Composition topic: The composition topic in the Chinese language test paper of the second unified examination for senior high school students in Xiaogan City in 2011: Read the following materials and compose as required (60 points)

There is a contemporary poet in The poem reads:

I don’t think about whether I can succeed/Since I have chosen the far away place/I only care about the ups and downs

I don’t think about whether I can win love/Since I love roses/ Just speak your sincerity bravely

I don’t think about whether there will be cold wind and rain behind me/Since the target is the horizon/All that is left to the world is my back

I won’t go Think about whether the future will be flat or muddy/as long as you love life/everything is expected

Please choose the right angle and write an essay based on your understanding and experience of the above materials

Requirements: Choose your own style and write your own title (please write the title on the answer sheet), no less than 800 words

Evaluation Guidance The material in this question is selected from the poet Wang Guozhen’s representative work "Love Life" from Looking at the poem itself, it is a philosophical poem

First of all, we must understand the philosophy contained in the poem. The four philosophical paragraphs of the poem expressing why we should love life with four affirmative answers seem to be similar. , but each has its own interest. The four paragraphs are respectively analyzed and answered around the four key words "success", "love", "struggle" and "future". What is loved in the poem is not the final success and the happy ending of the future, but the The acquisition of love and the realization of the goal of struggle. The love overflowing in the poem is actually a process and a pursuit. "Through thick and thin", "expressing sincerity"... these are all manifestations of love. Loving life is not because of wanting. Love to gain, but gain in the end because of love. In one sentence, life must have a goal. Although there are bound to be bumps and thorns on the road, as long as you persist, work hard, and pay attention to the process, you will be able to see a rainbow after the storm

Secondly, we need to understand the logical relationship between the poems. For example, in the first stanza of the poem, "I chose the distant place" (having ideals), this is the premise; "I don't think about whether I can succeed", regardless of the result, it is the attitude. ; "Just take care of the wind and rain", never look back and persevere. This is action. Just like the fourth stanza of the poem, "As long as you love life", this is the premise; "I don't think about whether the future will be flat or muddy", that is, in the process of loving life In the process, don't be afraid of ups and downs, setbacks, twists and turns, and fight tenaciously. This is your attitude; "Everything is expected", this is the result. When choosing a certain point of intention, you cannot ignore the other two aspects

According to the prompts, we can choose the most deeply felt point in the poem to formulate the intention, such as "Choose the distance as the goal of life", "Pursue persistently for a goal", "Love life", "Pursue the excitement of the process without caring about the result", etc. to write a narrative. Write stories about the difficulties you encountered in study and life and how you set goals, persisted unswervingly, and finally achieved success; when writing argumentative essays, you can combine examples of typical people in life and publish "How can you see things without going through wind and rain?" Thoughts on "Rainbow"... No matter which style of writing you choose, it is recommended to come up with a novel and eye-catching title. It is also very important to give the marking teacher the first aesthetic feeling

Never Give Up in Examination Composition

Wang Anshi said in "A Journey to Baochan Mountain": "The wonders, weirdness, and extraordinary views of the world often lie in the danger and distance, so those who are not determined cannot reach it." Yes, the infinite scenery is on the dangerous peak, and there is no eternal scenery. How can a strong will that gives up "be able to stand at the top of the mountain and see all the mountains and small mountains at a glance"? Mountain climbing requires you to never give up, and the same applies to other things in life. (The beginning of the chapter is a quote from the text I have learned, showing the author’s familiarity with the textbook; using mountain climbing to expand on the scenery, you also need to never give up when doing other things. , clasped the title)

Never give up, only then can you survive until the clouds open and the moon shines. Jet Li is a famous Chinese film and television actor, but he is not the darling of fate. He became famous overnight by filming the movie "Shaolin Temple" at the age of 18. , but he broke his leg the next year; after finally waiting for the "Once Upon a Time" series of movies to become popular, his agent was shot dead again, and his career fell into a trough again... When his career did not go well again and again, time and time again Jet Li also experienced pain and hesitation when he fell, but he understood that the difficulties that forced him to despair were not the reasons for him to become stronger?

From the perspective of "dedication to science", examples of Copernicus, Nobel, Marie Curie, etc. are listed and analyzed and demonstrated)

When we choose to devote ourselves to art, do not think about the flowers or flowers behind us. Leng Yu, only cares about the ups and downs. "My life is to prepare for the stage!" I still remember what Wei Haimin, a famous Taiwanese Peking Opera actress, said about herself. Wei Haimin entered Taiwan Haiguang Drama School at the age of 10 and has been associated with the Peking Opera stage for 40 years. From the school's brightest From a small star to the head of the Haiguang Chinese Opera Troupe, to a performing artist at home and abroad, she has used her diligence and sweat to constantly surpass herself on the road of art. She doesn't care about pain or success, since she has chosen art. No matter how far the journey is, we will only care about the wind and rain. Because of this, Wei Haimin has reached the pinnacle of stage art (from the perspective of "dedication to art", examples of Wei Haimin are listed and analyzed)

When we choose to devote ourselves to the motherland, we should not think about whether the road ahead will be cold wind or thorns. We only care about the wind and rain. Deng Jiaxian went through countless hardships for the motherland's scientific and technological cause and resolutely returned to the embrace of the motherland. He chose Deep in the desert, isolated from the world, he only focused on studying the nuclear industry. Due to long-term exposure to radioactive elements, he was severely radiated. But even at the last moment of his life, he was still thinking about the numbers on the manuscript paper to calculate atoms, and he was concerned about the interests of his motherland. Choosing to devote himself to the motherland, no matter how many difficulties and dangers he faced, no matter how many years and vicissitudes he had, he only cared about the ups and downs. Deng Jiaxian did it. His life was really a tragic song of triumph! He devoted his whole life to the motherland, and explained the height of patriotism with the passion of life! (The examples of Deng Jiaxian are listed and analyzed from the perspective of "dedication to the country")

Today, when we choose to study for the rejuvenation of the nation, we must use the enthusiasm of youth to light the torch of life, Don’t think about whether the future will be flat or muddy, whether it will be success or failure. Since we have chosen the bright distance, we only care about the wind and rain. Only in this way can we sail towards the bright distance and let the ancient Chinese nation be rejuvenated and strong in our hands (connected with reality) It expresses determination and has strong practical significance)

No matter what kind of distance we choose, don’t think about whether it will be successful or not, just focus on the ups and downs and believe that our future is not a dream (summarize the full text, look forward to the future in reference to the beginning, and deepen Center)

Basic level of overall evaluation: From the content point of view, the center of the article is prominent, consistent with the meaning of the topic, and the examples are enriched. The article is written according to the idea of ??"introduction-argument-connection-conclusion". The author first quotes the title material The poem puts forward the central argument, which is "introduction". Then, the author adopts a horizontal discussion method, formulates three sub-arguments from different angles based on the central argument, and conducts a brief analysis based on the materials and examples one by one. This It is "argument" and then the author connects with real life, enriching the content of the article. This is "linkage". Finally, the author outlines the three sub-arguments in one sentence, reiterates the central argument and looks forward to the future. This is "knot" from the expression From the looks of it, the language of the article is fluent, the structure is clear and complete, and the stylistic features are distinctive. It is a decent argumentative essay

Development level: The content of the article is relatively substantial. In terms of selecting arguments, the author has achieved accuracy, typicality, and multiple perspectives. The specific application is detailed and brief, and the argument is closely followed. The shortcoming is that the argumentation method seems a bit single

Comprehensive score: 24 (content) + 22 (expression) + 8 (development) = 54 points

Three Choices for Examination Essays·No Regrets

People choose the right path to go, and flowers wither without regrets

——Inscription (the inscription is quite philosophical and reveals the main purpose of the article )

There are thousands of roads; but the road where faith and hope converge will allow you to walk on it without regrets in your life (the beginning is a bit simple, although the word "no regrets" refers to the title, but it is It has nothing to do with "choice")

"Natural in nature, not the result of hard work" Tao Yuanming chose the path of reclusiveness in nature. He pursued the idea of ??"helping the elderly to rest in exile, and arrogantly looking back at times". Doesn't he have the feeling of helping the world? Is he just escaping from reality? No! He "loves hills and mountains by nature", and he hopes to live a life of "picking chrysanthemums under the eastern fence and leisurely seeing the southern mountains". This is his choice. Even if his relatives and friends do not understand, even if his life is in embarrassment, and even if the government warmly invites him, he still "leads the pot" drink from oneself

"Determination", insisting on his choice and proudly saying that he has no regrets (taking Tao Yuanming as an example, the analysis closely focuses on "choice" and "no regrets", making up for the shortcomings of the first paragraph)

"Finally found it! "Yuan Longping happily held up a rice plant. That rice plant is the world-famous hybrid rice. He, a college student who jumped out of agriculture, returned to the farmland to study grain. His behavior was not understood by others, but this was his choice. He has been working silently for ten years, failing again and again, and starting over again and again. His persistence has ushered in his success. Someone asked him if he regretted his choices, but he was full of joy. His smile shows the world that he has no regrets (two examples of Yuan Longping increase the strength of the confirmation)

"Don't abandon, don't give up", this seems to be Wang Baoqiang's portrayal of never abandoning dreams and never giving up hope. The days of learning martial arts are tiring, and the days of wandering around are hard, but with persistence in his dreams, he moves forward with high spirits on the path he chooses. Maybe he is not the brightest star, but he chooses his path. Continue the dream with no regrets, and create brilliance with youth. (Three examples of Wang Baoqiang. From the use cases, the three examples have not changed much in the selection of materials. They are ancient and modern, but not Chinese and foreign. You can delete the text and combine it into a parallel paragraph, but it is listed like this! Suspicious of examples)

A short-lived flash in the pan always leaves people with regrets that cannot be continued. But this is the path it chooses. It uses gorgeous flowers to show the no regrets of life

Populax euphratica Standing in the desert, it resists the wind and sand with its tall body. It is lonely, but this is its choice. He shows us with persistence that beauty can be created without regrets (after the examples of people mentioned above, let’s take examples of plants in nature. , to expand the scope of material selection and enhance persuasiveness)

There are millions of roads; there is only one choice, no matter whether the road in the future is flat or muddy, whether it is full of flowers or full of thorns, whether it is full of laughter or laughter. If you feel melancholy and sad for a long time, it’s all your choice! Now that you have chosen, don’t care about success or failure, don’t care about praise or ridicule, don’t care about sunny days or dark clouds, because choose without regrets and act without regrets! Paragraphs and inscriptions highlight the theme)

Go on the road with persistence in dreams and pursuit of the future, savoring the ups and downs along the way. When we reach the end of the road, we can say loudly: No regrets! There is no mountain higher than a person, and there is no road longer than a person. Walk towards the horizon and let the world comment on your back! Basic level: From the content point of view, this article has real emotions and is an argumentative prose. The author chose the two most experienced keywords of "choice" and "no regrets" as the main body of his argument, and developed an argument around them with examples. The selection of examples is accurate. , the typical ones also closely follow the arguments. The shortcomings are that the character examples cannot be selected from different levels and different angles, and the freshness is not enough. The argumentation method is relatively single, which reduces the persuasiveness. From the expression point of view, the language of the article is fluent and has a certain degree. In order to be more speculative, some transitional sentences can be added to the connection between paragraphs to make the structure more compact

Development level: The language of the article is more literary. First, whole sentences are used more often, and parallelism or antithesis is formed in many places. The sentence structure combines the whole text with intricate beauty, and makes the reading ups and downs, and the second is that the sentences have connotations, such as "People choose the right way to go, and the flowers wither without regrets" and "There is no mountain higher than people. Sentences such as "Longer Feet" contain rich connotations and are worth savoring

Comprehensive score: 20 (content) + 20 (expression) + 10 (development) = 50 points