use the deeds of responsible Chinese and foreign celebrities to explain it in detail:

The sense of responsibility is derived from Zhuge Kongming’s "Executive Model" written by Zhuge Kongming, who said he "dedicated himself to the best of his ability and died." The sense of responsibility is Kong Fansen left home and left his mother, and spilled his blood on the plateau to establish a public servant monument. The sense of responsibility is the "Symphony of Destiny" written by Beethoven to challenge life and transcend himself. The sense of responsibility is the fiery diamond forged by Paul Korchagin's tenacious struggle and love for life.

Such a vivid explanation makes the composition language suddenly become more flexible.

Exercise examples: happiness, tolerance, youth...

2. Use metaphors skillfully

Smart use of metaphors can turn abstraction into concreteness and poverty. For a plump, rough to delicate effect. Make the article charming, radiant, and produce a charming effect.

For example: "The footsteps of spring are approaching" means "spring is coming soon". But the author uses personification to treat spring as a beautiful little girl walking towards us with light steps. This statement can express the loveliness and affection of spring better than "spring is coming soon".

Another example: "Spring is like a little girl, full of flowers, smiling and walking.

"In one sentence, the author uses metaphorical techniques to write a story that is not only beautiful but also dynamic. The language is vivid and expressive.

Another example is "Spring is like a baby that just fell to the ground, starting from scratch. It's new down to the feet, it's growing. Spring is like a little girl, full of flowers, smiling and walking. Spring is like a strong young man, with iron arms, waist and feet. He leads us forward. ”

The author uses the technique of parallelism, and after perfectly creating a picture of spring, he praises spring with all his heart, further revealing that spring has unstoppable creativity and infinite beautiful hope. The parallelism here The use of sentences not only makes the sentence structure neat, but also makes the text have the beauty of rhythm, and at the same time facilitates the expression of emotions. The three visual metaphors are gradually aligned and powerful, and they summarize the whole text suddenly and powerfully. It makes people feel soul-stirring.

Example 9:

Happiness is a naughty bird. When I search hard for or watch her, I don’t know that she has quietly settled down. On my shoulder, I ignored her existence just because I looked around.

I want to thank life, thank life, use my heart to feel happiness, and I will find that happiness is not far away in the clouds. The bird is jumping next to me, and I can even count the feathers on her body - as long as I use my heart to understand it,

Comment: It is a very clever method of comparison, turning abstraction into concreteness. The language is full of interest.

Example 10:

Listening is the flower of the soul. Listening can reflect the pure and passionate light, which can blow away the clouds. The haze in people's hearts; listening is a shooting star that breaks through the dark night and can bring hope to people; listening is an undefeated flower that blooms the core of life in exchange for people's appreciation and trust. - "Listening." 》

Here, the author compares listening to the breeze, shooting stars, and flowers, making abstract things concrete and tangible.

Example 11:

Bringing a smile. Give life, like the brightness of the sun shining on the earth, the warmth of the breeze caressing the woods, the heat of the setting sun burning the heaven, the passion of the waves washing over the rocks...

——"Bring a smile to life"

Of course, the use of rhetorical techniques should be based on the needs of the language environment. There are many rhetorical techniques in writing, such as antithesis, hyperbole, rhetorical question, hypothetical question, etc. If used appropriately, the language of the composition will definitely be improved. Come alive.

3. Appropriate quotations add luster

Famous aphorisms, poems, songs, and proverbs have stood the test of time and are the best in the language treasure house. Appropriate citations can enhance the appeal and shock of the article, give people a rational and artistic beauty, greatly add luster to the article, and also demonstrate the rich cultural heritage of the candidates.

Example 12: "Feeling the Beauty of Literature":

Literature contains endless treasures of ideological beauty: the tragic beauty of "the wind is rustling and the water is cold, and the strong men will never return" "No one has died since ancient times." , the sentimental beauty of "leaving a loyal heart to illuminate history", the aspirational beauty of "sometimes the wind and waves will break, and cloud sails will hang directly on the sea", the philosophical beauty of "thousands of sails passing by the side of the sunken boat, and thousands of spring trees in front of the diseased trees", The natural beauty of "when the flowers out of the river are as red as the fire, when spring comes, the river is as green as blue". It is so sultry and ecstatic that it makes me "intoxicated and I don't know the way back". I know. Literature has left a mark on my heart that cannot be erased. go. I will continue to water it with diligent spring water until it bears fruit.

The author wanders in the gallery of classical poetry, captures the beauty and beauty, integrates into his own realm, lets the poems flow with emotion, expresses his feelings about the beauty of literature, weaves a strong bookish atmosphere, and shows Show the author's talent.

There is no place in the world without scenery. Read, rich cultural history. The majestic and majestic "The lonely smoke in the desert, the setting sun in the long river" is a scenery; the sadness and melancholy of "When will the bright moon come, ask the blue sky with wine" is a scenery; the pride and confidence of "There will be long winds and waves, and the clouds and sails will sail across the sea". It is a scenery; "Asking you how much sorrow you can have is just like a river of spring water flowing eastward" is a scenery. The rich and profound culture is an indispensable part of the human world.

Four. Refine words and enhance expressiveness

Refining verbs

Mr. Lu Xun described in "From Baicao Garden to Sanwei Bookstore" that catching birds in the snow is It is written like this: "Sweep away a piece of snow, expose the ground, use a short stick to support a large bamboo sieve, scatter some grains underneath, tie a long rope to the stick, and hold it from a distance to watch the birds. He came down to eat, and when he reached the bottom of the sieve, he pulled the rope and covered it. "A series of verbs are used in this: sweep away, expose, hold up, scatter, tie, pull, look, pull, and cover. It describes in detail the different movements of catching birds in the snow, accurately, vividly and hierarchically depicts the whole process of catching birds, and describes the surprise and excitement of children when catching birds.

Look again at a passage from the article "Squirrels" that we have learned: They have handsome faces, sparkling eyes, strong bodies, brisk limbs, very agile and alert. When Buffon introduced the squirrel, he used four adjectives: "delicate", "gleaming", "vigorous" and "brisk" to describe the "face", "eyes", "body" and "limbs" respectively, which is accurate It carefully describes the external characteristics of the squirrel, making the image of the squirrel vivid and vivid on the page.

The use of repeated words can not only make the description more accurate, but also make the language have a sense of rhythm, thus making the language rich in musical beauty. Such as "slightly", "gradually", "soft", "quietly" and "sparsely combed" in Zhu Ziqing's "Spring", and "slightly", "gently", "gently" in Bing Xin's "Little Orange Lamp" "Slightly", "slowly", "gradually", etc. are all excellent examples.

Pay attention to the changes and diversification of sentence patterns. For example, in "The Soybean Rattle Song", "The boss of the car stood steadily and leisurely on the car, bouncing and swinging, his whip trembling in the air, and suddenly shaking out a beautiful fox shape", According to the format of long sentence - short sentence - long sentence, it shows the joy of the people of Beidahuang during the great harvest, and the writing has a sense of rhythm.

You can also use a series of synonyms, synonyms or antonyms in the composition to make the language richly varied; pay attention to the changes in the emotional color of the words to make the emotion of the composition language clear.

The above are just some language usage techniques in the process of writing essays. To truly improve your language use ability, in addition to skills, you must also pay attention to daily observation and thinking, learning and accumulation, and writing and application.

Example 13:

"I am looking for your beautiful traces in the spring", a "searching" seems very plain, if replaced with: "I click throughout the spring, looking for your beautiful "Traces", such a sentence is expressive because it uses the Internet language "click" to give the static narrative an image action.

A person writes about the warm feeling after returning home. When he writes: "There are blue flames running under the pot," he thinks about how to use a more appropriate and emotional verb. He thinks twice. Using another verb suddenly makes the whole sentence warm as spring. ”

Exercise

He changed it like this: “ ”

We must understand: we must avoid clichés when choosing words and sentences, refrain from following what others say, and create unique ideas. Personal "patented" phrases.

Blue flames lick the bottom of the pot

Wonderful use of adjectives, modifiers and refrains

"In the morning, the sun shines. Looking at my bedroom, the birds flapped their wings and chirped in the trees. "Such a sentence is not enough to reflect the author's joyful mood when enjoying nature.

Changed to "In the morning, the bright sunshine shines softly on my bedroom, and the light birds flap their wings gracefully. , singing gracefully on the tree. "The effect of expression is much stronger.

5. The sentence pattern is lively and the whole sentence is combined with the scattered parts

The whole sentence is solemn and powerful, well-proportioned and harmonious, showing an overall beauty; in the loose part Appropriately intersperse some whole sentences in the text, and the sentences are scattered and scattered, which is very symmetrical and musical! It has both smooth melody and sonorous rhythm, which enhances the expression effect.

, if you can use a variety of sentence patterns, use them both in whole and in scattered parts, or in scattered parts, you can find parallels, staggered, and ups and downs; if you can describe objects, describe scenes, and narrate and reason, you can change your appearance and be good at each, you can give people a kind of Beauty.

Example 14: "My Feelings of Happiness"

Having youth is happiness. At the age of sixteen, I have plenty of time and plenty of money. Enthusiasm, abundant energy, to learn, to struggle, to create. With youth, I can imagine as much as I want, and with youth, I can be full of hope for the future. In the season of youth, we are unwilling to be lonely, with shyness, persistence, and enthusiasm. With turmoil and hard work, I want to plant the seeds of happiness in the season of youth.

The language is concise, smooth, the writing is beautiful, and the sentences are perfectly integrated, which reflects the quality of the writing. Flexibility, rich in phonological beauty, give your compositions vitality.

Only when you are well-spoken can you get high scores

Let your emotional pen flow out with beautiful words that touch your heart. .