1. The author of this article is good at thinking. First of all, briefly introduce the story of the article I read, grasp the main idea of the story-the importance of perseverance, and further elaborate the truth that "life is like a ladder, only by perseverance can we reach the end and succeed" A profound experience is a good feeling after reading it.

It can be seen from your composition that you have firmly memorized and deeply understood all the stories in the book "Grass House", and the writing technique is very delicate. You have completely highlighted the brave and tenacious spirit of Sang Sang, and compared it with yourself, so that I can see it at a glance.

You use parallelism many times in your composition to enhance your tone and deepen your feelings. You compare your case with Sang Sang, which highlights Sang Sang's bravery. At the same time, quote famous sayings and lyrics appropriately to make the composition more vivid. Transitions between segments are also natural.

4. The careful description of inner activities and ingenious care before and after prove that you have mastered certain writing skills. From your article, I seem to see Ba Jin in 2 1 century! "

I understand your emotional pain very well. Thankfully, you are a strong child, a sensible child, because you have written such a touching masterpiece. I'm glad to have a student like you. As long as you grasp today, your future will be beautiful and happy.