Your lyrics are still a little short of professionalism. First, it doesn't rhyme. The lyrics are not suitable for chorus. If it is written in music, it will make people feel uncomfortable to sing. Second, the lyrics don't have to have the same number of words in every sentence, but they are worse and feel patchy. Third, feelings are not real enough and not enough investment. The full text seems empty, shouting slogans and writing too many feelings. At the same time, describe other things, which will make your lyrics more fluent. But it's good to write lyrics for the first time. I hope everyone will continue to cheer! Write the perfect lyrics ~ ~