It emphasizes the first impression. "A good beginning is half the battle", so pay attention to the beginning when writing.
The beginning of anna karenine has been revised more than ten times, and finally it is defined as "all happy families are similar, and each unhappy family is unhappy in its own way". Usually there are several shortcomings at the beginning of a composition: 1, unnecessary explanation; For example, in articles with the theme of "sunshine" and "doting", many of our students like to start with the following words: "sunshine means …" and "doting means …". I want to ask: these concepts are very clear to everyone, why should we explain them again? Or you can't understand this concept yourself. How do you explain it? 2, platitudes Some articles always proceed from the situation, saying "under the leadership of * *, with the support and care of * *, with the help of * *". Some articles always start with "the sun", "the moon" and "time flies, the sun flies". These songs are always sung, and these routines become boring cliches.
3. Write by letter and pen No matter what the topic requires, don't ask what the center is, just write your thoughts, or as long as the sentences are beautiful or you think they are "cool". For example, colorful colors are beautiful because they don't distinguish each color. A song "Days of Our Lives" tells us that the beauty of life lies not in its variety.
"Be like a brick" 4. Mystifying, beating around the bush, getting into the subject too slowly, top-heavy. 5. Copying raw materials or quoting retelling is not concise, and the central topic is "I can't call it out for a long time". 6. The starting price is too high to succeed. 7. The quotation is wrong, or there is a typo in the opening paragraph.
8. At the beginning, some articles started suddenly, lacking proper explanation, and seemed sudden, mindless and unintelligible. For example, some articles have no "feeling" at first.
At the beginning of writing a composition, I said, "After reading this material, I have a profound experience ..." It was too sudden to write like this without mentioning the content of the material. 9. Articles with repeated beginnings can only have one beginning, but some articles have two beginnings.
For example, some articles originally wanted to start with a quote, but after they were finished, they thought it was better to talk about the topic, so they started again. Some articles introduce the background at the beginning, and then feel that the center of the article should be revealed first after writing, so they start again.
So there will be two beginnings. In this case, according to the requirements of the topic or the center, start with one of them.
10, the main purpose of landscape painting for the blind is to highlight the theme, or depict the characters, or set off the atmosphere. If it has nothing to do with this, generally speaking, such landscape painting is meaningless. Some articles really don't need to start with "flowers", "birds" and "grass".
2. How to guide students to write the beginning and end of the composition? Through group communication, we can draw some conclusions.
The crested leopard tail is only a stylization of composition, a standard in a sense, a form of beginning and end, and it is not necessary to pursue it excessively. If it's all the same, it's meaningless. At the beginning, we should focus on the main idea of writing to stimulate readers' desire to read. Correct the beginning of students' stereotypes, such as "Today, remember, whenever …", etc., and look for bright spots at the beginning of students' exercises to make students' exercises concise and personalized. As Mr. Buhe said, with a little prompting and prompting, the beginning of students' exercises can return to "conciseness", "clarity", "classics" and "personalization", which belongs to you. Teacher Qi Shijian said: At the beginning of a good composition, its language and skills should give people a distinct feeling, and its part should show some views on the topic, but it should not be too prescriptive about how to write, which will kill many future writers.
Personally, I think our teacher should give some suggestions on the ending method, such as:
The summative ending is at the end of the article, summarizing the performance and personality of the characters written.
Praise ending at the end, praise the character's character with eulogizing sentences, highlight and point out the center.
The lyric ends at the end, confessing your praise, praise and admiration for the characters.
At the end of the discussion, I used a discussion sentence to explain my views and opinions on the characters I wrote and strengthen the center of the article.
This kind of ending, like the summative ending, is the most common and easy to master.
The above methods should be aimed at students, and the principle should be clear to students. That is, no matter which ending method is adopted, the key points are as follows: to the point-to grasp the key points and complete the theme; Concise-concise and lively, strong and powerful; Taste-long aftertaste and endless aftertaste.
3. How to teach the initial composition in the third grade of primary school? It is very important for junior three students to learn to write a composition, lay a foundation and get started. But what if you haven't learned it before? Let me talk about my teaching process, hoping to inspire you. First, the teacher should read the composition in the first class, preferably by himself. This will make students have a perceptual understanding of the composition. Then tell the students that writing is to write down what you see, think, hear and do for others to understand. Then hand out the composition book, find a composition first, and teach students to copy a deviation according to the requirements of copying. You should pay attention to it, even if it is plagiarism. Also pay attention to punctuation. You can teach writing next week. Let the students read the model essay first. Then tell them what is the beginning of the composition. Then you can teach them to write the beginning. First, teach them to write by pointing out the theme. For example, my mother is a hardworking and kind mother. Just tell the students to grasp the main points in the topic. This topic is mother. You can write the word mother in the title. Then you can give an example. Students can write: I have a beautiful pencil box. Next class, we can continue to teach the end of the composition. Also, you can point directly to the topic. For example, "mom" can be written at the end. My mother is so hardworking and kind, and I love her. For example, a pencil case can be written at the end: I like my pencil case because it is my good friend. Next week, I can teach it. Tell the students how hardworking and kind your mother is. When writing a pencil box, let the students write the structure of the pencil box and how to cherish it. Well, the writing of junior three students is the beginning. As a teacher, you should be patient and meticulous. We should let students start writing slowly. In addition, we should pay attention to cultivating students' interest in writing! I wish you success!
4. How do primary school students write the beginning and end of a composition? The beginning and end of the composition are important positions for the marking teacher to read. Therefore, creating a wonderful beginning and ending will make the article appear "bright spots", thus attracting the attention of the marking teacher and improving the score of his composition.
Write a wonderful beginning, love at first sight:
The ancients called the beginning of the article "phoenix head", which means that the beginning should be beautiful, exquisite, novel, appropriate, creative, shocking and attractive, so that the marking teacher fell in love at first sight and felt eager to try and then quickly. So before writing, you must think carefully, think carefully and be accurate.
(a) Design inscriptions, new eyes and ears
If there is a "friend, I want to say thank you", it begins like this:
Fate, let me know you in September when osmanthus flowers are in full bloom; Dream, let me and you spit in the scorching sun in June. My friend, in the four springs when I went to Qiu Lai with you, friendship made me cherish it all the more. You make my gloomy days wonderful, you make me discover the beauty of life, and you make me proud and humble. Everything, let me follow the footsteps of walking with you.
In this article, the examinee ingeniously set an inscription in front of the text, which not only rendered a strong atmosphere, but also set a lyric tone for the full text; At the same time, it implicitly explained the reason of "I want to say thank you" and skillfully interpreted the title. And the sentence pattern is neat, literary, infectious and attractive.
(2) This is what the words mean, and the winding path leads to a secluded place.
For example, the composition "Beautiful Life" with a perfect score in the senior high school entrance examination begins:
Some people like to compare life to a road, some people like to compare life to a glass of wine, and some people signal that life is like a mess. I like to compare life to flowers.
After laying out others' understanding of life, the little author changed the subject and showed his point of view: "I like to compare life to flowers." The main part of this entry can be described as saying this, meaning that, playing hard to get, winding path and endless charm.
(3) Pave the floor, arrange the details and get ready to go.
There is an article entitled "Door", which begins like this:
Green pushed open the door of spring.
Thunderstorm pushed open the door of summer.
Fruit pushed open the door of autumn.
Xue Rui pushed open the door of winter.
Books open the door to knowledge.
Wisdom pushes open the door of ideal.
Ideal has opened the door to success.
Listen, there are doors everywhere. ...
At the beginning, the author uses eight conjunctions with the same structure and profound meaning, which endows the unique meaning of "door" from different angles, which not only reveals the rich meaning of "door", but also forms a progressive and unstoppable momentum, which naturally leads to the theme of "pushing the door of life" below.
(d) Objects of interest secretly cross their positions.
I have seen a painting called
"Forever Love" left a deep impression on me from the beginning:
The morning sun came out and the lake clothed it; The new moon rises and the stars accompany it; Spring blossoms and green leaves set off; Birds are singing, crickets are accompanying them ... Everything in the world is telling us the story of love.
In this paper, the author starts with natural phenomena, describes that many things in nature are full of "care", and personifies these things by personification. Then you don't have to look at it to know that you must transition to the related theme of "care between people", such as water fashion, and write it naturally.
(5) Ask thought-provoking questions.
There is an excellent composition for middle school students, which is simple but not simple, and lists various phenomena and points of "simple but not simple".
After analyzing the dialectical relationship between simplicity and non-simplicity, at the end of the article, the author writes:
Each of us has both simplicity and non-simplicity. The question is what kind of simplicity and non-simplicity we should pursue.
What do you say, my friend?
Here, the author skillfully puts forward the important proposition of "what kind of simplicity and non-simplicity to pursue", which arouses readers' deep thinking and inspires people to make correct choices and pursue meaningful life. Although the author didn't say it clearly, it was thought-provoking and alarming.
How to teach students to write their compositions vividly is a long-standing problem.
Students even complained to me: "It is difficult to write a composition, but it is difficult in heaven." In order to solve this problem, after several years of teaching exploration, I started from three aspects: content, emotion and writing, and guided students to improve their writing level by strengthening observation, reading and writing.
First, something is the premise of "a clever woman can't cook without rice", and so is the composition. How to write if there is no goods in your stomach? How can students keep the goods in their stomachs? There are two ways: one is to find things, and the other is to borrow things. 1. Find things: enter life and accumulate materials.
"Ask the canal that clear? Because there is running water at the source. " This source, living water, is everything around us.
Life is the best teacher. What Chinese teachers need to do is to guide students to learn to observe-observe people around them, observe things around them, and observe the scenery around them. Specifically, it is to guide students to appreciate the flowers and trees, green mountains and green waters, sun, moon and stars in nature with their own eyes; Is to guide students to appreciate the high-rise buildings in the city and the small bridges and flowing water in the countryside; It is to guide students to feel the vitality of spring, the strength of summer, the joy of autumn and the harshness of winter. It is to guide students to catch the loud selling of urban hawkers with their heart; It is to guide students to feel their mother's gentle nagging ... once, I asked students to be a classmate in the class, but I wanted to hide the name of that classmate. The excellent standard is that students can infer who the author is from the text.
Therefore, students are eager to know their image in other students' minds, so they are very interested in this kind of writing training-many times, students "find out" the writing object of the article in laughter before writing the composition, and the teaching effect is very good. Later, while the iron was hot, I designed a series of writing contents, such as describing teachers and stars.
Sometimes, I also put a short film for students to describe. In this way, through observation and training, students have fun in observation, and the first goal of my composition teaching has been achieved.
2. Borrow things: expand reading and store materials. How to borrow things? We must hire another teacher's book.
Books are the crystallization of human wisdom, and reading is a spiritual feast to enjoy wisdom. The book contains the sadness that Qu Yuan was driven away, the lofty sentiments of Li Bai, Du Fu's concern for the country and the people, Lu You's Jin Goma Iron, Su Shi's River of No Return, Liu Yong's Xiao Feng's Canyue, Lu Xun's coldness, Zhu Ziqing's freshness and Lao She's simplicity ... There are countless stories and endless scenery, all kinds of joys and sorrows, all kinds of beautiful scenery.
Because, people who have never experienced it can experience it from books, people who have never seen it can see it from books, and people who have never experienced it can experience it from books ... It is no exaggeration to say that "reading a good book means living longer". In teaching, I collected many famous articles with the same theme on the Internet and arranged them into different series, such as parents series, hometown series, friendship series and chanting series. And forward it to students for reading.
Through several such special reading trainings, students have absorbed more or less the writing nourishment of excellent writers-although the imitated articles have traces of axes, their thoughts and narrative techniques have made great progress. In this way, through reading training, students not only have fun in reading, but also accumulate writing materials, and the second purpose of my composition teaching has also been realized.
Second, emotion is the basis of composition teaching, and teachers should guide students to actively participate in composition teaching activities. Specifically, let students feel when writing, don't spit, and have the desire to write.
"I write my heart by hand" is the basis of writing a good article. Teachers should encourage students to speak with their own voice and personality, write their own unique life and feelings, and express their own unique real feelings and experiences.
A really good article lies not in the number of words, but in saying what you want to say and making your meaning clear. I once asked students to write an article "My Mother".
A student wrote about his mother's hand in the article-taking the white and tender hand of his mother in childhood memory and the rough hand of his mother now covered with veins stood out as clues, he described an image of a hardworking and kind mother for us. In class, I saw this article and many students cried.
Because their mother worked hard for them day and night like that. It can be seen that students learn to observe life and understand the way of writing while expressing the theme of the article with details.
Third, writing is assistant 1. Draw up a good topic. A good article title can immediately attract readers' attention.
For example, borrowing lyrics can be titled "I blindfolded you quietly"; Clever idioms can be titled "Funny' horizontal' life"-a brief introduction to the usage of the word "horizontal"; Using homonym, it can be titled "Starting from' Heart'". 2. Choose beautiful words.
Choosing appropriate, implicit, vivid and vivid words can give people the feeling of listening to their voices, observing their shapes and being there, thus enhancing the appeal of the article. For example, the word "Pai" in Kong Yiji's Pai is very vivid.
In addition, the words used in classical poetry are often subtle and can achieve their own goals. 3. Cleverly arrange the structure of the article.
For example, an article that is good at plot, if written in flashbacks or suspense, will have a strong artistic appeal. Such as necklaces, Maggie's gifts, etc. The story ends in * * *, and the unexpected ending really makes the article have a profound expression effect.
4. Use rhetoric skillfully. In classical poetry, sentences with clever use of rhetoric abound.
For example, it is also writing about sorrow. "White hair is three thousands of feet, and sorrow grows ten feet" is writing about sorrow. "Asking how much sorrow you can have is like a river flowing eastward" is also writing about sorrow. "I am afraid that two streams can't carry much sorrow" is also writing about sorrow. Obviously, the clever use of rhetoric in the article can not only add rich and vivid meanings to the composition, but also achieve the artistic expression effect of turning plain into magic.
6. How can primary school students write the opening composition well and learn it well?
Steps/methods
Let's start with an eye-catching topic. I think everyone has seen Conan. The title is like a suspense film, which makes people curious about this topic.
1. The beginning should be as small and exquisite as the phoenix head. If you have writing skills, you can extract a paragraph. Because writing skills are generally exquisite and meaningful. It can be written as a small parallelism sentence. If you want to write in the past, it is suggested to add something like "memory has fallen into, just visit again".
2. The middle should be as full as pork belly. Describe it in detail. There are four ways to write: appearance, movement, language and psychology. Generally, you use more language and psychology, so you can describe things in detail. When writing a composition, concrete examples can best reflect the quality of the characters. Specific cases are also called "typical cases". When writing a scene, describe it in order. It is not necessary to describe every scene in great detail, but there are details. The scenery can be vividly written by metaphor and personification. It is good to write imaginary compositions. If you fantasize about the future, write some imaginary advanced instruments into your composition.
The end of the article should be as short and powerful as a leopard's tail. Expand your thinking according to the result of the matter. Never put inappropriate labels, otherwise, no matter how well you write at the beginning, the grade of your composition will be dragged down by the end of the article.
Matters needing attention
? Don't write wrong words.
? Don't digress.
7. How to teach students to write a good composition 1, the topic should be novel. For example, writing a happy life is useful for 60 points, with an annual taste of 75 points. If you don't want to celebrate the New Year for 80 points, you will celebrate the New Year for 85 points every year.
2, the angle should be clever. If you write the same year, you can write the annual series "No gifts this year"; Wrote the New Year's Eve dinner "The stars are not bright tonight"; Write about setting off firecrackers and "reliving old dreams" ...
3. The language should be new. I'm not talking about using online language, but using my own language and personality.
4. The structure should be changed. Please don't use "three paragraphs" in paragraphs, and please don't use direct narration in narration.
5. Small but new. It is easy to be empty, shallow, false and flat when it is big; Talking too much is easy to get confused, confused, confused. Don't say what others have said, that is to say, change the word and taste.
6. The draft should be changed aside.
8. How can I write the beginning and end of a composition? Teaching goal: through guidance, let students understand what kind of beginning and ending are good, and how to do it well when writing.
Teaching time arrangement: Section 6 Teaching time Section 1 Teaching time Teaching objectives: Through guidance, students can master several writing methods at the beginning of narrative and use them flexibly to some extent. Teaching process: 1. This paper introduces and inspects articles at all times and at home and abroad, and its basic structure is mainly three paragraphs, namely, head, middle and tail.
Yuan Manqiao Meng Fu said that writing articles needs a "phoenix head": small and exquisite, short and pithy; "Pork belly": rich in content, strong and handsome, full and large in capacity; "Leopard tail": crisp and neat, sonorous and powerful. The ancients compared the beginning of an article to a "phoenix head" to emphasize the importance of the opening, especially in the examination room where the marking time is very limited. If you can have an ingenious and refreshing beginning, your article will certainly add a lot of color, stand out from many compositions, win the favor of the marking teacher, and your impression will naturally be high.
This is the reason why the so-called "phoenix head is better than a hundred beauties". Today, let's take a look at how to make a good beginning of a composition.
Second, the specific methods Here, I will introduce you to several methods of narrative opening: (1) Cut to the chase, point out the events to be described without any modification, giving people a clean, lively and breathing feeling. I haven't seen my father for more than two years, and what I can't forget most is his back.
-Zhu Ziqing's "Back" is the most unforgettable thing for me, Mr. Cai, a female teacher in my primary school. -Wei Wei "My Teacher" Poplar is really extraordinary. I praise poplars.
-Mao Dun's "Praise of Poplar" The grove in autumn is indifferent. -"Autumn Woods" oral practice: "Teacher" and "First Time" (2) Description of the environment and description of the atmosphere, such as: an early autumn night, the breeze is blowing slowly, and the night is charming.
-The Farewell Gift stands on the hill about ten miles east of Lintong County, next to the misty Lushan Mountain, which is the tomb of Qin Terracotta Warriors and Horses. -"Terracotta Warriors" P66 "Daming Lake" Oral Practice: "My Best Friend" and "The Taste I Taste" (3) Deepening the discussion of the theme, lyrical methods such as: Every day in North Korea, I am moved by something; The tide of my thoughts is flowing freely; This makes me want to tell my friends in my motherland everything ...-Who is the cutest person? Oral practice: childhood memories, growth (4) Famous aphorisms, poetry quotations, such as P27, feeling the seven customs, P45, beginning and end, P48. This is a positive oral practice: Example (5) Have you climbed mountains, swam and eaten fat carp in your hometown? "Oral Practice:" Unexpected Harvest "(6) There are two methods, first suppression and then promotion, and first suppression and then promotion. The emotional tone of the opening is opposite or opposite to the text, and the article is given in a contrasting way at the beginning, which makes the article feel colorful, colorful, intriguing and artistic.
Suitable for lyric prose. Like litchi honey.
I always listen to my deskmate talk about my mother, how she cares and how considerate she is. Where is my mother? Care about me? Cherish me Maybe it is.
However, I think she is an unlovable mother. You won't believe it, so please listen to me.
-Exercise "Unhappy Mother" Oral Practice: "My" Third, the principle to be followed at the beginning: 1. Centrality. At the beginning, we must closely follow the main content and central idea of the full text in order to highlight the center.
2. simple. Language should be concise, and it is best to come straight to the point.
Fourth, frequently asked questions at the beginning: 1. Beating around the bush is thousands of miles away. I always beat around the bush when I put pen to paper.
Some people compare it to a big-headed doll. 2. The same format is fixed.
Just a few words at the beginning. 3. Pursuing tricks is self-defeating.
It is well written, and the expression of thoughts and feelings is unclear, unclear and untrue. Example: There are two pleasant things and one unpleasant thing in my summer vacation. Let's talk about the happy things first.
-"My Summer Life" My class is a civilized class. Everyone thinks it's good, but I think it has both good and bad sides, but on the whole, I still think it's good, but it's a little bad and more good. Student unity is good, but some students often violate discipline.
So I think it is still a good class. -The second teaching goal of My Classroom: On the basis of appreciating the beautiful beginning, try to create the beginning of different modes.
Teaching process: First, review the common starting methods. Second, appreciate excellent works. Throughout the full-mark composition of the senior high school entrance examination, there is a * * * nature, that is, they all have a floating shell and a novel and refined beginning. (1) The introduction method of the inscription begins with the inscription, or expounds the reasons for writing, or leads to the content, or reveals the purpose of the text. Its language is usually concise and philosophical.
It is pleasing to see through its bright spot and touch its emotional pulse. Example: Days are like fine sand in your hands. If you are not careful, you will pass through your fingers one by one and never look back.
Looking up at the sky (comparing the sky to the smooth and slow sand in the palm of your hand can give people a feeling of being suddenly enlightened. The sand itself is very dynamic and beautiful, pointing out the essence of a day, which is apt and full of philosophy. Then the author examines the messy fragments of the day with the method of stream of consciousness, and thinks about the topic of growth with an introspective attitude, which is integrated with the inscription. )
Ex.: Thank God for giving mankind this wonderful feeling: intoxication. In fact, when you are tired, don't forget to leave yourself a sky that makes your heart wander. -"Drunk" (At the beginning, the author explained his understanding of drunkenness by inscription: it is not only a state of satisfaction, but also a kind of enjoyment and a spiritual rest.
Beautiful words, more beautiful meaning. (2) The application of image superposition method The high-level image superposition should be regarded as Ma Zhiyuan's masterpiece in Yuanqu. The eternal swan song "A withered vine and an old tree faint crow, a small bridge flowing water", with a simple word 12, will vividly express the sad and distant artistic conception.
This method of putting words related to personnel and scenery together almost without modification can often make the tone of the article very tense and elastic, and play four roles.